A Formal Evening

Haibun trying to read your mind from afar,
sitting acrostic from you at the bar.
Iamb itching to sit on the stool beside you,
but somebody's sonnet - and I don't think she'll move.
Are we just a couplet of friends having drinks?
Maybe you quintella me what you think.
I feel giddy and dizain without any warning,
and I know I'm going to feel verse in the morning.
But we've been playing footles and it feels so right,
so why not just tanka me home tonight?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 7/22/2013 11:57:00 AM
This was PERFECT !!! Loved the play on poetry......"but somebody's sonnet......" that cracked me up !!!!
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Date: 7/20/2013 3:53:00 AM
Feather, my fear - Please do my ego a favor and check out 'Coming Out of the Cage'...It uses similar word play as this though it falls far short of yours, which in my opinion is pure comic genius...
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Date: 7/20/2013 12:14:00 AM
Ha super write heather Congratulations on your win xx
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Date: 7/19/2013 5:32:00 PM
HAHAHA!...VERY lever Weather!...I think I'm falling in shove with you, will you carry me yesterday, or shall I impose first?...Neither way, I'm tame if you are...Of coors, we'll need to have flood tests first to make sure we're compactable...Conflagurations and rest wishbones in the suture - Rim Tyerson
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Date: 7/19/2013 5:37:00 PM
I also dove the way you misuse different poetess formals here two...
Date: 7/19/2013 5:05:00 PM
this is nice.... Skat
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Date: 7/19/2013 4:45:00 PM
Brilliant, Heather. Congratulations on a superb win. Licia :-)
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Date: 7/19/2013 3:26:00 PM
Heather, Congratulations on your winning poem..pd
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Date: 7/19/2013 3:24:00 PM
Really good, Heather! Just a little shorter than required. Congratulations on your fine win! Cheers, Roy.
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Date: 6/24/2013 5:08:00 AM
Oh I love this very clever poem. You've put a huge smile on my face to start my day. Thank you.
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Date: 6/17/2013 12:11:00 PM
That's awesome, Heather. You are slick! It's a fave, of course. Kimo-ver here and gimme a high five!
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Date: 6/15/2013 1:55:00 PM
thanks, btw for liking my poetry. Wouldn't it be neat one day if we could take all our faves and make an anthology of soup favorites??
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Date: 6/15/2013 1:54:00 PM
this ADORABLE playing on words. You make me want to try it myself. I ought to!!!
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Date: 6/15/2013 11:29:00 AM
lol, love this witty write
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Date: 6/14/2013 6:46:00 PM
Girl.....this is a work of art!!!! Wow....astounded by you!!!! Playing footles, eh? Be sure you'll be tankad alright!!!!
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Date: 6/14/2013 12:11:00 PM
myyy, a smorgasbord of poetic delicacies to sweeten the whole brew...i really enjoyed where you took this!. keep it up and shine on!... inimitable, heather..:) huggs
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Date: 6/14/2013 11:15:00 AM
very clever Heather love it xx
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Date: 6/14/2013 10:50:00 AM
You have Iambic'd my Pentameter. ;) I love the wanton forwardness & initiative in the ending. It's a great mindset to have.
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