A Man Who Lived Life Twice - Dizzy

his youth was stolen by undreamt dreams,
growing old and always wanting one more
his white hair once dark chestnut, now gleams
for his quiet nature is not as it seems-
no, he’s my baffling father, whom I adore

sober for twenty years made him meek,
yet walking in his shoes bestows pain-
it was always serenity and peace he did seek,
but at times he felt as if he failed…(too weak)
now only tales of a wandering man does remain

but o, you should have seen him shuffle dance
back in the day with mama right by his side-
videos of them two showing marriage romance
could there really be any other circumstance
that leaves him grey and still wanting to hide?

in his coat pocket coins of temptation,
greed once filling voids needing to be filled
even now he struggles with communication,
leaving me with an uneasy sensation-
I wish this relationship we could rebuild

an easy walker yes, but in crowds silent,
craving the rush of taking away gold-
many years of making me dizzy and a defiant
daughter who was not always compliant...
will we tarry in forgiveness? (tale yet to be told) 

he was a young man who knew not what he deserved-
once an easy walking dancer…now calm and reserved



*Back in my dad's drinking days, he came up with a dance. It was called the "Frank Shuffle"

Bring a character to life Poetry Contest
Written: August 12, 2019
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 9/8/2019 7:56:00 AM
Well penned Lu Loo... Congrats on your win..
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Date: 9/8/2019 1:01:00 AM
The frank shuffle line is my favourite. Thanks for entering my contest and congrats on your win. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 9/7/2019 9:15:00 PM
Congratulations on this fictional write. Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/7/2019 3:57:00 PM
what a beautiful poem, and such a unique approach to weave your father into the role...great penning...love this, congrats on your win :) hugs
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Date: 8/18/2019 9:46:00 AM
A rather wonderfully penned piece Lu rather enjoyed this on this drab wet Sunday afternoon over here, hope all good with you!
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Date: 8/14/2019 12:28:00 AM
Lu, this is a great poem, I think you captured Dizzy well, hope this places in the contest because it deserves to ~
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Date: 8/15/2019 2:00:00 PM
I don't quite know what he's looking for? But sometimes I go with what my heart wants to write. I wasn't sure if I should make it funny, but I went serious instead. Thank you Dear Heart :)-luloo
Date: 8/13/2019 5:07:00 PM
Ah, you portrayed him humanistically real, wonderful sharing dear Lu Loo, there is such a bond between father and daughter. I hope you find closeness in your later years. Love xo
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Date: 8/15/2019 1:59:00 PM
thank you sweet Pixie, me too :)-luloo
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