A Rattling Rhyme

Everything had gone well and the night was still young,
she had made her intentions quite clear,
home alone we're not walking, the drink was now talking,
and the score was one-nil to the beer.
So we flagged down a cab, made a ten minute trip
hoping none of the neighbours would see,
helped her walk down the drive hoping I wouldn't slip
and then she turned round and came back for me.
We crashed into the hall, and both leaned on the wall
in an effort to regain our breath,
altogether uncertain if this nights exertions
would not end in premature death.
In the bedroom she tore off her blouse and her corset,
her lumbar support  and her truss,
left her ankle support on, did she just forget
but I thought I'd not make any fuss.
After I had stripped off with the help of my frame
and rolled onto the bed in the dark,
we lay side by side, now with nothing to hide
and both waited for that certain spark.
As we stared at the ceiling, a terrible feeling
was finally now seeping through,
that the worst of our fears, after all the long years
we'd forgotten what we're supposed to do.

8th August 2018
For contest 'A rattling rhyme', sponsor Nina Parmenter
(*- This is not autobiographical. Yet. )
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Arowolo Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 11:19 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win ..Nice write.
Gentry Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 1:33 PM
Lol! Congratulations on your win. Sooo funny.
Duet Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 12:28 PM
lol...I doubt you really forgot...but what a great little poem! And, congrats on your placement in this contest, Viv.
Canerdy Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 7:06 PM
I am literally LOL!! CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
Wigley Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 6:35 AM
Thanks, Janice, give me another year or two.... Viv x
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 6:24 PM
This contest was made for you Viv! I love how you rattled on and your wonderful humorous ending! Well done! Congratulations on your second placement! : )
Wigley Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 6:36 AM
Thanks Connie, I have got my breath back :)
Wolf Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 5:25 PM
What a perfect ending... Time for a refresher course: Sex Re-education 101 or some such. Congrats on your win in the contest with this bedroom romp. ~ Gershon
Rowe Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 5:17 PM
This was hilarious, but the comment at the end was even funnier. ...yet
Wigley Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 6:36 AM
Thanks, Jesse, I shall keep taking the tablets :) . Regards, Viv
Murray Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 1:36 PM
OMG Viv, this is just far too close to the....bone. LOL!!
Wigley Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 8:37 PM
It's not that I've forgotten, Jean, it's just that nowadays I can't reach :(
Faulkner Avatar
August 12, 2018 at 6:02 PM
My favorite line was the p.s. (not autobiographical, yet) all of it so mesmerizing and the end such an unexpected bow on the gift, good luck in the contest!
Wigley Avatar
August 14, 2018 at 1:32 AM
Thanks Michelle, I have a few years and a few volts of power left, though :) . Viv x
Godwin Avatar
August 10, 2018 at 8:27 PM
Viv: I am impressed, not just with your outstanding sense of humor and witty delivery of same because you've long delivered with consistent talent, no, I'm floored because someone understood the contest requirements (this is the 1st I've read) and also succeeded as I could not, not for trying. I just couldn't connect my inner inspiration-wiring to syllable counts in examples I looked at. No worries, for me confused doesn't deplete content. This is a sure winner, plus a WOWer for humor. CayCay
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 12:57 AM
Thanks, CayCay, very kind comments, yes, it is a tricky contest, and I must admit I've often had ideas that would be great but wouldn't wrap round a form, so I've been lucky this time. Viv x
Dutta Avatar
August 9, 2018 at 2:05 PM
Enjoyed. Stunt in last line. All the best
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 12:57 AM
Thanks, Anisha, glad you liked it. Viv x
Lamoureux Avatar
August 9, 2018 at 7:40 AM
Ha ha, love it. I hope my memory remains in tact and that practice will make perfect.
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 12:58 AM
Thanks Richard, old age and poverty at this end :)
Roper Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 11:12 PM
Love the verse, Viv, especially at the end :).. good luck in the contest.
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 12:58 AM
Thanks Eve x
Callus Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 1:12 PM
Oh dear!! The non-benefits of old age!! You have somehow rattled my self confidence with this excellent rendition, Viv:) I see a sure winner, my friend. Regards // paul
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 12:59 AM
Thanks Paul, at least my mind is still young. Hope you and yours are well. regards, Viv
Horsman Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 11:07 AM
Wow, love the adventure, Viv, and those last two lines, my friend, are amazing although somewhat sad.
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 12:59 AM
I'm not quite that much of a lost cause yet, Harry, hope it stays that way for a bit. Thanks for popping by. Regards, Viv
Warrior Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 9:22 AM
Superbly done Viv...best of luck my friend...^WW^
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 1:00 AM
Cheers, WW. Regards, Viv
Cunningham Avatar
August 8, 2018 at 1:44 AM
Haha Viv this is brilliant, right up Niña's street. Good luck, I'm sure it will do well. Tom
Wigley Avatar
August 11, 2018 at 1:00 AM
Thanks, Tim, yes, I hope it floats her boat. regards, Viv
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