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A Distant Song

I sometimes,
     through the noise of disaffection,
     hear a distant song,
     with soothing comfort in its embrace,
     a calling reminding in its humanity,
     an echo of peace once owned
     but pawned for transient needs.

     Its undemanding lyric beckons without command,
     reasons in metaphors
     and smiles knowingly with intent.
     
     From fading vision,
     its sound grows dimmer,
     even as its need grows stronger.

     Would if only I could join in its refrain.
     Its melody might resonate in needful spirit
     to mend this weary heart
     and return the memories 
     of why I scaled its notes.


     Distant Things Contest 
     Sponsored By John Lawless 06/09/2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 8/2/2016 10:40:00 AM
What a pleasure to read this great poem and experience again the memories this piece evokes.. A gem I add to my fav ist..
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Charlie Smith
Date: 8/2/2016 10:51:00 AM
I treasure your comment Robert because of the respect for your talent, thank you...
Date: 7/22/2016 5:24:00 PM
this has such a longing to it or a feeling of nostalgia. Love the atmosphere you created.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 7/22/2016 10:03:00 PM
I'm so happy you visited this one Andrea, thank you...
Date: 7/13/2016 1:50:00 PM
That is beautiful and I think I can relate to that. I love the 'scaling of notes' and 'beckoning without command'. This is written from the heart and for the heart.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 7/13/2016 8:01:00 PM
Such kind words Kai, thank you so much...
Date: 6/26/2016 10:09:00 PM
Charlie, I love your poem 7, to mend this weary heart, oh I can relate to that and thanks for visiting ~
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/26/2016 10:33:00 PM
Your response is mend enough to resonate its beckoning to this weary soul by reminding me yet again of your unadulterated humanity... What a friend to say such things...My unwavering gratitude is not enough. How about a nickel?...
Date: 6/16/2016 10:19:00 AM
An interesting piece.
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/16/2016 8:22:00 PM
Thanks for the visit Carol...
Date: 6/11/2016 9:56:00 PM
This reads soft and sweet to me , Charlie. I like it. ...Fran
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/11/2016 10:02:00 PM
Thank you so much Francis...
Date: 6/11/2016 7:55:00 AM
For some reason the picture and poem made me think of a song from many years ago. "Some people say a man is made out of mud" I think it might have been called "The Company Store".
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/11/2016 8:21:00 AM
I believe you're thinking of "Sixteen Tons" by Tennessee Ernie Ford. It never crossed my mind. More the picture probably than the poem?...
Date: 6/10/2016 10:06:00 AM
You wove such an emotional feeling of longing into your poem, Charlie. Beautifully composed, and I wish you all the best for the contest. 7 Sandra
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/10/2016 2:56:00 PM
I do so hope you enjoyed the read Sandra, thank you...
Date: 6/10/2016 3:38:00 AM
Very well written, great images served in good portions, the first two lines feel Unformatted , the word " can" is not necessary, leave " I sometimes" on the top line then drop the rest down .....this will emphasise your direction, and not let the power be diminished under the rest of the sentence....well done
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Anthony Mark
Date: 6/10/2016 5:27:00 PM
Reads smooth, well done once again.....
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/10/2016 7:25:00 AM
Agreed, edit on my polish cloth, your skills may even rub off on one so humble as this lesser skilled student. Thank you Ian... for you to take the time to offer improvements I consider a compliment...
Date: 6/9/2016 6:18:00 PM
what a GREAT idea for this contest. I really like this. Sure hope I can be as clever!! (I think John will love this)
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/9/2016 9:46:00 PM
Here We go again Andrea, odds are in the wrong direction. Thanks for the encouragement, as always...
Date: 6/9/2016 1:46:00 PM
- Beautiful memories .... beautiful music - Great written, good luck in the contest Charlie - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Charlie Smith
Date: 6/9/2016 9:42:00 PM
I'm always delighted to know you've paid me a visit Anne-Lise, thank you...
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