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A Fairy Tale Retold

She entered the ballroom, her nerves on fire, Her synthetic dress fit her like a dream, Rustic, she knew nothing about desire, In silence, she stood, a classy extreme; He entered the ballroom, dressed like a prince, Wondering how these dances to avoid, When he saw her, his eyes he couldn't convince, She, a timeless beauty, he, overjoyed; He reached her amid the swirling dancers, She looked at him with blue eyes astounded, They danced till midnight, searching for answers, Could love blossom this quick? Left confounded; The clock struck twelve, it ended too soon, Love's illusion came to a sudden end, Silver rays emanate from the wan moon, She ran away from him, his feelings rend; Who was she? Where could he find her again? Questions bombarded his lovestruck mind, Her glass slipper came to his help and then, His lovely Cinderella he did find.

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Date: 8/4/2024 9:57:00 PM
Love your retelling of the story Joanna. Enjoy your week ahead. Tom
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Date: 7/27/2024 9:58:00 AM
Brilliant storytelling, the opening is so stunning! i love what youv done here with the eight words, and congratulations too on your win. You always write so beautifully! Pleasure reading this poetic gem, sending you light always
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Date: 7/27/2024 8:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a wonderful fairy tale write. I enjoyed reading this one.   Have a blessed weekend with your win.......................
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Date: 7/27/2024 8:27:00 AM
Back to congratulate you dear poet. Happy writing.
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Date: 7/27/2024 6:38:00 AM
That was excellent Joanna. Such a neat perspective making me feel as though I was there myself. Congratulations! It is well deserved! Take care and God Bless!
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Date: 7/27/2024 5:03:00 AM
Wonderful write Jo, Congrats on your win
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Date: 7/26/2024 12:50:00 PM
Great storytelling and use of the eight words..
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Date: 7/26/2024 7:29:00 AM
Dear Joanna, What is not to love in this retelling of a story of old. You really did a wonderful job inking this one. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 7/25/2024 9:15:00 PM
A beautiful retelling of the Cinderella story. dear Joanna. How that story used to fascinate me as a child. I understood it better when I used to read that story to my children with illustrations. You have done an excellent job, far better than I did on this topic. All the Best.
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Date: 7/25/2024 7:49:00 PM
That you took the eight words to swirl your way is astounding. Cinderella indeed is a timeless beauty. I loved your poem dear poet. +FAV. Happy writing.
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Date: 7/25/2024 2:37:00 PM
This is such a sweet retelling of it! Also so interesting where those 8 words led you
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Date: 7/25/2024 11:44:00 AM
Best of luck in the contest. I enjoyed your poem.;0)
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Date: 7/25/2024 9:19:00 AM
Great use of the contest words, well written, and moving fairy tale poem, Joanna. Good luck in the contest.
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