Heather Ober Poet Light Verse

A Formal Evening

Haibun trying to read your mind from afar,
sitting acrostic from you at the bar.
Iamb itching to sit on the stool beside you,
but somebody's sonnet - and I don't think she'll move.
Are we just a couplet of friends having drinks?
Maybe you quintella me what you think.
I feel giddy and dizain without any warning,
and I know I'm going to feel verse in the morning.
But we've been playing footles and it feels so right,
so why not just tanka me home tonight?

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Carrie Richards July 22, 2013 at 11:57 AM This was PERFECT !!! Loved the play on poetry......"but somebody's sonnet......" that cracked me up !!!!

Tim Ryerson July 20, 2013 at 3:53 AM Feather, my fear - Please do my ego a favor and check out 'Coming Out of the Cage'...It uses similar word play as this though it falls far short of yours, which in my opinion is pure comic genius...

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl July 20, 2013 at 12:14 AM Ha super write heather Congratulations on your win xx

Tim Ryerson July 19, 2013 at 5:32 PM HAHAHA!...VERY lever Weather!...I think I'm falling in shove with you, will you carry me yesterday, or shall I impose first?...Neither way, I'm tame if you are...Of coors, we'll need to have flood tests first to make sure we're compactable...Conflagurations and rest wishbones in the suture - Rim Tyerson Tim Ryerson July 19, 2013 at 5:37 PM I also dove the way you misuse different poetess formals here two...

Skat A July 19, 2013 at 5:05 PM this is nice.... Skat

Delysia Hendricks July 19, 2013 at 4:45 PM Brilliant, Heather. Congratulations on a superb win. Licia :-)

Poet Destroyer A July 19, 2013 at 3:26 PM Heather, Congratulations on your winning poem..pd

Roy Jerden July 19, 2013 at 3:24 PM Really good, Heather! Just a little shorter than required. Congratulations on your fine win! Cheers, Roy.

Poet Jmariah June 24, 2013 at 5:08 AM Oh I love this very clever poem. You've put a huge smile on my face to start my day. Thank you.

Painted Hunter June 17, 2013 at 12:11 PM That's awesome, Heather. You are slick! It's a fave, of course. Kimo-ver here and gimme a high five!

Andrea Dietrich June 15, 2013 at 1:55 PM thanks, btw for liking my poetry. Wouldn't it be neat one day if we could take all our faves and make an anthology of soup favorites??

Andrea Dietrich June 15, 2013 at 1:54 PM this ADORABLE playing on words. You make me want to try it myself. I ought to!!!

Jack Horne June 15, 2013 at 11:29 AM lol, love this witty write

Eileen Manassian June 14, 2013 at 6:46 PM Girl.....this is a work of art!!!! Wow....astounded by you!!!! Playing footles, eh? Be sure you'll be tankad alright!!!!

Nette Onclaud June 14, 2013 at 12:11 PM myyy, a smorgasbord of poetic delicacies to sweeten the whole brew...i really enjoyed where you took this!. keep it up and shine on!... inimitable, heather..:) huggs

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl June 14, 2013 at 11:15 AM very clever Heather love it xx

Poet Tacito June 14, 2013 at 10:50 AM You have Iambic'd my Pentameter. ;) I love the wanton forwardness & initiative in the ending. It's a great mindset to have.