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A Lonely Cloud

"I wandered lonely as a cloud" William Wordsworth "i wandered lonely as a cloud" dark and dreary i was not proud i lingered on the edge of day a darkened rift i chose to stay i befell my pain in salted tears lost within my stolen years in crimson ink i've cried these drops flooding thoughts of memories's crops i hid your sun in shadow's cast made you see my saddened past left you breathless beneath mind's rage made you wish to turn the page i hung about a chill of wind that time itself could not rescind i wander still a lonely cloud through the darkness of death's own shroud i shed my tears in salted rain as i wallow within this pain January 29, 2020

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Kim Merryman

Date: 8/11/2021 6:41:00 PM

A sad and lovely write, Sandra! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/10/2021 2:55:00 AM

I cannot understand how I missed your first class wining poem. I can only apologized. Hoping for better days and congratulations for your win. Hugs.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/4/2020 4:23:00 AM

This is so good Sandra! I missed commenting on this contest because I had my eye shot and couldn't see for two days and it just got away from me. So now I am catching up. Congratulations on your deserving First Place win! xxoo

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/4/2020 6:49:00 PM

Thank you so much Connie...my computer crashed...i have a hard time catching up through my phone... so i understand... hugs and blessings :) XoXo

Eve Roper

Date: 2/3/2020 4:52:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Sandra, very well deserve. Hugs eve

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 6:45:00 PM

Thank you so much Eve :) hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/3/2020 7:18:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win, my friend :) - greetings from // Anne-Lise :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 10:17:00 AM

Thank you so much Anne-Lise... good morning my friend :) hugs

Chris Green

Date: 2/3/2020 7:07:00 AM

Congratulations my friend on your first place win in this contest. Your wonderful poem landed where it deserved to be

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 10:16:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comment Chris :) hugs

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 2/3/2020 12:06:00 AM

Congratulations, Sandra on your first place win. Indeed, we sometimes melt like clouds in tears.

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 10:16:00 AM

Thank you so much Subimal :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/2/2020 12:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Beautiful. I love your lines, "i shed my tears in salted rain as i wallow within this pain." Sometimes it seems like a rain storm of tears one can cry. Enjoy your day.........

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/2/2020 12:23:00 PM

thank you so much for your kind words Paula... hugs and blessings to you...have a great sunday!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/2/2020 7:50:00 AM

I don’t know why but you always remind me of Sally Kellerman’s performance in the movie, “Back to School, “ where the professor’s soft tone and luscious poetry reading moves Rodney Dangerfield’s character to daydream and yell, “yes!” Such loveliness! Congrats, Sandra!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/3/2020 5:49:00 AM

Just find the clip on youtube :) I know what you mean...when your serious about poetry - you write and read most of the time :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/2/2020 12:06:00 PM

lol... thanks Kim, now it makes me want to watch the movie... maybe one day...my time has always been limited and my spare time often goes to my love for poetry... hugs have a beautiful sunday!

Silent One

Date: 2/2/2020 6:34:00 AM

This line inspired many in this contest, just like you.. a deep and emotive poem..Congratulations on your first place in the contest..

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/2/2020 7:18:00 AM

That line seemed to form a great visual in my mind as I am sure it did in many others minds. Thank you for hosting and the win :) hugs

Running Wolves

Date: 1/30/2020 10:05:00 AM

wow awesome poem, you rock again...

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/31/2020 4:50:00 PM

Lol thank you Robert :) hugs

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/29/2020 10:21:00 PM

You did a great job from the inspirational quote. This flows really well and carries the weight of a lonely cloud.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/31/2020 4:50:00 PM

Thank you so much Juliet :) hugs

Craig Cornish

Date: 1/29/2020 9:59:00 PM

Sandy, I also did not read his poem until after I wrote mine (I hesitate to do that so it won't affect my write) and expected it, as Vijay alluded, to be melancholy but it was totally opposite of that. As a matter of fact, I felt the poem wasn't that special at all though I do love the inspiration of the line - Wordsworth wrote far better poems. Too often, I feel, a name precedes accomplishment.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/31/2020 4:49:00 PM

I wasn’t too thrilled with his poem either. It was upbeat not melancholy just nothing spectacular... :). We are on the same page with that

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/29/2020 6:35:00 PM

Hello Sandra Adams,I like this poem. This poem is sad and filled with sadness and tears. have a nice evening my friend.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/29/2020 7:22:00 PM

Thank you so much Darlene... have yourself a nice evening too :) hugs

Craig Cornish

Date: 1/29/2020 3:24:00 PM

Love it - the gal who thought she could write no meter has written this in iambic meter and done a wonderful inspiration with the prompt.

Craig Cornish
Date: 1/29/2020 10:04:00 PM

You have a natural talent so I'm not surprised you have another tool on your belt for whenever you need it

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/29/2020 4:34:00 PM

Thank you so much Craig..my intention was to write free verse but it just fell as rhyme early on and just came rather quickly... coming from you this is a huge compliment...i guess your challenging contests helped my meter come out of hiding because i had no clue thus was falling in meter....it just went in it's own direction... hugs

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/29/2020 2:25:00 PM

A poem that begins with your title line has to be melancholy as Wordsworth's was. Very apt for the contest theme Sandy--yet, quite reflective of real life. Sad but quite beautifully written.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/29/2020 4:36:00 PM

Thank you so much Vijay...and Craig... perhaps i need to read his poem (i never have) and see what it's all about...i saw the list of choices for the contest and picked this one knowing my muse would take it on a somber path, though not exactly where i thought she would go with it... hugs :)

Craig Cornish
Date: 1/29/2020 3:27:00 PM

Vijay, his poem is not sad at all, it is totally uplifting - not to say that one might expect sadness given the title but he did not take it there and any poet, as Sandy did, may take it where their muse leads them as she has done.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/29/2020 12:26:00 PM

Loved Wordsworths original and I love this one Well written Sandra, good luck in the contest. Tom. PS, on my page there's a pic of me wearing a three corned hat in, you've guessed, Wordsworths house at Cockermouth in the Lake District, bit of trivia for you lol.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/29/2020 4:38:00 PM

I will have to come check the photo out...and perhaps read his poem...i don't believe i have ever seen his and certainly didn't want to before writing because i wanted to take the title on my own course... i will stop over shortly... thanks Tom... hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/29/2020 12:15:00 PM

Simply a dazzling entry for the contest, Sandra. It was exciting for me to read it to see what you'd come up with next. Good luck with it! Cheers, Gershon

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/29/2020 4:40:00 PM

Thank you so much Gershon...i thought of you with the one verse "left you breathless beneath mind's rage made you wish to turn the page" because i know how my dark poetry gets to you sometimes... hugs

Chris Green

Date: 1/29/2020 9:44:00 AM

Here is hoping the sun shines brightly and brings some light to this little cloud allowing it to float happily and freely on a sky of brilliant blue. This was beautiful in its sadness Sandy. Best wishes in the contest

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/29/2020 4:43:00 PM

Thank you so much Chris... though the line prompt took my muse down this path...we did eventually get sunshine today and you know me and my sad writes...my muse loves melancholy... hugs