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A Fragile Night

I'm climbing on my dreams Though with no ties to bed; Like a child's playground scene That rests on curtain's nest— Shadows of restless trees. I'm climbing on my dreams Blankets camp out on floor; As the glass window cries From my touch following Limbs twirling in dark eyes. I'm climbing on my dreams A stance where bark whimpers For my pillow out, cold— There my bosom heaving With tenses of my own. I'm climbing on my dreams Moon plays the forest's place, As lids dip in silver— Dreams come with haziness; Tongue in leaves remembers.

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Date: 11/21/2024 9:00:00 AM
Dear Paige, your Monchielle Stanza is beautiful, full of emotion and creative imagery. So very poetic! I love my dreams' "playground" world too, but not the dream scene where "bark whimpers" and I wake with "my bosom heaving". Your rich metaphors bring me to the center of "a fragile night" with the ease of your artistic expression and finesse. Absolutely love your last line! Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/1/2024 4:15:00 PM
Love the repetition of that first line... and what a line it is! Also loved blankets camp out on floor. Ah to dream! Hopefully only pleasant ones.
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Date: 7/11/2024 10:53:00 AM
some interesting images here, Paige. so poetic!
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Date: 7/9/2024 3:45:00 PM
A pleasure to dive into the imagery. Thanks for your kind visit.
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Date: 7/9/2024 12:55:00 AM
this is really a good poem, with an wasome refrain, and a mssage for insomniacs or dreamers, enjoyed yann
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Date: 7/8/2024 2:12:00 PM
Love the refrain. Gets under the skin. … Limbs twirling in dark eyes… For my pillow out, cold… As lids dip in silver…creates a feeling of foreboding but also of wonder!
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Date: 7/8/2024 2:05:00 PM
Nice arrangement of words and we want to feel safe and be able to dream..
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Date: 7/8/2024 10:59:00 AM
I enjoy your poem. It moves in a mist like a dream.
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Date: 7/8/2024 10:40:00 AM
Dear Paige, I searched for your newest poem and found this gem. I love the morning hours when I go in and out of sleep and dream lucidly. Your poem touched me because that is what you so eloquently describe. It sounds like you love to dream, too. Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
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Paige Hind
Date: 7/8/2024 11:29:00 AM
I was jumping from 'restless' trees to my lack of sleep...it's a metaphor. Finally, when sleep comes, trees remember those awake dreams...as sleeping dreams come. The trees mirrored my mood, I guess. :)
Date: 7/8/2024 4:31:00 AM
Dreams come in haziness… ah what a soulful monchielle so very well crafted and delivered dear paige! Love the imagery and rhymes in this. Excellent refrain too! Pleasure reading this
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Date: 7/8/2024 1:12:00 AM
Your repeating first lines give great emphasis to your delightful poem. Great verse.
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