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A Rattling Rhyme

Everything had gone well and the night was still young, she had made her intentions quite clear, home alone we're not walking, the drink was now talking, and the score was one-nil to the beer. So we flagged down a cab, made a ten minute trip hoping none of the neighbours would see, helped her walk down the drive hoping I wouldn't slip and then she turned round and came back for me. We crashed into the hall, and both leaned on the wall in an effort to regain our breath, altogether uncertain if this nights exertions would not end in premature death. In the bedroom she tore off her blouse and her corset, her lumbar support and her truss, left her ankle support on, did she just forget but I thought I'd not make any fuss. After I had stripped off with the help of my frame and rolled onto the bed in the dark, we lay side by side, now with nothing to hide and both waited for that certain spark. As we stared at the ceiling, a terrible feeling was finally now seeping through, that the worst of our fears, after all the long years we'd forgotten what we're supposed to do. 8th August 2018 For contest 'A rattling rhyme', sponsor Nina Parmenter (*- This is not autobiographical. Yet. )

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Date: 8/31/2018 11:19:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win ..Nice write.
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Date: 8/30/2018 1:33:00 PM
Lol! Congratulations on your win. Sooo funny.
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Date: 8/29/2018 12:28:00 PM
lol...I doubt you really forgot...but what a great little poem! And, congrats on your placement in this contest, Viv.
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Date: 8/28/2018 7:06:00 PM
I am literally LOL!! CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Viv Wigley
Date: 8/29/2018 6:35:00 AM
Thanks, Janice, give me another year or two.... Viv x
Date: 8/28/2018 6:24:00 PM
This contest was made for you Viv! I love how you rattled on and your wonderful humorous ending! Well done! Congratulations on your second placement! : )
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Date: 8/29/2018 6:36:00 AM
Thanks Connie, I have got my breath back :)
Date: 8/28/2018 5:25:00 PM
What a perfect ending... Time for a refresher course: Sex Re-education 101 or some such. Congrats on your win in the contest with this bedroom romp. ~ Gershon
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Date: 8/28/2018 5:17:00 PM
This was hilarious, but the comment at the end was even funnier. ...yet
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Date: 8/29/2018 6:36:00 AM
Thanks, Jesse, I shall keep taking the tablets :) . Regards, Viv
Date: 8/15/2018 1:36:00 PM
OMG Viv, this is just far too close to the....bone. LOL!!
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Date: 8/15/2018 8:37:00 PM
It's not that I've forgotten, Jean, it's just that nowadays I can't reach :(
Date: 8/12/2018 6:02:00 PM
My favorite line was the p.s. (not autobiographical, yet) all of it so mesmerizing and the end such an unexpected bow on the gift, good luck in the contest!
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Date: 8/14/2018 1:32:00 AM
Thanks Michelle, I have a few years and a few volts of power left, though :) . Viv x
Date: 8/10/2018 8:27:00 PM
Viv: I am impressed, not just with your outstanding sense of humor and witty delivery of same because you've long delivered with consistent talent, no, I'm floored because someone understood the contest requirements (this is the 1st I've read) and also succeeded as I could not, not for trying. I just couldn't connect my inner inspiration-wiring to syllable counts in examples I looked at. No worries, for me confused doesn't deplete content. This is a sure winner, plus a WOWer for humor. CayCay
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Date: 8/11/2018 12:57:00 AM
Thanks, CayCay, very kind comments, yes, it is a tricky contest, and I must admit I've often had ideas that would be great but wouldn't wrap round a form, so I've been lucky this time. Viv x
Date: 8/9/2018 2:05:00 PM
Enjoyed. Stunt in last line. All the best
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Date: 8/11/2018 12:57:00 AM
Thanks, Anisha, glad you liked it. Viv x
Date: 8/9/2018 7:40:00 AM
Ha ha, love it. I hope my memory remains in tact and that practice will make perfect.
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Date: 8/11/2018 12:58:00 AM
Thanks Richard, old age and poverty at this end :)
Date: 8/8/2018 11:12:00 PM
Love the verse, Viv, especially at the end :).. good luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/11/2018 12:58:00 AM
Thanks Eve x
Date: 8/8/2018 1:12:00 PM
Oh dear!! The non-benefits of old age!! You have somehow rattled my self confidence with this excellent rendition, Viv:) I see a sure winner, my friend. Regards // paul
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Date: 8/11/2018 12:59:00 AM
Thanks Paul, at least my mind is still young. Hope you and yours are well. regards, Viv
Date: 8/8/2018 11:07:00 AM
Wow, love the adventure, Viv, and those last two lines, my friend, are amazing although somewhat sad.
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Date: 8/11/2018 12:59:00 AM
I'm not quite that much of a lost cause yet, Harry, hope it stays that way for a bit. Thanks for popping by. Regards, Viv
Date: 8/8/2018 9:22:00 AM
Superbly done Viv...best of luck my friend...^WW^
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Date: 8/11/2018 1:00:00 AM
Cheers, WW. Regards, Viv
Date: 8/8/2018 1:44:00 AM
Haha Viv this is brilliant, right up Niña's street. Good luck, I'm sure it will do well. Tom
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Date: 8/11/2018 1:00:00 AM
Thanks, Tim, yes, I hope it floats her boat. regards, Viv

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