John Hamilton Poet Narrative

A Complete Failure, Overwhelmed With Joy

A complete failure, overwhelmed with joy.

I wanted to write 
a beautiful rhyming poem
for your contest David, 
but alas!
I'm a complete failure!

What! 

A complete failure you say!
Yes, that's what I said!
A complete and total failure! 

But...

wait a minute...

isn't a failure, in it's very essence
it's very core mean 
not achieving your goal,
hence being incomplete,
or imperfect?

How can something therefore,
inherently imperfect or 
incomplete, then be complete?
Impossible!!!

ok ok, 
so I'm just a failure then.

Even so, being the failure that I am,

some days I am overwhelmed with joy!

What! Overwhelmed with joy! 

Joy, is a beautiful inner quality, 
a feeling of contentment 
and happiness.
Can you really get too much?
Does that makes any sense?

(Oh look an unintentional rhyme
just jumped in there!
Good! Anyway...I digress.)

Overwhelmed with joy...hmmm

I can see it now, going to the
psychiatrist and saying

Doctor! Doctor! 

You've got to help me

Well, what is it!

I'm overwhelmed with...
Anxiety?
No!
Grief?
No!
Sorrow?
No! 
Pain?
No!
It's too hard even to express in words!
Go on!
Don't worry, 
everything you tell me 
is confidential!

ok ok ..
it's just... that...I'm so overwhelmed with...

Yes...

Joy....there I said it!

Like that's ever going to happen!

Or the conversation as follows:

Hey Bob, did you hear about Joe?
No, what happened?
He killed himself!
Really!
Yeah poor guy, was just so overwhelmed!
With anxiety?
No!
With grief?
No!
Pain?
No!
Sorrow?
No!
What then?

It was the...

joy...

really? 

Wow!

that joy will get you every time!

Yeah, I guess he just got so overwhelmed 
and couldn't take it any more!

Poor fella! How did he do it?

Drowned himself in a thimble of water!

Really! Wow! 

Must have felt like a complete failure!!!

John Derek Hamilton
August23,2016

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Richard Lamoureux January 15, 2020 at 12:23 PM if you are going to be overwhelmed, joy is the way to go. This brought me a smile. Thanks for your visit. John Hamilton January 15, 2020 at 12:40 PM I can't believe you picked this oldie to read today, I don't know where I got this one from but thanks for bringing me back to this one. Glad you enjoyed this one. HAGD

Seosamh De Burca September 9, 2016 at 9:56 AM Clever and humorous, grate job and congrats on your placement. John Hamilton September 9, 2016 at 7:42 PM Thanks for your visit and comment I appreciate it!

Jan Allison September 8, 2016 at 1:54 AM Great to read this one again John many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx John Hamilton September 8, 2016 at 5:48 AM Thanks Jan see no N/A! Wow We did good!

Beautiful Scars September 7, 2016 at 1:21 PM lollollollol! this is great John! congrats on your placment! :)-luloo John Hamilton September 7, 2016 at 7:14 PM You forgot an lol. Thanks Laura congrats to you too we just squeeked in this one!

Teddy Kimathi September 7, 2016 at 8:56 AM Greetings John. You managed to create a dialogue which engages the reader in the dramatic, funny tension!! Congrats for your WIN in the contest!! ;-) John Hamilton September 7, 2016 at 11:56 AM Thanks Teddy, appreciate the visit and the comment!

Beautiful Scars September 2, 2016 at 8:20 PM Dear John, this is great! you have a silly sense of humor! loved this congrats on your placement :)-luloo John Hamilton September 2, 2016 at 8:25 PM Thanks Laura, it was a funny one, glad you like it, it makes me laugh every time I read it!

Jan Allison September 1, 2016 at 2:27 AM dropping back with my congrats John:-) hugs jan xx John Hamilton September 1, 2016 at 6:11 AM Thanks Jan, wow you are everywhere! Super poetess!

Joanna Daniel August 31, 2016 at 4:05 AM Congratulations on HM in Just make me laugh contest, John:) John Hamilton August 31, 2016 at 7:36 AM Thanks Jo, see what I mean, you never know what the sponsor is looking for, but I'm happy anyway.

Joanna Daniel August 29, 2016 at 1:45 AM Thank you for your kind words, John:) hope you have read Andrea's entry... I liked that one so much:) if not, do go through it:)

Joanna Daniel August 28, 2016 at 8:26 AM I'm real glad you liked mine, John:)I was not satisfied with it so much.. I did enter it in the contest, but not sure whether it will do well or not... John Hamilton August 28, 2016 at 1:28 PM Looks like it's hard to tell what the sponsor is looking for sometimes, hope yours does well!

Joanna Daniel August 27, 2016 at 12:22 AM Lovely take on the contest, John:) I enjoyed the conversation the best:) John Hamilton August 27, 2016 at 7:46 AM Thanks Jo, did you enter yours, it will do well for sure, this one I'm not sure.

John Fleming August 23, 2016 at 5:06 PM I think this poem stands more than a fair chance of success in the comp, John. My best regards...And good luck! :) john P.s A seven! John Hamilton August 23, 2016 at 6:04 PM Thanks John, nice to hear from you, I respect your feedback, thanks a lot for the 7!

Lynn Marie August 23, 2016 at 4:05 PM Very creatively penned..fun to read :-) Great 'dialogue'...feels like a 'live' comedy sketch :-) My best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn John Hamilton August 23, 2016 at 5:26 PM Thanks, I don't know what came over me today, Daniel thinks it's a minor crisis. Ha ha.

Daniel Turner August 23, 2016 at 4:02 PM Wow John, you've left me overwhelmed with.. I mean this is seriously funny, no I meant my unbiased opinion is I think your just having a minor crisis! Fun read, John. I think I crash landed. John Hamilton August 23, 2016 at 5:25 PM Your unbiased opinion eh! I think I am having a minor crisis, I don't know these oxymorons crack me up, been laughing all day. Thanks for the laugh Daniel.

Nette Onclaud August 23, 2016 at 3:56 PM right on, john... sounds like a part of a theatrical script!..very good!..huggs John Hamilton August 23, 2016 at 5:23 PM Sometimes they come out ok, Thanks Nette!

Jan Allison August 23, 2016 at 2:49 PM ha ha ha John this is extremely witty:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx7 John Hamilton August 23, 2016 at 5:22 PM Thanks Jan, just finishing of the chocolates.