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A Bewildering Betrayal

When first I saw her on that day, the subtle way she looked at me, I felt that we were meant to be. I thought we’d walk down life’s pathway, and tantalize stroll through love’s door; we’d take the plunge for evermore. Our bond forever to portray together joined no matter what, we’d share together our life, but I never thought she would betray fallacious image of our love, eviscerate bond from above. But lures of life lead her astray down vortex of the dark of night, bewilder our love with this blight. And here behind I sadly stay with scarlet visions giving chase, as salty tears stream down my face. When first I saw her on that day I thought we’d walk down life’s pathway; our bond forever to portray. I never thought she would betray, but lures of life lead her astray, and here behind I sadly stay. June 21, 2018

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Date: 7/23/2018 3:40:00 PM
This is excellent John! Romantic and lovely, expressed in flowing lines. Congratulations on your win! : )
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/23/2018 3:54:00 PM
Thank you so much, Connie, it means a lot coming from you. This is the first poem I've written in your form and I rather enjoyed it; I will try it again! John
Date: 7/17/2018 9:49:00 AM
Back to congratulate you for your win again. Sad poem. Enjoyed.
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/17/2018 11:28:00 AM
Thank you, Susan.
Date: 7/16/2018 12:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement!
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/16/2018 12:46:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 7/16/2018 12:11:00 PM
Congratulations John, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest, it was a very tough contest to judge, well done my friend, Emile.
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/16/2018 12:15:00 PM
Thank you, Emile, I appreciate it, and thanks for hosting this contest. John
Date: 7/2/2018 2:31:00 PM
This is a powerful, insightful piece, John, that teaches something about life and love - some relationships are just not meant to be even when they may appear promising. Congratulations, my friend, on your win. Hugs and love. Pandita
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Date: 7/2/2018 1:53:00 PM
Such an outstanding poem, John, using those eight words and the Constanza form! Congratulations on your podium placement! Sandra
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John Gondolf
Date: 7/2/2018 2:13:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sandra, I appreciate it. John
Date: 6/30/2018 8:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win using the 8 words. Well done! :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/30/2018 8:45:00 AM
Thank you, Susan, I appreciate it. John
Date: 6/29/2018 6:57:00 PM
This is a difficult form to pull off, but you did it well. Congrats John on a fine win
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/29/2018 10:33:00 PM
Thanks John, I appreciate it, and thanks for hosting the contest.
Date: 6/23/2018 4:00:00 PM
A beautifully written poem, a beautiful type of poem. Lovely, but sad.
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/23/2018 4:33:00 PM
Thank you for your wonderful comments. Sandy, I appreciate your support. All the best my friend. John
Date: 6/22/2018 3:02:00 PM
Wow! This form seems so difficult to me, but you employed it with ease and created a heartfelt narrative of love found and then lost. Beautiful, John! Best wishes in the contest! Hugs, Carolyn
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/22/2018 4:31:00 PM
Thank you so much, Carolyn, I appreciate your support. John
Date: 6/21/2018 6:58:00 PM
Wonderfully written though sad in content!
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/22/2018 6:18:00 AM
Thank you, Kim.
Date: 6/21/2018 9:53:00 AM
A sad verse John, often heard of a partner wanting more then finding out there was no gold at the end of the rainbow but then too late the bridges were burnt. Tom
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/21/2018 12:15:00 PM
Thanks, Tom. People no longer believe in "till death do us part" I'm not even sure if that's part of the marriage vows any more. John
Date: 6/21/2018 9:16:00 AM
A typical tale of woe. One looking for love, the other for the bigger better deal. Nicely penned, John. Rejection is brutal!
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/21/2018 10:30:00 AM
Thanks, Daniel, I appreciate it. John
Date: 6/21/2018 8:15:00 AM
Well written John. I can feel it as I read it :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/21/2018 9:35:00 AM
Thank you for your comments, Heidi, I appreciate it. John

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