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A Distant Song

I sometimes,
     through the noise of disaffection,
     hear a distant song,
     with soothing comfort in its embrace,
     a calling reminding in its humanity,
     an echo of peace once owned
     but pawned for transient needs.

     Its undemanding lyric beckons without command,
     reasons in metaphors
     and smiles knowingly with intent.
     
     From fading vision,
     its sound grows dimmer,
     even as its need grows stronger.

     Would if only I could join in its refrain.
     Its melody might resonate in needful spirit
     to mend this weary heart
     and return the memories 
     of why I scaled its notes.


     Distant Things Contest 
     Sponsored By John Lawless 06/09/2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Lindley Avatar
August 2, 2016 at 10:40 AM
What a pleasure to read this great poem and experience again the memories this piece evokes.. A gem I add to my fav ist..
Smith Avatar
August 2, 2016 at 10:51 AM
I treasure your comment Robert because of the respect for your talent, thank you...
Dietrich Avatar
July 22, 2016 at 5:24 PM
this has such a longing to it or a feeling of nostalgia. Love the atmosphere you created.
Smith Avatar
July 22, 2016 at 10:03 PM
I'm so happy you visited this one Andrea, thank you...
Neumann Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 1:50 PM
That is beautiful and I think I can relate to that. I love the 'scaling of notes' and 'beckoning without command'. This is written from the heart and for the heart.
Smith Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 8:01 PM
Such kind words Kai, thank you so much...
La France Avatar
June 26, 2016 at 10:09 PM
Charlie, I love your poem 7, to mend this weary heart, oh I can relate to that and thanks for visiting ~
Smith Avatar
June 26, 2016 at 10:33 PM
Your response is mend enough to resonate its beckoning to this weary soul by reminding me yet again of your unadulterated humanity... What a friend to say such things...My unwavering gratitude is not enough. How about a nickel?...
Eastman Avatar
June 16, 2016 at 10:19 AM
An interesting piece.
Smith Avatar
June 16, 2016 at 8:22 PM
Thanks for the visit Carol...
Grasso Avatar
June 11, 2016 at 9:56 PM
This reads soft and sweet to me , Charlie. I like it. ...Fran
Smith Avatar
June 11, 2016 at 10:02 PM
Thank you so much Francis...
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2016 at 7:55 AM
For some reason the picture and poem made me think of a song from many years ago. "Some people say a man is made out of mud" I think it might have been called "The Company Store".
Smith Avatar
June 11, 2016 at 8:21 AM
I believe you're thinking of "Sixteen Tons" by Tennessee Ernie Ford. It never crossed my mind. More the picture probably than the poem?...
Haight Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 10:06 AM
You wove such an emotional feeling of longing into your poem, Charlie. Beautifully composed, and I wish you all the best for the contest. 7 Sandra
Smith Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 2:56 PM
I do so hope you enjoyed the read Sandra, thank you...
Mark Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 3:38 AM
Very well written, great images served in good portions, the first two lines feel Unformatted , the word " can" is not necessary, leave " I sometimes" on the top line then drop the rest down .....this will emphasise your direction, and not let the power be diminished under the rest of the sentence....well done
Mark Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 5:27 PM
Reads smooth, well done once again.....
Smith Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 7:25 AM
Agreed, edit on my polish cloth, your skills may even rub off on one so humble as this lesser skilled student. Thank you Ian... for you to take the time to offer improvements I consider a compliment...
Dietrich Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 6:18 PM
what a GREAT idea for this contest. I really like this. Sure hope I can be as clever!! (I think John will love this)
Smith Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 9:46 PM
Here We go again Andrea, odds are in the wrong direction. Thanks for the encouragement, as always...
Andresen Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 1:46 PM
- Beautiful memories .... beautiful music - Great written, good luck in the contest Charlie - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Smith Avatar
June 9, 2016 at 9:42 PM
I'm always delighted to know you've paid me a visit Anne-Lise, thank you...
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