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A Response To Slipping Away

Do not lose hope; I’m coming home to you. although you’re far away, I swear I hear the desperation in your song so blue. And in the dark, I see your face appear. It’s just as if I’d never left your side. Do not lose hope; I’m coming home to you. We need each other. Let’s forget our pride. I’m feeling you, Dear. Can you feel me too? There has to be a way to see this through. The pain we brought each other needs to end. Do not lose hope; I’m coming home to you. You are my sweetest lover and best friend. I hear your heartbeat, and your lyrics seem to shout your pain. Believe me, it’s all true. I’m slipping out my door. This is no dream. Do not lose hope. . . . I’m coming home to you. Written May 25, 2016 For the Slipping Away contest of Becca Teagan

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Date: 6/9/2016 4:46:00 PM
Congrats Andrea, for your WIN with this 7++.... piece!! ;-)
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Date: 6/6/2016 2:10:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! I enjoyed this. # 7 ; )
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Date: 6/3/2016 11:05:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea for another deserving placement...
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Date: 6/3/2016 10:19:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in my contest Andrea!
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Date: 5/29/2016 9:37:00 PM
As Arthur says, just beautiful.
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Date: 5/29/2016 12:11:00 AM
Sometimes "beautiful" suffices, this is one of those times! Loved it!
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Date: 5/28/2016 3:33:00 PM
Yep! It's a 7 b/c you did the difficult task of the genre, maths, and captured, beautifully, that OTHER PRESENCE feeling, where you can see their face before you! Their image interrupts your tasks. One is not sure if they are thinking of us or we are thinking of them. We can feel when it's empty and when it's full! You got it!
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Date: 5/28/2016 12:48:00 PM
Love the way this is written Andrea. Just a couple of reads today. Getting company for the weekend. love phyl
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Date: 5/27/2016 10:42:00 PM
Reminds me of line I wrote once"I can't remember anymore who drew first blood or what we were fighting about.I can only remember we loved. Do like your work more.
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Date: 5/27/2016 4:56:00 PM
I like the rhythm of the repeating line. There is a sweetness here that echoes throughout.
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Date: 5/27/2016 9:26:00 AM
A touching way to send the message of care and love to a heart that is in despair dear, Andrea! A seven!
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Date: 5/27/2016 8:17:00 AM
You expressed this well Andrea. I think Becca will be pleased.
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Date: 5/27/2016 12:00:00 AM
Very nice.
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Date: 5/26/2016 10:05:00 PM
Very pretty poem. After I read it my eyes wandered thru it picking out random lines to re-read. Very enjoyable to ponder as well as read. ...Fran
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Date: 5/26/2016 9:00:00 PM
Your poem of love in separation is expressed beautifully Andrea. The longing is palpable. This should do great in the contest. #7 ; )
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Date: 5/26/2016 5:24:00 PM
What makes true love succumb to fear. Maybe the whiskey and the beer. The Devil himself has found a way. To come between and cause dismay. If we get lost forever gone. For some there is not a new dawn. Hello Andrea.
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Date: 5/26/2016 3:37:00 PM
Reach out and touch someone--an old line from a telephone company ad. Your poem is beautiful. I am always amazed at how your work rings true!! You are an icon. I hope you are well.
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Date: 5/26/2016 3:14:00 PM
Great piece filled with emotion and promise. Wonderful flow. Nice job. God Bless, JB
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Date: 5/26/2016 2:01:00 PM
The flow of this poem carried me to the conclusion with great expectancy. Thanks
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Date: 5/26/2016 11:31:00 AM
I always believe that love can come back home...love your response on the song Andrea...have a great extended Memorial Day weekend. Is school out for the summer?
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Date: 5/26/2016 11:25:00 AM
Yay!!!I'm the first here.The construction of this piece is very alluring,it's as if the reader is gasping for hope from the first line,and then brilliant ending completes the poem in a grand way.Marvelous piece Andrea.
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