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A Ghosts Final Hour

It is the stars that will cry at this hour, here I am, pouring my heart out. Brilliant, is the perfect watch tower, with a heavy heart, I do doubt. Here I am, pouring my heart out, to this world, just a ghost. With a heavy heart, I do doubt, an unseen life, leaning against the post. To this world, just a ghost, unconsciously, rising above the flame. An unseen life, leaning against the post, as a picture, without a picture frame. Unconsciously, rising above the flame, all my works here, done in the past. As a picture, without a picture frame, the memories of my life, will outlast. All my works here, done in the past, brilliant, is the perfect watch tower. The memories of my life, will outlast, I shall be remembered, in my final hour. ***For Paula Swanson's Pantoum contest.***

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Date: 7/14/2011 6:37:00 PM
Hey Chris, this one is heavy duty, solid poetry. I really like the idealogy, the 'unseen life'. One thing, I'm not 100% sure but I think the last line is supposed to mirror the first line. That being said, I think 'rules' are meant to bent when the piece shines as yours does. Good luck in the contest. Cyndi. PS... I tackled memory in my pantoum as well.
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Date: 7/13/2011 3:01:00 AM
A contest winner for sure, loved this line, it was so amazingly descriptive. "An unseen life, leaning against the post, as a picture, without a picture frame." Enjoyed the read.
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