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A Captive of Circumstance



Your thought-balloons are filled with wild and magical freedom ~ until madness seizes your think tank trapping your ceaselessly chirping ideas within the teeth of its snapped steel-jaws refusing to relinquish you; lest you chew up and spit out your mind-racing brain ire over this cognitive quagmire is quite understandable ~ like the murmuration of startled starlings amassing in angst and taking wing your thoughts, your second thoughts and afterthoughts gather in pulsating dark masses swirling into flight and shifting directions turbulently twisting into tornadic spins unable or unwilling to unravel and unwind as they hurl themselves in a pessimistic panic through the maze of gray matter minefields not wanting to explode their legs-to-stand-on should they alight... ...and despite butterfly nets vying to capture them they are whirling dervishes twirling out of control -- holding your damnation in a state of suspended animation Susan Ashley March 24, 2018

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Date: 4/8/2018 6:17:00 PM
Sue....omg you swore you would write of my life! ;O lmao truly our muses have been talking hummm lol no great write again I think I will have to just go thru and click fav on all your writes and save that extra little thing I do every time I come to your piece of the soup! Lmao! You are truly a talented poetress my friend very very talented and will always inspire me to laugh ,think, and wish I could write such as you ! Lol!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/10/2018 4:56:00 PM
Hahahaha! You are too much Bren, you make me laugh :)) Glad to know what first attracted you to my poem.. the laugh I had while reading your explanation made writing it worth it lol! Your humor might have been lost on your 'captive audience' haha, but I find it quite funny lol!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 4/9/2018 5:10:00 PM
Yes they do be sharing i am convinced of it! But doyou know what first attracted me to this poem? Lmao! Thinking of a few men of mine who were incarcerated lmao! I always told them they were my captive audience hahaha! In fact I also told them I felt we should see other people and they should feel free to do so! Hahahaha! Needless to say my humor was lost on them as they did not see the humor in that thought! Lmao! But back to our poetry banter lol...I just said 1 deadly sin haha now sin sins well....I may be more appealing to the devil then good but then again the devil may pass too as he think me able to overthrow him and crown myself queen of the underworld haha! Oh another aha moment! That would make a great poem my friend indeed it would! We really do need to do a collaboration together since we are so close and see if we can make our muses uncomfortable lol! Have them squirm while we write omg! Such fun ! Ok my so sweet twin off to reply to another of our banters lol!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/8/2018 8:33:00 PM
Lol! Our muses talking - well, they were on vaca together last week and they do share a totem pole haha! Thank you, my totem twin, top of the totem pole, two heads are better than one, friend! :)) I deeply and truly appreciate your beautiful comments and the fave! I think we are both an admirer of the other, which considering we share the slim top of a totem pole, is a VERY good thing haha! But, I love your style of expression and your poetry - it's soulful, vulnerable, sensuous/sexy and captivating. Your writings (poems or comments) always make me admire your humor, laugh, think, remember and you inspire me! Also, you're lucky to have only ONE deadly sin AND you had to search for it :) - no wonder I love sharing the totem with you my lovely (almost sinless) friend :)) Much love to you always, my twin.. ~Sue
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 4/8/2018 6:17:00 PM
No not hatin or jealous more envy lol ya know I had to find one deadly sin lmao! Great write a fave and wonderful read;) much love my totem twin and thanks for the smiles!;)
Date: 3/28/2018 7:05:00 PM
the many unanswered questions about the mind, the fluidity of thought the repetition of its use, the unending battle to comprehend each stream of thought that plucks ideas from nothingness...my first thoughts after reading your intriguing poetry
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/28/2018 7:22:00 PM
How elegant your first thoughts are in response to my poem, Frederic. The thoughtful beauty of your comments have made my evening! Thank you for the delight of your visit and for your kindness. Warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan
Date: 3/27/2018 9:55:00 PM
A very clever, interesting and profound write Susan; great depiction of someone with OCD! Good luck if this is for a contest!~Che :)
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Date: 3/27/2018 10:07:00 PM
