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A Rapid Impact

A breathless voice hissed from just behind the child’s left ear, he glanced back to see no one there, his mind was filled with the thought of death, his chest heaving as he tried to catch his breath, and as if he had been running, his face in the mirror darkened suddenly, his emotions would hide, his eyes wide, his mind flips, then a silent vow seemed to emanate from his tightening lips, he feels his heart rate, racing, his emotions now pacing, his sanity dissolving before his very eyes, he then feels some inner cries, the child stared, unblinking at his reflection, he feared, then a ghost appeared, with a flicker of poorly concealed distress in her eyes, “ Run!” Then in a second, before it was done, it had to be fate, because it was simply too late, reality displayed a fact, and the home invasion had a rapid impact.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/7/2009 11:52:00 AM
hi Frank,we miss your good chilly writes--c
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Date: 4/16/2009 11:53:00 AM
Suspenseful, imaginative and beautifully hooking of a write .. peace
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Date: 3/29/2009 10:29:00 AM
Pulse-pounding story, filled with great emotion and intrigue, Frank. Thank you for sharing this!
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Date: 3/28/2009 7:33:00 AM
the suspense was just such a thriller.... excellent! ~ Arany
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Date: 3/27/2009 12:59:00 PM
Rather spooky ...full of mystery!! Great job in building up the suspense!!
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Date: 3/27/2009 12:22:00 PM
This is an awesome piece, Frank. Great suspense, like Chris said. I got that "Gothica" "Sixth Sense" kinda creepy, scary feeling. Excellent drama, as always! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/27/2009 12:07:00 PM
frank.this is the best , ever.i can understand i think .the mirror darkened,emotions hid,eyes wide,the cry,RUN,home invasion.you describe the child so well, the fear,the mixed emotions,the ending mysterious as its writer. this goes to my favourites
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Date: 3/27/2009 12:01:00 PM
feels like a dream of regret, really like this one, Frank! Jim
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Date: 3/27/2009 10:47:00 AM
Frankie, nice building of the suspense in this piece...I love the big reveal at the end...you painted the fear well with various words...the last sentence makes me want more....good work....
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