Jan Allison Poet Ottava rima

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Inspired by my son’s visit to Venice last weekend. A little poetic licence I knew he’d arrived but it’s taken him 3 days to let me know he’s back home safely – grr kids!!! Son isn’t called Dennis, perhaps I should have rhymed Venice with menace!

A Mother's Anguish - Or

Son why don’t you call and tell me you’re fine;
I am out of my mind with the worry.
Fun are you having ... just drop me a line;
why not text, words could fly in a flurry.
Hun, please contact me, just give me a sign
sigh...what’s it with kids, mine does not hurry!

Today you sent me photos of Venice
Hooray you’ve arrived - I’m relieved Dennis! 



Rima Ottava Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Charles Messina
10 syllables per line – how many syllables

6/6/19

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Charles Messina July 1, 2019 at 2:32 PM I just love this one Jan. Why is it that it could take days for our kids to realize..hey, should I call home..lol Great entry! Congratulations on your win...hugs always ~Charlie xx

Ami G. June 9, 2019 at 7:24 AM Loved it! Jan Allison June 15, 2019 at 10:41 AM thanks:-) hugs Jan x

Connie Marcum Wong June 8, 2019 at 9:03 PM My older daughter answers her phone and answers my texts immediately. My younger daughter does just the opposite. It is maddening. I agree. A great entry for the contest Jan. : ) xxoo Jan Allison June 15, 2019 at 10:41 AM thanks for the comment Connie!!!:-)hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger June 8, 2019 at 7:32 PM I can so relate to this! I called the phone company and had them put a note on my daughter's dorm room once to say she was alive. On her way to the room six other people yelled "call your mother." I phoned every number I could find on that college campus. Great poem! Jan Allison June 15, 2019 at 10:40 AM lolCaren,makes me feel better I am not the only one:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf June 7, 2019 at 6:28 PM Cute! ... Have to wonder a bit: How old is Dennis now? Keep in mind, my friend, that young men need and treasure their independence. (It's a necessary part of their growing up, and there's usually nothing exasperated Moms can do about it. I know. I'm married to one!... and I was once just such a young man! LOL). Dennis will be fine, I'm sure.... WORRY! (What good would it do to tell you not to?...) Best always, Gershon Jan Allison June 15, 2019 at 10:41 AM lol GW :-)hugs Jan xx

Frank Sheehan June 6, 2019 at 6:24 PM Great write. It really captures the feeling when you don't hear from a child. Enjoyed. Jan Allison June 6, 2019 at 6:45 PM Thanks Frank it's reassuring that others can relate!:-) hugs Jan xx

Juli- Michelle June 6, 2019 at 1:57 PM Haha, i love it! Italy is one of my favorite places ever. Glad I stopped by, a lovely write, Jan! Love, Juli-Michelle! Jan Allison June 6, 2019 at 2:10 PM Thanks Juli-Michelle I am just glad I finally heard from him today lol - kids eh!:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 6, 2019 at 12:54 PM - I remember that time, Jan ... it's fine ... "mom" is not in first place on his list anymore - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison June 6, 2019 at 12:56 PM I guess its not until our offspring have children of their own that they can relate lol:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham June 6, 2019 at 12:46 PM Kids eh lol, but it's a beautiful place, went there a few years ago Hope he enjoyed it. Tom. Jan Allison June 6, 2019 at 12:55 PM He had an amazing time Tom:-) I think had hubby been around i wouldn't have been so concerned but .... oh well he is back in London and I can relax and worry about hubby with the hussy Holly his radiotherapy machine who has taken my place in his life lol:-) hugs jan xx

Michelle Faulkner June 6, 2019 at 12:26 PM Very whimsical picture of a mother waiting for her son to call - I hope he had a fun time! Jan Allison June 6, 2019 at 12:54 PM From the pictures he sent at the weekend it looked like he had an amazing time .. said he was preparing to go home and then silence for 3 days! At least I got a poem out of it lol:-) hugs jan xx

William Kelii Kekaula June 6, 2019 at 11:04 AM I can relate to this, for I have 4 Dennis' and 3 Denise's, but the girls, Oh Boy!, do they communicate, but my Dennis', only when they need substantive $$ and Best Wishes JAN, Aloha William William Kelii Kekaula June 6, 2019 at 9:56 PM Oh no, never pocket change, the kids are successful, but down pymt for large ticket items like cars or homes--$11k was the smallest amount--let's just say that I own several vehicles and eleven homes. Jan Allison June 6, 2019 at 12:51 PM lol I think girls like to chat, guys are less chatty lol he earns a good salary so he doesn't ask for money lol:-) I just wish a few minutes could have been taken to stop me worrying - I finally heard from him this morning lol:-) Hugs jan xx