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A Deal With Death

As i sit in this hospital bed right now i start to get weary and i stand up to catch my bearings and i collapse. and as soon as i hit the ground i fall down the rabbit hole so to speak. i reach the end and fall out of a rain gutter, and i fall into this dark street. As i look around there is nothing but these old rickety projects for houses built in this "Jack The Ripper" looking area. and i started walking and saw someone and with every step i took my breathe got a little colder. it wasn't concerning me until i started shaking i got so cold, and i realized i didn't know where the hell i was going i guess i had just been walking for 2 hours. and i stopped walking and realized i was in the same spot where i fell out of the rain gutter. now this bothered me, But then i heard a very old man's soft voice calling my name, i didnt know the man but i recognized the voice. so i started to run towards the echo of his voice and finally caught up with him but as soon as i went to touch him he collapsed into a lifeless corpse laying on his stomach wearing exactly what i was wearing and i turned him over and it was me............. and then i woke up and i found out i was in a 2 and a half month coma and i just came out..

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Date: 2/26/2012 8:36:00 PM
Jake, this is a tough poem... I've seen sad situations... in my life... hope all is well now...have a nice and wonderful night..pd
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Date: 2/26/2012 2:17:00 PM
Interesting tale. My son saw his grandfather immediately after coming out of his coma. That was July 2010. My Dad died in 2009. Vince
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Date: 2/26/2012 1:27:00 PM
Sounds like a night terror scenario, very scary . Well written though. Ihave had nightmares where I just keep ending at the begining, I didn't like it one bit. Hope it never happens again. God Bless. Dave.
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Date: 2/26/2012 8:03:00 AM
I never put the Horrible Writer Thing up Here my computer has a virus
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Date: 2/25/2012 11:10:00 PM
This is a well written piece. I think that you truly have talent. Please keep writing.
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Date: 2/25/2012 10:39:00 PM
Please Comment and tell me what you think i think im a horrible writer
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