A Raven's Thirst - Part 2

II

Afar across cool waves on quiet shores,
beneath each rising sun her beauty grew,
as pure as falling snow, the skin she wore
aglow with radiance as sweet as dew.

Soft burnished raven tresses, black as night,
caressed her face then fell in silk cascade,
and honeyed tones adorned a voice, so light,
that echoed from blush lips in serenade.

As days and many months of time weaved on
she blossomed, as a rose of scent so rare,
yet of her many suitors she’d have none,
dismissed with gentle wave of hand so fair.

A lone and wistful silver moonlit stroll
unearths a song that strangely stirs her soul.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/30/2010 7:59:00 AM
You described her so beautifully, Sharon...especially loved your second stanza...but every word touches my heart...I'm going to fav all three parts and wait for more:) Emily
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Date: 8/27/2010 5:41:00 AM
enjoyed Sharon, keep writing and sharing.
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Date: 8/25/2010 6:13:00 AM
Hmmm very tastey read is there part 3 where the seed from the rotten raven births? You said the raven was bad yes? no? I wish we could see these on 1 page..I beat we can! Light & Love & wow gal are you doing great with the meter!
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Date: 8/24/2010 3:08:00 PM
There's a luring beckoning for the lady in this piece. Thoroughly enjoyable second part to this Sonnet series. The guys below summed it up, poetry at it's best >> James
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Date: 8/23/2010 6:57:00 PM
Sharon, I have to agree with Wayne below- this is poetry at its best! The way you weave the story with luxurious wording, intrigue and lovely meter that makes my heart sing. I'm curious now... is there more to come (I hope, I hope!) Just lovely! Always a pleasure to read your beautiful work. Hugs, Kris
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Date: 8/23/2010 11:35:00 AM
Amazing how you can write of what inspired you, Sharon. Deep and and a bliss of dark romance. Enjoyed,..p.d.
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Date: 8/23/2010 10:38:00 AM
Sharon: This is poetic poetry at its best. Love the way you intrigue your reader's to sought out the focust of the Poem. "A Raven's Thirst", this in itself is a rare quality that seperate poet ic chemistry from plain ordinary you Know (?) "Keep up the good-works....
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Date: 8/22/2010 2:49:00 PM
Excellent continuation of the series, Sharon. Can't wait to see her meet the raven-turned-man. Please let us know when it's posted. This is quite a tale! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/22/2010 11:40:00 AM
Excellent write again!!! nice follow up to first.. Always Michael
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Date: 8/22/2010 10:47:00 AM
That is really Soupmail, Sharon! Great poem! Really enjoyed the read!...Gert:)
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Date: 8/22/2010 10:14:00 AM
thanks for telling me that title of one I have not read yet. I will save it for something to respond to next time. haha. You sure have a GREAT memory! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/22/2010 9:09:00 AM
Oops sorry I had to postpone heading on here right away-- but here I am now & still loving the 2nd part!! I loved your vivid descriptions here-- this would be soo cool if you make this into a series or something for a book?? I do wonder how many parts it would be but no matter rest assured that I will be HOOKED on them-- aack but you better just email me the other installments ok, pretty please? thank you -- hugs --nikko :)
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Date: 8/22/2010 9:06:00 AM
Oh, I see this going to be spread out. You have made an "epic" in sonnet form!! Lovely idea, sharon. I enjoyed your descriptions of this lovely maiden. LUv,Andrea
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Date: 8/22/2010 5:02:00 AM
Nice thoughts well expressed, Sharon
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Date: 8/22/2010 4:35:00 AM
Great write that is very expressive and descriptive..Sara
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