A Fairy Tale Retold


She entered the ballroom, her nerves on fire, 
Her synthetic dress fit her like a dream, 
Rustic, she knew nothing about desire, 
In silence, she stood, a classy extreme;

He entered the ballroom, dressed like a prince, 
Wondering how these dances to avoid, 
When he saw her, his eyes he couldn't convince, 
She, a timeless beauty, he, overjoyed;

He reached her amid the swirling dancers, 
She looked at him with blue eyes astounded, 
They danced till midnight, searching for answers, 
Could love blossom this quick? Left confounded;

The clock struck twelve, it ended too soon, 
Love's illusion came to a sudden end, 
Silver rays emanate from the wan moon, 
She ran away from him, his feelings rend;

Who was she? Where could he find her again? 
Questions bombarded his lovestruck mind, 
Her glass slipper came to his help and then, 
His lovely Cinderella he did find. 
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Cunningham Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 9:57 PM
Love your retelling of the story Joanna. Enjoy your week ahead. Tom
Empress Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 9:58 AM
Brilliant storytelling, the opening is so stunning! i love what youv done here with the eight words, and congratulations too on your win. You always write so beautifully! Pleasure reading this poetic gem, sending you light always
Goldsmith Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 8:32 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a wonderful fairy tale write. I enjoyed reading this one.   Have a blessed weekend with your win.......................
mysore Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 8:27 AM
Back to congratulate you dear poet. Happy writing.
Flannery Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 6:38 AM
That was excellent Joanna. Such a neat perspective making me feel as though I was there myself. Congratulations! It is well deserved! Take care and God Bless!
May Avatar
July 27, 2024 at 5:03 AM
Wonderful write Jo, Congrats on your win
One Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 12:50 PM
Great storytelling and use of the eight words..
Rodgers Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 7:29 AM
Dear Joanna, What is not to love in this retelling of a story of old. You really did a wonderful job inking this one. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
George Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 9:15 PM
A beautiful retelling of the Cinderella story. dear Joanna. How that story used to fascinate me as a child. I understood it better when I used to read that story to my children with illustrations. You have done an excellent job, far better than I did on this topic. All the Best.
mysore Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 7:49 PM
That you took the eight words to swirl your way is astounding. Cinderella indeed is a timeless beauty. I loved your poem dear poet. +FAV. Happy writing.
Dietrich Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 2:37 PM
This is such a sweet retelling of it! Also so interesting where those 8 words led you
Lamoureux Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 11:44 AM
Best of luck in the contest. I enjoyed your poem.;0)
Roper Avatar
July 25, 2024 at 9:19 AM
Great use of the contest words, well written, and moving fairy tale poem, Joanna. Good luck in the contest.
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