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A Community Pool In Richmond

Paper art was tongue steeped wet, Midnight’s swim in gel. Tactile only silhouette, Dense unseen new shell. Dawn’s hot shower could not clean, Midday’s warmth woke me. Slow cures had tapped time’s canteen, Blotter’s spell rinsed free.

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Constance La France

Date: 12/16/2018 9:09:00 AM

Rob, congratulations on having your wonderful poem chosen as a Feature Poem this week, enjoy the honor ~

Rob Carmack
Date: 12/29/2018 3:46:00 PM

TY Constance.

Julia Ward

Date: 6/24/2015 8:53:00 AM

I get it, but it needed a slow read, which is no trouble to do on a short poem, after all.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/13/2015 11:14:00 AM

Hi Rob Loved this poem. The title caught my eye, as we are visiting Katy/TX from S. Africa right now, and using the local community pool to do swimming training. What a delight to find your poem was anything but 'community predictable text'. I love your style.. a lot of my own work of late has been in what you term 'cryptic' format. It allows for total freedom of expression.. and a prayer that people will "get it" ;)

Rob Carmack
Date: 5/13/2015 12:15:00 PM

Thank you Kim. I do love cryptics both for the freedom of expression and for the freedom it allows interpretations. The target audience of this poem is very small. I hope you are enjoying your 'trip'. I will have to check out some of your poems.

Skat A

Date: 5/3/2015 9:47:00 PM

Rob, Congratulations on your Trochee poem win. :) SKAT

Jan Allison

Date: 5/2/2015 7:00:00 AM

congrats on your win Rob now I see what you mean about cryptic writing! Hugs Jan xx

Rob Carmack
Date: 5/3/2015 2:06:00 PM

Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/2/2015 1:05:00 AM

You were right, Rob, it WAS the cryptic one! the first stanza had excellent meter of 7/5 trochee though, and I kind of got the meaning of your poem. the pool stunk!! Congrats in my contest.

Rob Carmack
Date: 5/2/2015 2:45:00 AM

This is why I like cryptic, you can have different interpretations. Never thought of yours. Thanks for the placement.

Skat A

Date: 5/2/2015 12:52:00 AM

ROB:) Congratulations! Forever ~SKAT~

Rob Carmack
Date: 5/3/2015 2:10:00 PM

Thank You.

Peter Lewis Holmes

Date: 4/15/2015 2:23:00 AM

Hmmm...nice realist write Rob...and thanks for placing my contest entry...Peter

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/13/2015 9:00:00 AM

Intriguing and mysterious in quite creepy fishy way... this how I see this poem... though I like the use of so many descriptions that bring about goosebumps.. !//olive eloisa

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/11/2015 6:56:00 PM

Thanks for visiting me Rob.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/10/2015 8:10:00 AM

This is quite interesting and cryptic, I like it! Good luck in the contest Rob.

Constance La France

Date: 4/6/2015 5:58:00 PM

Rob, you have penned a good trochee/Quatrain poem for the contest, 7, best of luck and thanks for visiting my poetry

Rob Carmack
Date: 4/6/2015 11:26:00 PM

Thanks.

Viv Wigley

Date: 4/6/2015 1:59:00 AM

That's terrific, Paul. Sounds like the memory of a guilty pleasure. Good luck. Regards, Viv

Rob Carmack
Date: 4/6/2015 11:24:00 PM

No problem. I just decided to play along. Thank you for reading and commenting on the poem.

Viv Wigley
Date: 4/6/2015 7:54:00 AM

I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob (as you can gather, I haven't got a blackboard and chalk) I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. Apologies, from Frank :)

Rob Carmack
Date: 4/6/2015 6:49:00 AM

Thank you, Dave. It was something so much from something so little.