Larry Bradfield Poet Couplet

A Maiden's Baggage

I loved a maiden all dressed in pure white
And I longed and dreamed of our wedding night
She was a beauty with baggage you see
But then at the time it meant naught to me
She had a condition of nerves they say
Stress made her chuckle then laugh straight away
But I had her bed on my mind and so
I ignored the warnings - much to my woe
The wedding night came and I looked ahead
To exchanging that white for something red
I swiftly undressed, cast off my buckle -
She looked me over, started to chuckle
Laughter was loud as I called it the end
My ego won't stand her baggage, my friend 

2/6/2017

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Charlie Smith February 22, 2017 at 1:53 PM know the feeling, I'm afraid. Congratulations Larry... Larry Bradfield February 22, 2017 at 4:09 PM Haha..thanks, Charlie!!

Chris Green February 22, 2017 at 7:57 AM A gem of a poem wins a gem of a contest. This was funny and a bit sad (for him) at the same time. Nicely done Larry. Congrats on your win. Larry Bradfield February 22, 2017 at 4:08 PM Sorry! Chris!! Larry Bradfield February 22, 2017 at 4:07 PM Thank you kindly, Chtis

Olise Egbune February 21, 2017 at 10:12 AM awesome and brief Larry Bradfield February 21, 2017 at 10:17 PM Thanks, Olise!

Sunita U.D Palawon February 21, 2017 at 3:44 AM I like the humor here. Congrats on your 1st place. :) Larry Bradfield February 21, 2017 at 10:15 PM Thank you, Sunita!

Agnes Krampe February 20, 2017 at 6:33 PM Congrats on your win with this witty poem. Larry Bradfield February 20, 2017 at 10:19 PM Thank you, Agnes!

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen February 20, 2017 at 6:14 PM Excellent! A definite well deserved win! Larry Bradfield February 20, 2017 at 10:20 PM Thank you for your nice comment!!

CayCay Godwin February 20, 2017 at 4:27 PM This is great, the long and short of it, all great! Witty and clever, a true grin buster. Congrats on your win! All the best ... CayCay Larry Bradfield February 20, 2017 at 10:23 PM Thank you, CayCay!! A grin is my measurement of success and I appreciate the comment!

Andrea Dietrich February 20, 2017 at 3:45 PM BIG congratulations on your placement in the contest, Larry. A clever poem! Larry Bradfield February 20, 2017 at 10:21 PM Thank you, Andrea, and thanks for the placement!

Jan Allison February 20, 2017 at 3:44 PM Oh poor man - made me giggle Larry:-) congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx Larry Bradfield February 20, 2017 at 10:16 PM Thank you, Jan!

Carolyn Devonshire February 20, 2017 at 3:34 PM No man would want to hear his bride laughing as he undressed on their wedding night. This is a wonderful poem, Larry, and I congratulate you on taking first place. Please send me a soup mail and let me know where I can send your jewelry prize. Also let me know a color or type of jewelry you prefer. Thanks for supporting the contest! Larry Bradfield February 20, 2017 at 10:24 PM Thank you, Carolyn, and thanks for the placement...fun contest!!

Daniel Turner February 6, 2017 at 5:20 PM Very funny, Larry. Made me laugh out loud. Lol Good luck! Larry Bradfield February 7, 2017 at 2:10 PM Thank you, Daniel!! I always hope someone will find laughter in most of my stuff...Larry