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Map of Southern Africa in 1899

*commonly a trading chest of goods; medicine chest of herbal remedies

Muthi is a traditional medicine practice in Southern Africa as far north as Lake Tanganyika.

‡The name the Boer forces gave the British soldiers.

Poetic form: Blues Sonnet. Rhyme scheme: AAa BBb CCc DDd ee. Poetic licence re the metre to accommodate clarity in language and content. L11: Enhanced rhyme; L12: Trailing rhyme; L13 & 14: Assonance rhyme.

See my article for details:

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Event: Anglo-Boer War 1899–1902—Measles epidemic in the concentration camps. In the voice of: Sannie Botha (a survivor). Jan’s cough kept me awake all through the night. The children are all coughing in the night; the fevers gave us all a mighty fright. The red, now itchy, spots on body parts; “Oh! Son Jan, don’t you scratch the itchy parts, as scabs and scars will follow just like warts.” If only I had negosiekist* at hand. The muthi† in friend's kist – her helping hand – but mothers dug graves with bare hands in sand. Now I might stop to shake my balled fist. The Tommies‡ shake their riffles in tight fists; they're no older than Jan when they enlisted. The torment was breaking all of our hearts and the fragile peace brokered, never lasts.

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Date: 2/19/2025 11:23:00 AM
No surprise that this gorgeous piece was authored by you! I love the detail, accuracy, and gritty spirit of this voice. You chose a weighty time and event that is not widely known, in my opinion, but should be. Ty for sharing this with us! Congratulations! Xoxo
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Suzette Richards
Date: 2/20/2025 10:32:00 AM
Thank you for honouring me with a placement on the winners list, Crystol. War is never far from the memory of mankind.
Date: 2/11/2025 4:45:00 PM
heartbreaking!
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Suzette Richards
Date: 2/16/2025 12:44:00 PM
A chapter in my family's history. Thank you for reading Kim

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