Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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Psychedelic Contest ~ November 30, 2024

  Sponsored by Kai Michael Neumann

A Psychedelic Journey

With my eyes half closed I looked in the mirror to see
that worry and anxiety have painted a psychedelic me.
My face is contorted, and I seem to be quite unraveled,
reflected in colors showing where my mind has traveled.

It appears I've become distorted, in a state of psychosis.
"Your behavior is bizarre." That was a doctor's diagnosis.
I feel like an abstract work of art on a canvas torn apart
as if hallucinogens have found their way into my heart.

I fear I've fallen into an abyss of weird mental perceptions
where my mind sees things that are merely misconceptions.
I need saving from this state in which everything is surreal.
Twisted and delusional are not emotions I choose to feel.

I've lost my patience while waiting for this journey to end.
Help is what I need to untether me. Is there one kind friend
among you who will help me find a way out?  Just one fellow
who will set my world aright until once again I am mellow?

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Silent One December 1, 2024 at 11:26 AM Is this fictional? Your poem delves deeply into the theme of mental distress, capturing the intense struggle with own sense of self and reality. The line "I seem to be quite unraveled" reveals a sense of losing control, both emotionally and physically, as if this person is coming apart at the seams. For me "unraveled" connects to the idea of mental disintegration or a breakdown, where the boundaries between self and disorder blur. The reference to their mind's "traveling" emphasizes the chaotic nature of their thoughts, moving in unpredictable and disorienting directions. Best of luck in the contest. Lin Lane December 1, 2024 at 11:39 AM Totally fictional. I've never tried anything that would make me feel unraveled and out of control. My imagination seemed to plow its own field and fertilize it without my input. lol Thanks for reading and commenting on this one.

Andrea Dietrich December 1, 2024 at 10:37 AM Lin. I love your approach to this contest. I didn't even date to try it. Good luck. I don't think you will need it. Lin Lane December 1, 2024 at 11:39 AM Thank you for your thoughts, Andrea.

Duke Beaufort November 30, 2024 at 11:17 AM Lin, I saw several poems for this contest and yours is the only one taking this point of view...that distortion of reality might not be a good thing and it might create a sense of unease or worse. It does happen to people since this is not all flowers and rainbows. Smiles! Lin Lane December 1, 2024 at 7:03 AM Life is never as simple as being able to smell the scent of flowers or seeing rainbows in the sky. I haven't read any others for the contest yet. I'm not familiar with Kai's likes and dislikes, so we shall see how this one fairs. Thanks very much for your encouragement and your smiles, Duke.

Daniel Henry Rodgers November 30, 2024 at 5:49 AM Dear Lin, what a powerful exploration of mental turmoil and the desire for connection. As I read this I thought how beautifully you captured the struggle between chaos and the desire for clarity which is not easy to do. A great read this morning! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel Lin Lane December 1, 2024 at 7:00 AM Morning and thank you for your take on my idea of a psychedelic journey. It's one I've never taken, nor ever want to take. In the blink of an eye, life can turn from calm to chaotic, so we should enjoy the peaceful moments when we are in their midst.