Blues In White

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*Image of Walks Warns by Wage.com. Blues In White Dressed in white, she looked so refined, Then I got a text, from who, was undefined, Message opened eyes, and was well timed, As I searched the vacuums of my mind, An emptied cranium is all I would find, 'Tis words to spew as I have an axe to grind, Of a sordid brief affair where love was blind, As lies beget lies, for she was one of a kind, For she had a lover, though she declined, Says she loved me in soft repeats, to remind, But at that point, I was far too resigned, My vagrant mouth said words that maligned, Every name in the book, for I was unkind, Then I took a breath, so that I would unwind, Laid my ring on a book, that was left unsigned, As she stood by the altar, leaving her behind, For 'twas our wedding day, I have just outlined. 2019 May 20 *1st Place* A BRIAN STRAND 1091 ~~Brian Strand: Judged 2022 March 18

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/31/2022 12:38:00 PM

Sad state of affairs for the bride. Congrats on being on Brian's winners list. Way to go. Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 4/2/2022 12:31:00 AM

Hurt goes on hurting -- thanks, Sara, blessings my friend, Aloha~William

Christuraj Alex

Date: 3/18/2022 8:51:00 PM

"she had a lover, though she declined","she stood by the altar, leaving her behind" - Great on infidelity. Yet, very realistically penned. Congratulations.

Hilo Poet
Date: 3/18/2022 9:18:00 PM

A poignant tale I had weaved sometime ago on the said subject (infidelity), Christuraj, I appreciate your highlights and your shared thoughts my friend, Aloha~William

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/21/2019 1:03:00 PM

Poets too afraid too comment honestly? not me.. I am a bit dense in the head at times, for sure and willing to say so. I wasn't sure if you married her or not. I like the plot behind this, but failed to get what happened. You can Soupmail me if you choose. If not, that's ok too Panagiota

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/18/2022 2:27:00 PM

Pangie, if you would unblock me, I'd be most happy to explain the poem, as I believe I understand it. Obviously her husband-to-be learned some things he wasn't aware of during the wedding planning.

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/21/2019 4:03:00 PM

A marriage that was not meant to be, of a secret affair revealed by a jilted lover to her groom, who has returned to a bachelor's paradise. Soup mail, unnecessary, as perhaps others may be on a similar boat Panagiota, as ambiguity of the vast interpretations of tethered words by one lies in the realm of a subjective nature, Aloha wk