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A Delicate Delirium

He fell somewhere between 90 and 180 on an obtuse scale of the indigent poverty had left him more than poor his life an allegory of alleys longing for the halcyon of hallways an egregious attempt to mediate a delicate delirium to consecrate discarded bread sup with the long tailed sleep in the dread of awakening. 8/31/2019 Eight word challenge 9 Poetry Contest

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John Hamilton

Date: 9/12/2019 10:48:00 AM

You did well with the eight words, stringing some together in one sentence, so congrats on placing in my contest! You'll notice the top winners wrote more extensively, amplifying the meaning of each word. Just a thought for next time!

Lin Lane

Date: 9/12/2019 5:08:00 AM

Delicate is the mind that succumbs to delirium. This is well written, John. I hope you're well...it's been quite a while since I've been around to read you.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/12/2019 8:09:00 AM

That's the most natural way in which to write. Tallyho to be chased by such a muse! Nice to read you.

John Lawless
Date: 9/12/2019 8:01:00 AM

Hey, Lin, always nice to hear from you. I am well - the muse just took off with the words.

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/12/2019 1:06:00 AM

Congrats on your placement in the contest!;)

John Lawless
Date: 9/12/2019 8:00:00 AM

Thanks for stopping to read and comment Brenda, alway appreciated.

Funom Makama

Date: 9/9/2019 10:38:00 AM

Your lines expectedly weigh in tonnes and your consistency has made you a master of masters in this act. This is beyond compliments. Good work mate. An absolute beauty.

John Lawless
Date: 9/12/2019 7:58:00 AM

Thanks for the high praise...my pen is blushing....and the muse will be intolerably smug for a few days. Appreciate the visit Funom.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 9/1/2019 10:55:00 AM

So discerning of the downtrodden. So sad ending and probably true.

John Lawless
Date: 9/12/2019 7:57:00 AM

And sadly a too often seen situation here in the City of Boston. amid such plenty.....so many still struggle. Appreciate the visit Sunlite