I cherish your wonderful comments, Che. No, this was not written for a contest, just written from the heart.. but you never know, it could end up in a contest someday. Many thanks for your kind words, my friend. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/27/2018 1:52:00 PM
You have described this condition very well, Susan. I too am in close contact with someone who suffers from OCD; this person acknowledges it, yet is helpless when confronting it....thus your title takes a deeper significance. ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 3/27/2018 9:49:00 PM
I relish your insightful and empathetic comments, Paul. I'm also glad you noticed the significance of the title.. I know you've been busy and I've missed your presence. I've been busy too unfortunately and have not been able to be as active here lately :( Hopefully that'll change for the better soon :)) Warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan
Date: 3/27/2018 12:02:00 AM
Be still my beating heart, Wow Su, love this poem, particularly - "like the murmuration of startled starlings amassing in angst and taking wing your thoughts, your second thoughts and afterthoughts gather in pulsating dark masses swirling into flight and shifting directions turbulently twisting into tornadic spins". It gave me motion sickness, I get it, all too well. You are an amazing wordsmith and fabulous poet. One of my favourites...this one goes in the favourites. x
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Date: 3/28/2018 12:34:00 PM
Leanne, I truly cherish your thoughtful and meaningful comments.. You mention that you 'get it'.., is this something you or someone close to you goes through as well..? Your visits to my page always delivers a smile to my face, heart and soul. Thank you for the kindness of your fave, my friend! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/26/2018 9:32:00 PM
Aha! The perfect 'brainstorm,' finally captured in letters! They say that a picture is worth 1,000 words. I say that this S.A. poem is worth a thousand pictures! A real masterpiece! :) Gershon
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/26/2018 9:42:00 PM
Gershon, your comments are truly beautiful, uplifting and inspiring.. thank you for taking the time to read and leave such thoughtful sentiments.. I apologize for not visiting your poetry lately but family demands recently and a demanding work schedule have curtailed my energy and time here lately. Thank you for your kindness. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/25/2018 7:08:00 PM
Hi Susan , I really enjoyed this powerful description of some peoples minds , a subject not talked about much , like OCD and anxiety etc ::))))hugs~~~Niall
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/25/2018 7:42:00 PM
Thank you Niall, I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. The content is a little different than usual, I guess, but no less important than writing about love or lost love, right..? :)) Thank you for your lovely comments, and as usual, your visit is delightful.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/25/2018 10:31:00 AM
I know a few people who suffer from OCD, your language has described it vividly... This could also apply to so many other mental conditions also... Excellent poetry Susan..
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/25/2018 1:40:00 PM
Yes, I suppose it can, Silent One. I was writing this from first hand experience, of seeing it (OCD and mind-racing), with someone very close to me.. I tried to convey their plight poetically. Thank you for your insightful and compassionate comments, my friend. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/25/2018 2:08:00 AM
Until madness seizes our think tank. Wow! This is a powerful poem, and you are a masterful alliteration writer, Susan. MASTERFUL!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/25/2018 1:32:00 PM
Thank you for your kindness Caren. Your beautiful comments are deeply appreciated. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/24/2018 4:05:00 PM
a captivating ride thru your thought processes, Susan... great alliteration as always.. have to say they are a little too dark, those starlings...now I would much rather my thoughts flashed as silvery sharp, shiny silhouettes, dancing in dense cerulean seas like Bernard Chan's 'Sardines' hehe :)
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/24/2018 4:25:00 PM
Thank you Taai for your awesome comments.. this poem is about mind-racing that some people with OCD suffer from, fortunately not me.. but depicted how I would imagine it to be. Yes, Bernard's gloriously exquisite, thought flashing sardines would be way more beautiful than the obsessive dark cloud of swarming starlings.. :)) your visit always delights me, my friend. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/24/2018 3:55:00 PM
ohh, so visceral, taunting, susan.. much enjoyed!...huggs
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/24/2018 7:20:00 PM
I'm so glad your felt my poem, Nette, both physically and emotionally.. I so enjoy your wonderful visits and insightful comments. Thank you! Warmest wishes. ~Susan