A Sailor's Lie Premiere Contest Winner

Wistful falls the shadow of a fading moon
’neath its flowing robe of melancholy
Lurk skeletons of love’s affairs undone
Salted carcasses of long withered souls

Grim sands ever deepening depression
Swallowing the vessels scant remains
Soon to deny loves eerie presence
Muffled in surf’s windblown shroud

Some say they see the gloomy spectre
Sense the emptiness of tattered sails
Soft billowing of love’s pure kiss withdrawn
Aground upon the battered rocks of feelings

And yet the lover’s haunt the tortured coastline
As breaking waves erase a sailor’s lie.

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Date: 6/29/2023 11:28:00 AM
John, congratulations on your win! Your imagery is just superb, So original. It carries each line like waves on an in-coming tide. Wonderful writing! Blessings!
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Date: 6/29/2023 10:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! I liked your finish: "As breaking waves erase a sailor's lie."
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Date: 6/23/2023 10:13:00 PM
Brilliant! Warmest congratulations on your trophy win, John
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Date: 6/22/2023 5:58:00 AM
Ah this is absolutely stunning John. A great write and a well-deserved top placement! Congratulations! :)
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Date: 6/21/2023 4:51:00 PM
Congratulations John! Your wonderful descriptive poem "A Sailor's Lie" earned you “First” place in my contest.” Very well done, my friend, Emile.
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Date: 6/19/2023 8:14:00 PM
Fantastic, descriptive imagery and word flow, John! I enjoyed this very much! Blessings, Kim M
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John Lawless
Date: 6/21/2023 6:50:00 PM
thanks Kim glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 6/19/2023 1:36:00 PM
a dark tale of lost love, the imagery is outstanding John. hugs jan xx
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John Lawless
Date: 6/21/2023 6:49:00 PM
thanks jan, it was an interesting group of words to play with.
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