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A Sailor's Warning

~The sun sizzles on the horizon like a fried egg in a cast iron skillet. Yellow yolk bleeding across the treetops. Semi-solid seeping across the backlit hardwood forest. The dusky branches of maple and blue black pitchy pines dress in liquid light, a sailors warning… The air, wool muffler thick, smothers the early eve. Drought burns the landscape and the wilt is on the lilac. Gnats flitter, lighter than the dense layers of ashen evening. Sucking creatures invade the weakness in branch, leaf and man. And so the malaise of August continues into night gasping~

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Date: 8/17/2010 12:35:00 PM
Soup mail Deb---I like this poem better each time I read it. Especially the second verse with its "flittering gnats". I Hate, hate, hate those things when I'm outside, soaked to the waist. Charles
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Date: 8/10/2010 2:17:00 PM
Good Evening Deborah I hope you are well , The malaise of August makes me think how lazy and lovely summer is . Thanks for your comments its a true poem that for me , please will you read The Code Coma Cheers much Love , Ta
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Date: 8/9/2010 7:05:00 AM
Intense one Debbie.. luv your opening lines and the fried egg in a caste iron skillet is the core of this rare beauty.. good one TEACH.. have a happy day ..appreciate your sweet and swell comments and we are headed to the beach again for more R&R before the rush begins..haha..luv.. u enjoy your day as well.. pupil...with luv..
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Date: 8/9/2010 6:53:00 AM
aah~ so this is free verse~ well wow~ this poem is just beautiful in every way a poem can be considered beautiful~ you inspire me with your purple words(wink wink)~~
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Date: 8/9/2010 6:38:00 AM
Smile? ~ "Hello Dear Lovely & Gifted Debra Guzzi" ~ It's been awhile dear and I hope that life is treating "You" beautifully!!! ~ You know I read this through twice and it seemed more intense the second time and, the ending; that discomfort? Not good! But, I am certain that All shall be well and or, I surely hope it shall!!? I love the vastness of "Your Creative, Bold & Bright Verse!!!" ~ "Much Love & Warmth to You, & All You Love," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very Beautiful Day Dear Debra;" Bye!:) ~
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Date: 8/9/2010 6:32:00 AM
well written poem, enjoyed reading today!
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