A Mind's Room

A Craig Cornish Contest: Empty Room

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A kaleidoscope of unknown thrill rushes
within my swollen veins, needle-pricked – 
and the liquid opiate carries me high, upstream
like a somersault in a glistening parade of a trance
intoxicated by multi-colored yet surreal imaginings,
absent from the pungent flavor of bleak reality… 
I Am nothing but dust--- till the sensation drains.

The blue hour arrives, a period between morning and dusk
as twilight reflects the fading of my mind’s room
… where my heart aches till dawn snaps this evil poison, 
And I cannot grasp soiled dust in my eyes, 
The glassy sheets that lay me down on damp floor 
forgetting not how pore of my flesh clots,
feverish when in tears:  my body trembles 
in this sordid room on lease—while I am

unable to wait for the next kick of midnight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 6/25/2024 2:01:00 AM
What a lovely surprise to see you back in the fold, Nette! I looked far and wide for you these past years! I am pleased to see that you have lost none of your flair for writing excellent poetry. Warm regards, my friend // paul
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Date: 6/11/2024 2:39:00 PM
welcome back nette! quality writing from you, as always, your words manage to create beauty out of something definitely not beautiful (i love that last line) congrats on your win in craig's contest!
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Date: 6/11/2024 3:12:00 AM
Wow! Congrats, Kabayan! I'm glad to read once again your excellent poetry. Kumusta na? I've been praying for you. God bless you.
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Date: 6/10/2024 11:20:00 PM
Hello, I'm the new(ish) guy! I'm excited to visit your poetry after reading this. And according to the comments you are an old friend to those here in PS. Addiction is a relevant theme unfortunately, and you do it justice. Nice to meecha! Xo
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Date: 6/10/2024 6:32:00 PM
Dear Nette, it's so wonderful to see you back! Your vivid imagery offers a gripping, emotional scene full of misery that reaches down deep to clutch my heart.. your last line is a "kick" for an impactful finale. Your poetic pen is potent, poignant yet delicate all at the same time. Congratulations for your win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/10/2024 2:13:00 PM
Your heartfelt and innovative poetry won the podium prize; congratulations! I've seen so many people ruined by their drug abuse, I am all familiar with the scourge that is addiction. Well done! You did an excellent job!
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Date: 6/10/2024 1:54:00 PM
Congrats on your top win with this touching and very imaginative poem!! Drug addiction and the curse of it, I know well as I see so many who have lost everything because of it! Great write! well done!!
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Date: 6/10/2024 1:40:00 PM
Dearest Nette - no matter your mood, nor chapter in life, there are very few who can bring it to life in words as you----so wonderful to have you back and find you here honoring this prompt---I know I'm not alone!
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Date: 6/8/2024 5:58:00 AM
The sad life of an addict. I explore this theme in my poem Kensington Ave. Hey so good to see you back. Hope you're well
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Date: 6/7/2024 7:34:00 PM
Interesting deep feeling write, enjoyed reading. Awesome, your back my friend. You just dropped out of our life and hoping your back forever.
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Date: 6/7/2024 2:45:00 PM
This delivers a whollop, Nette. You are still in top form.
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Date: 6/7/2024 1:58:00 PM
Well it seems quite a full of emotions to my Reading Nette..' However I shall look at it as More is less.?? More or less that is? Or should That be was?? Oh I think my vocabulary is Getting empty in this?? maybe i could use some room? For improvement!!
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Date: 6/7/2024 1:06:00 PM
I enjoyed reading "A Mind's Room" write. Glad you are writing again. Missed You. Hope you are OK. "Good Luck" Have a great/blessed ~ day/weekend................
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Date: 6/7/2024 12:28:00 PM
Good to have you back. Sad plight those who are addicted to anything in life. Some things are more deadly than others, but addiction is horrible. Thanks for sharing this contest entry with us. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 6/7/2024 11:30:00 AM
Nette, welcome back...as usual, your poetry flows with the style we were used to
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Date: 6/7/2024 11:22:00 AM
Hey Nette welcome back.. I hope you ar well... I can feel the angst in your words.. an excellent entry for the contest..
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Date: 6/7/2024 10:13:00 AM
Ah! Nette is back! :) Love your poem. You certainly still have that special touch. BTW. Rules have changed: We no longer may add a footnote (A Craig .. date, etc). Only the poem in the textbox. Otherwise, how have you been? X Suzette
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Date: 6/9/2024 1:28:00 AM
Poets like you are hard to forget, suzette...nice to hear from you: thanks! Higgs
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