A Community Pool In Richmond

Paper art was tongue steeped wet,
Midnight’s swim in gel.
Tactile only silhouette,
Dense unseen new shell.

Dawn’s hot shower could not clean,
Midday’s warmth woke me.
Slow cures had tapped time’s canteen,    
Blotter’s spell rinsed free.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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La France Avatar
December 16, 2018 at 9:09 AM
Rob, congratulations on having your wonderful poem chosen as a Feature Poem this week, enjoy the honor ~
Carmack Avatar
December 29, 2018 at 3:46 PM
TY Constance.
Ward Avatar
June 24, 2015 at 8:53 AM
I get it, but it needed a slow read, which is no trouble to do on a short poem, after all.
Van Breda Avatar
May 13, 2015 at 11:14 AM
Hi Rob Loved this poem. The title caught my eye, as we are visiting Katy/TX from S. Africa right now, and using the local community pool to do swimming training. What a delight to find your poem was anything but 'community predictable text'. I love your style.. a lot of my own work of late has been in what you term 'cryptic' format. It allows for total freedom of expression.. and a prayer that people will "get it" ;)
Carmack Avatar
May 13, 2015 at 12:15 PM
Thank you Kim. I do love cryptics both for the freedom of expression and for the freedom it allows interpretations. The target audience of this poem is very small. I hope you are enjoying your 'trip'. I will have to check out some of your poems.
A  Avatar
May 3, 2015 at 9:47 PM
Rob, Congratulations on your Trochee poem win. :) SKAT
Allison Avatar
May 2, 2015 at 7:00 AM
congrats on your win Rob now I see what you mean about cryptic writing! Hugs Jan xx
Carmack Avatar
May 3, 2015 at 2:06 PM
Thank you.
Dietrich Avatar
May 2, 2015 at 1:05 AM
You were right, Rob, it WAS the cryptic one! the first stanza had excellent meter of 7/5 trochee though, and I kind of got the meaning of your poem. the pool stunk!! Congrats in my contest.
Carmack Avatar
May 2, 2015 at 2:45 AM
This is why I like cryptic, you can have different interpretations. Never thought of yours. Thanks for the placement.
A  Avatar
May 2, 2015 at 12:52 AM
ROB:) Congratulations! Forever ~SKAT~
Carmack Avatar
May 3, 2015 at 2:10 PM
Thank You.
Holmes Avatar
April 15, 2015 at 2:23 AM
Hmmm...nice realist write Rob...and thanks for placing my contest entry...Peter
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
April 13, 2015 at 9:00 AM
Intriguing and mysterious in quite creepy fishy way... this how I see this poem... though I like the use of so many descriptions that bring about goosebumps.. !//olive eloisa
Lamoureux Avatar
April 11, 2015 at 6:56 PM
Thanks for visiting me Rob.
Lamoureux Avatar
April 10, 2015 at 8:10 AM
This is quite interesting and cryptic, I like it! Good luck in the contest Rob.
La France Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 5:58 PM
Rob, you have penned a good trochee/Quatrain poem for the contest, 7, best of luck and thanks for visiting my poetry
Carmack Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 11:26 PM
Thanks.
Wigley Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 1:59 AM
That's terrific, Paul. Sounds like the memory of a guilty pleasure. Good luck. Regards, Viv
Carmack Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 11:24 PM
No problem. I just decided to play along. Thank you for reading and commenting on the poem.
Wigley Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 7:54 AM
I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob (as you can gather, I haven't got a blackboard and chalk) I shall not run multiple windows on my PC, Rob. Apologies, from Frank :)
Carmack Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 6:49 AM
Thank you, Dave. It was something so much from something so little.
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