A Double Pyramid To Say Good-Bye

Do not put me in a box where I can't be seen. I will not hide anymore, I must be set free to fly. Do not put me in a box, where I can not breath. Yes I need fresh air to breath, friendships suck the air out of the air. No!
No! life here for us now, I need to move far away from you. No more hurting for me, your words hurt. Your silence is wrong, my life will be very fun filled with joy and happiness with you not in it. I am now saying good-bye.
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Bell Avatar
February 26, 2025 at 8:08 AM
I'm thinking he doesn't rock your boat anymore. Sometimes you have to say goodbye with a mallet, just to get your point made. Something tells me reconciliation is not on the cards.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 26, 2025 at 12:44 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. It happened last week with an old girlfriend. Where was your mallet when I needed it? Haha! The poem came to me in a flash. I still Do Not understand people & people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Reconciliation is not in the cards. Not when I have been hurt by her many times. Have A Blessed Day.......
Williams Avatar
February 26, 2025 at 3:57 AM
Dear Paula, I love the double formation.Your poem is powerful and deeply emotional, capturing the feeling of breaking free from a stifling situation. The repetition of "Do not put me in a box" emphasizes a longing for freedom, both physically and emotionally. The contrast between the pain of suffocation and the liberation of moving on is striking. Your words carry a strong sense of self-empowerment, making it clear that you are choosing happiness and growth over toxicity. It’s raw, honest, and beautifully defiant. Keep writing from the heart—it truly resonates! All the best. Maria
Goldsmith Avatar
February 26, 2025 at 12:37 PM
Thanks for reading/writing and for All the best. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. Also thanks for your wonderful comment. It happened last week. Then the poem came to me in a flash. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Have A Blessed Day.......
Poet Avatar
February 25, 2025 at 1:30 PM
Hello Paula, For the sake of our own pleasure and stability, it is always crucial to quit toxic relations. This lovely form poem expresses it so perfectly!
Goldsmith Avatar
February 26, 2025 at 12:25 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be a, lovely form poem expresses it so perfectly. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Have A Blessed Day.......
Jones Avatar
February 25, 2025 at 11:23 AM
Sometimes we have to end unhealthy relationships to gain peace and happiness. This nice shape poem says this beautifully!
Goldsmith Avatar
February 26, 2025 at 12:22 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. You are so right, we do need to end unhealthy relationships to gain peace and happiness. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Have A Blessed Day.......
Empress Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 9:07 PM
Some people can be like storms, when they leave, life is so much better as youv said here "Your silence is wrong, my life will be very fun filled with joy and happiness with you not in it" yes! A powerful voice of yours iv heard through those lines! Very well expressed and delivered shape poem. Pleasure reading this. Sending you light always
Goldsmith Avatar
February 25, 2025 at 8:28 AM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. It happened last week. Then the poem came to me is a flash. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Oh Yes, when they leave, life is so much better.... Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Canerdy Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 3:44 PM
A piece that conveys a strong message of self-preservation and determination to leave "captivity" behind, Paula! Janice
Goldsmith Avatar
February 25, 2025 at 8:26 AM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. It happened last week. Then the poem came to me is a flash. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Onclaud Avatar
February 23, 2025 at 9:50 AM
very interesting view of the self snd another designed through you templates, paula ...best winning wishes!
Goldsmith Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 1:06 PM
Thanks for reading/writing and for best winning wishes. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to have, very interesting view. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Tor Avatar
February 23, 2025 at 8:34 AM
wow Paula this one was a different Poem from you. Your stand is tough on this relationship and sometimes it is the best way to resolve one's pain. Lovey piece of truthful reality my dear. I have been away and now returning. Maria Williams did a video song of one of my poems Wishing upon a Star on her Poem page if you have some spare time please go to Marias page and comment on the video. I hope you like the poem and video Dear Paula.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 1:03 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. It happened last week. Then the poem came to me is a flash. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. I took Sunday off. Today I saw/read the POTD. Great Job By All. I Soup Mailed You. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
George Avatar
February 22, 2025 at 7:39 PM
Your last wish is so genuine. Being in a box is suffocating. You wish to fly like a bird. The Pharaoh's of Egypt must be suffocating within the pyramids. I had the fortune to see the pyramids of Egypt. Great shape poem. All the Best dear Paula.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 12:56 PM
Thanks for reading/writing and for All the Best. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be, so genuine. Thanks... I would love to see the pyramids of Egypt. You were very lucky. How about a write on them??? I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Kendrick Avatar
February 22, 2025 at 2:16 PM
Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Thanks for sharing your nice work with us. Sara K
Goldsmith Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 12:51 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
DiMino Avatar
February 22, 2025 at 2:13 PM
To stay in a bad relationship, is to be owned. Even thinking back, recalling, is yet to be owned. Wipe clean. New slate. Excellent advice!
