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A Community Pool In Richmond

Paper art was tongue steeped wet,
Midnight’s swim in gel.
Tactile only silhouette,
Dense unseen new shell.

Dawn’s hot shower could not clean,
Midday’s warmth woke me.
Slow cures had tapped time’s canteen,    
Blotter’s spell rinsed free.

Copyright © Rob Carmack | Year Posted 2015

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Constance La France Date: 12/16/2018 9:09:00 AM Rob, congratulations on having your wonderful poem chosen as a Feature Poem this week, enjoy the honor ~ Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 12/29/2018 3:46:00 PM TY Constance.

Julia Ward Date: 6/24/2015 8:53:00 AM I get it, but it needed a slow read, which is no trouble to do on a short poem, after all. Login to Reply

Kim Van Breda Date: 5/13/2015 11:14:00 AM Hi Rob Loved this poem. The title caught my eye, as we are visiting Katy/TX from S. Africa right now, and using the local community pool to do swimming training. What a delight to find your poem was anything but 'community predictable text'. I love your style.. a lot of my own work of late has been in what you term 'cryptic' format. It allows for total freedom of expression.. and a prayer that people will "get it" ;) Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 5/13/2015 12:15:00 PM Thank you Kim. I do love cryptics both for the freedom of expression and for the freedom it allows interpretations. The target audience of this poem is very small. I hope you are enjoying your 'trip'. I will have to check out some of your poems.

Skat A Date: 5/3/2015 9:47:00 PM Rob, Congratulations on your Trochee poem win. :) SKAT Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 5/2/2015 7:00:00 AM congrats on your win Rob now I see what you mean about cryptic writing! Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 5/3/2015 2:06:00 PM Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/2/2015 1:05:00 AM You were right, Rob, it WAS the cryptic one! the first stanza had excellent meter of 7/5 trochee though, and I kind of got the meaning of your poem. the pool stunk!! Congrats in my contest. Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 5/2/2015 2:45:00 AM This is why I like cryptic, you can have different interpretations. Never thought of yours. Thanks for the placement.

Skat A Date: 5/2/2015 12:52:00 AM ROB:) Congratulations! Forever ~SKAT~ Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 5/3/2015 2:10:00 PM Thank You.

Peter Lewis Holmes Date: 4/15/2015 2:23:00 AM Hmmm...nice realist write Rob...and thanks for placing my contest entry...Peter Login to Reply

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 4/13/2015 9:00:00 AM Intriguing and mysterious in quite creepy fishy way... this how I see this poem... though I like the use of so many descriptions that bring about goosebumps.. !//olive eloisa Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/11/2015 6:56:00 PM Thanks for visiting me Rob. Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/10/2015 8:10:00 AM This is quite interesting and cryptic, I like it! Good luck in the contest Rob. Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 4/6/2015 5:58:00 PM Rob, you have penned a good trochee/Quatrain poem for the contest, 7, best of luck and thanks for visiting my poetry Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 4/6/2015 11:26:00 PM Thanks.

Viv Wigley Date: 4/6/2015 1:59:00 AM That's terrific, Paul. Sounds like the memory of a guilty pleasure. Good luck. Regards, Viv Login to Reply Rob Carmack Date: 4/6/2015 11:24:00 PM No problem. I just decided to play along. Thank you for reading and commenting on the poem. Viv Wigley Date: 4/6/2015 7:54:00 AM I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob (as you can gather, I haven't got a blackboard and chalk) I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. Apologies, from Frank :) Rob Carmack Date: 4/6/2015 6:49:00 AM Thank you, Dave. It was something so much from something so little.