A Care To Spare

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I know you're out there ...
    I can hear you ... typing, rat-a-tat-tat
      I echo it, but place with intent
       each finger-step, just SO
      each notion a necklace of keystrokes
    individually-knotted ...
pearlescent beauties, round ...

      ~ I squeeze my mind of chaos, tamped and blessed
Thoughts gossamer, these tapestries I've pressed
       'Tween leaves of crimped reprieves, if dispossessed ~

       I scream without a face
   my voice of subtle silence howling windward
 I scratch messages on cell walls
my red breath burnt with the truth of negligence
 exquisite sculptures ...
   the words dripping like stigmata
       Madonna's bloody tears, each precious ...

~ I place these golden dreams in phrased bequests
       Bright dazzled shining gems of hearts expressed
Adorned with tender odes to thrum their breasts ~

how do SUCH ears not hear?
    how can such breath-embezzling eyes not capture?!?
      should your own gray matter dance a-tongue
       its metallic tang of truth would be lost ...
      I would BEG you hate me ... with every fibre
    but that is not love's opposite
THAT demon is the monster called 'indifference' ...

      ~ I knot the rope wrapped 'round my throat, aware
That you and yours are pleased to kick the chair
       Is there naught ONE poetic soul ... should care?? ~

       ... not one?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 3/16/2021 10:18:00 PM
A brilliant poem, Greg, such depth in your writing:)
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Date: 3/15/2021 2:06:00 AM
This to me is so very truly a free verse masterpiece. As the soul of this creation relays so much emotion, so much poetic genius, imho. Without any doubt this is the work of a master poet. One that surely either Byron or Keats would envy! A magnificent example of free verse. A fav my friend. God bless..
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Date: 3/14/2021 8:53:00 AM
This is another great write, love your unique phrasing and word selection, always fresh and alive, glad you keep posting, I learn from each line you pen!
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Date: 3/13/2021 6:01:00 AM
This is brilliant. I just love it... I care! Love to you and blessings to... your poem is vibrant, emotional and rich with colors bright and alive.... despite the silent screams from the words that echo through my thoughts... love this - Love Gina
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Date: 3/13/2021 5:36:00 AM
This agonizing piece screams, yet with eloquent voice. Such a mixture of feelings to read it--alarmed at the message and tone and yet entranced with the flow and beauty of phrases like "necklace of keystrokes," "breath-embezzling eyes," and "I place these golden dreams in phrased bequests." Neglect and indifference are painful and so damn frustrating! I so admire your talent, your work, and your kind spirit. You are such a blessing! <3
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