Goldsmith Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 12:49 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. You are so right when you say, " Wipe clean. New slate." Been wiped clean with a new slate here. Hooray!!! Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Poet Avatar
February 22, 2025 at 10:44 AM
You have a wonderful message in the two pyramids of Ether. Both freedom and this are fierce. Those two pyramids are very awesome. Happy Holidays, How Ingenious!
Goldsmith Avatar
February 24, 2025 at 12:46 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be, Ingenious. Your kind words made my day very happy. Thanks... I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Rodrigues Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 8:19 PM
Well said! Sometimes we must say goodbye.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 22, 2025 at 7:13 AM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be, Well said. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Yes, sometimes we must say goodbye. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Dietrich Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 4:13 PM
Great message in your double etheree used as pyramids. Clever!
Goldsmith Avatar
February 22, 2025 at 7:10 AM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be, Clever. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Romios Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 9:08 AM
Lobe your use of a double pyranid, makes the meaning of the poem more powergul Love Pangie xoxo.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:45 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my Double Pyramid for my "Good-Bye" write. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. It all ended this week. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Hugs... Have A Blessed Day.......
Rodgers Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 7:32 AM
Dear Paula, This cuts deep, like a breath held too long, then finally released. The weight of silence, the sharpness of goodbye, I feel it all. Freedom is fierce, and so is this. Love the double pyramid. Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:42 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my "Good-Bye" write. Also glad you love my double pyramid. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. It all ended this week. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Andresen Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 1:45 AM
- You can do without false friendships, Paula ... a powerful poem ... and creatively inserted into two pyramids :) - hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:37 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be a, powerful poem. You are so right, I can do without false friendships. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves a friend when they are not. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Hugs... Have A Blessed Day.......
De Beaulieu Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 4:34 PM
Hello Paula, a lot of pain here. I sense it. I also like the way you did this poem. Hugs. /Darlene/
De Beaulieu Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 4:40 PM
Hello Paula, Yes I am nice to others when they hurt me. I do not hurt them. yet they hurt me. I never understood that. Thank you for telling me. Hugs. /Darlene/
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:34 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my "Good-Bye" write. Yes, pain here. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves friends. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Hugs...Have A Blessed Day.......
Mckeithan Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 2:41 PM
Powerful poem and a good shape. Poignant.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:30 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be a, Powerful poem and a good shape. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves friends. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Kavanagh  Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 1:34 PM
And good riddance too may I say Paula, way to go! a double whammy for the culprit, love the paradox (your words hurt, your silence is wrong) I bet it felt good writing this piece, cheers David
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:28 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my "Good-Bye" write. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. It all ended this week. It felt great writing and letting them go. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves friends. Cheers to you as you write away.... A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Greenhough Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 1:33 PM
This is a wonderful poem. It is sad. I like how you made matching pyramids with words. You are a poetic artist. Have a blessed week.
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:23 PM
Thanks for reading/writing and for calling me a poetic artist. That made my day a happy one. Glad you enjoyed my "Good-Bye" write. Yes sad, when friends are not friends. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Anaya Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 1:14 PM
Creative and extreme, your scream intense, but I am dense to the point of your poem ?? Hope all is well, sweet poetess. Hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:19 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be, Creative and extreme. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. I am well. I still Do Not understand people and people that call them selves friends. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
Buehler Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 1:06 PM
Your shape poem is expertly crafted, and interesting, Paula. Nice work! :)
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:16 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you found my "Good-Bye" write to be, Nice work. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day.......
M  Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 12:24 PM
Interesting write Paula....which l really enjoyed my friend! Debx
Goldsmith Avatar
February 21, 2025 at 12:14 PM
Thanks for reading/writing. Glad you enjoyed my "Good-Bye" write. I had a friend (???) hurt me and this write came from it. A Double Pyramid For Double Hurt. Be nice to others when they hurt you. Have A Blessed Day......
Goldsmith Avatar
February 20, 2025 at 12:19 PM
A Double Pyramid To Say Good-Bye~Written:2/20/2025~Written By Human Poet.....
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