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A Casual Observation

It was not that she was the only woman in the group, when mingling precariously beneath the bronze figure of William Booth, or her classic stance, when placing saintly, the newsprint covered bottle to lips willingly breached, but her opulent style, her contrast of attire, and as yet her hair unruffled. Although sparse of jewelry a gold ring dangles on a chain, catching the light as it shines in the noon day sun, a tinge of blood trickles down her neck. Her recently pierce ear lobe, bearing signs of some street wise ritual? Evidence of suave sophistication, exists with movements of grace and elegance, fingers more use to the gentle stem of the crystal goblet, than the demure grasp of the shapeless neck of a bottle of brown ale. a fork in the lane no signpost to guide one home a need or a deed Her head begins to lift higher and higher with every mouthful of distinct courage, every courteous act. Then! A look of deep despair, as the bottle is released from her reluctant deep red lips, a senseless shake only proved her greatest fear. Suddenly to her aid came a wayward chap, swiftly finishing his own endless gorge. He commences to wipe the neck of his perpetual habit, with a mucus soiled cuffless sleeve, before passing it on to her veracious hand, his eyes eagerly awaiting its return. a lane to despair not alone but in the palm existence or life After the corrosive day is over, the sun finally at rest, only the motley park bench will be her abode with printed tabloids to cover her chilled exterior, her metabolism accelerating, to become one of so many, a license to enter their dissipation, only then will options for her begin to diminish, external metamorphosis soon to blend with inner corruption, life’s destruction rapid along the highway of completion! first rays of sunshine a trial or tribulation the signpost renewed. © Harry J Horsman 2018

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Date: 10/16/2018 5:44:00 AM
Wow! Such a descriptive write. I look forward to reading more and learning to be as descriptive and as beautifully flowing as you. Mockingbird x
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Date: 10/7/2018 12:24:00 PM
You summon such eloquence as to vex my probing mind, for I’m not used to processing language such as this. It leaves me exhausted, yet curiously refreshed.
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Date: 10/5/2018 7:25:00 AM
Life deals its blows and sometimes we take a lifetime to shake it off or complete being consumed. It does take a toll on us. It's sad when the bottle is used to usher us through or problems...it only worsens. Brilliantly done!
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Date: 8/5/2018 9:56:00 AM
love this thoughtful & thought provoking write
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Date: 8/3/2018 6:43:00 PM
You call upon an army of emotions to come forth from their slumber and carry you through this ordeal. An outpouring of emotions that surges up from the heart and splashes against the page in angry defiance.. Your descriptive wording and great imagery brought it all to life. Emile.
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Date: 8/3/2018 12:26:00 PM
While I'm not familiar with the haibun form, I love the way you introduced each haiku by setting the stage. Your writing is always wonderful and this is one for my faves! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/2/2018 6:23:00 PM
Superbly executed my friend...a great read Harry...best of luck if for a contest...^WW^
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Date: 8/1/2018 12:29:00 PM
Thanks for sharing your best thoughts and soul-cry for humanity. Shalom, shalom Harry (William Booth loved to share Good News) amen
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Date: 8/1/2018 8:20:00 AM
Intensely deep poem, Harry...demands re-reading to fully grasp your sage words...thank you for sharing!
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Date: 7/31/2018 9:12:00 AM
Harry, I have a great respect for your gift of writing descriptively, this is amazing and an enjoyable read. One of the best Haibun I've read.
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Date: 7/30/2018 9:35:00 PM
I feel intoxicated right now. This was precise to the point of our limits Nicely said my friend
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Date: 7/30/2018 1:22:00 PM
Engrossing and very skillfully paced.
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Date: 7/29/2018 3:38:00 PM
Harry, I am not sure I fully grasp the last part. It is a bit enigmatic for me but I think I undersand it. Despite that, the descriptive narrative is out of this world. WOW!!
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Date: 7/29/2018 12:59:00 PM
Masterfully done! A canvas of superb beauty dear friend, harry! Much enjoyed!
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Date: 7/28/2018 11:27:00 AM
harry, i wish this haunting tale would take her to new heights, transform struggles into triumphs...after all, when we hit rock bottom, we fly high... poignantly crafted!....huggs
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Date: 7/28/2018 9:44:00 AM
A brilliant haibun from start to finish, vivid imagery, so well written Harry.
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Date: 7/28/2018 9:34:00 AM
From start to finish you wrote this with potent words..your story paints a hopeless life one feels sorry for..the effect intended in your write, well delivered..great write Harry.
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Date: 7/28/2018 9:29:00 AM
A rich observation in your haibun, Harry Horsman, of a once upon a time dignified " princess," degenerating into a homeless cinderella, this one with little hope in view. I enjoyed the haiku, the choices faced on life's journey- wise statements indeed! A profound write.
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Date: 7/28/2018 9:09:00 AM
Your imagery is superb Harry I could picture the scene so well, the ring on a gold chain made me think that she had fallen into decline and turned to drink since the loss of a husband... all those on the streets have a story to tell I am sure they don't live out their by choice:-(A very poignant piece, into my faves:-) hugs Jan xx
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Harry Horsman
Date: 7/28/2018 9:14:00 AM
Spot on Jan,

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