A Once Steadfast Stream

The mistress to her lover:

a once steadfast stream 
now flows dangerously low. . . . 
this valley grows dry

His reply:

at its mountain source
the stream takes what nature gives
hills depend on water too. . . . 
though valleys need streams
snowfall was sparse this season

 
for Debbie Guzzi's Contest:
"Love Talks"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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A  Avatar
May 16, 2015 at 12:33 PM
enjoyable
Guzzi Avatar
December 7, 2012 at 4:13 PM
I'm journeying through your haiku writes. ah personification! Light & Love
Mister Roboto Avatar
September 10, 2011 at 1:18 AM
Diggin the Haiku...and after a big Haiku, make sure you say Bless You ...HI-Choooooooo! -sneeze- and Bless You!
Knop Avatar
March 23, 2011 at 4:42 AM
Another one I have missed, Andrea! Great write, and thank you so much for your kind comments always!...Love, Gert
Fillmore Avatar
March 15, 2011 at 2:57 PM
This is a lovely piece, Andrea:) it has real flow! Thanks for comment on Refresh, always appreciated!
Brown Avatar
March 14, 2011 at 5:51 AM
Congratulations on your win Andrea in Debbie Guzzi's contest "Love Talks". Love, Carol
Neels Avatar
March 14, 2011 at 4:56 AM
Awesome Andrea, congratulations on your win in the contest, love Wilma
Mannan Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 8:53 PM
Amazing Andear. No other word for this superb write. Warm congrats.
Parker Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 7:32 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful, award-winning poem! Enjoyed your jilted-lover milieu.
Pettit Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 5:43 PM
Congratulations on winning in Deb's contest. Andrea, this is a nice pairing of haiku with tanka.
Freeman Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 12:55 PM
Beautiful job, Andrea it is wonderful to see you at the top with this worthy honor in second place honorable win, Agaape, Moses
Gorelick Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 12:29 PM
Awesome...congrats ..this was very deep..I love it. BG
Mehta Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 11:38 AM
Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Debbie, Andrea
Dufresne Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 5:39 AM
metaphorically mesmerizing, Andrea. Awesome poem . great job of it. Congrats to you on a top win
Poet Avatar
March 12, 2011 at 8:12 PM
Congrats Andrea on your big win in the contest!--kash
A   Avatar
March 12, 2011 at 7:53 PM
boo! lol.. how are you as for me.. not so good.. now i have to work all by myself... sis is not helping me no more... oi.. well anyways... good luck in the contest.. interesting... p.d.
Sweetheart Avatar
March 12, 2011 at 7:22 PM
Congrats Andrea on your super win in Love Talk with this awesome dialogue between the lovers.. another chart topping win to enjoy with luv.. my friend...
Devonshire Avatar
March 12, 2011 at 4:09 PM
Congratulations on your big win, Andrea! Love, Carolyn
Johnson Avatar
March 12, 2011 at 3:55 PM
Very clever LAndrea. Congratulaions on your win. Love, Joyce
Babcock Avatar
March 11, 2011 at 6:24 AM
That is a very different poem and gives food for thought. Have a great day. love phyl
Sweetheart Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 9:08 AM
thankxx for all your dynamic comments Andrea.. playing catch up today since we took Tuesday off.. raining cats and dogs here so heavy.. so it's a poetry day for me luv..
Kendrick Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 2:41 PM
Great one..Poor mistress..Reads like a winner..Good luck..Thanks for your continued support of my work by reading and commenting ....May your gift expand and overflow..Sara
Horne Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 1:58 PM
Thanks, Andrea - and congratulations on your win : ) Jack
Freeman Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 11:20 AM
Cool job Andrea. Best of luck! I wrote "Stress on Toll road Express" sort of with your Joe in mind. I think he might relate to it if you can get him to read it.smile, Agape, Moses
Greenlee Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 8:15 AM
Great job.I know you will do well.Yes,that poem is for Tell her Story contest.But strange thing happened I messed up by not putting the contest on the bottom,so went to edit,and it wouldn't pop up on the poem,or any info. on it.I hope it gets read?But if you go to my edit,you can see I put for contest.Man,I feel very strong about that poem.Anyways,good luck,and have A GREAT DAY!
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