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A Bag of Spiders

A BAG of SPIDERS

I sit alone on the bench
Conversing with each passing breeze
A lone squirrel stops to listen
Its attentive tail mesmerized
There is a web of sunshine about my head
As if it were a bag full of spiders
Rustling in the darkness
Of a web-less mind
Drifting away in sunset’s shadows

©6/6/2023

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Bill Baker

July 26, 2023 at 7:59 PM

Excellent imagery in this well-written poem, John. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, my friend. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Christuraj Alex

July 19, 2023 at 11:48 PM

"Conversing with each passing breeze" - Wow only a true poet can do it. Congratulations!

Jan Allison

July 18, 2023 at 9:05 AM

what a wonderful take on the theme John, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Terry Miller

July 17, 2023 at 2:56 AM

Wonderful poetry, congratulations, I keep reading this one.

Matt Caliri

July 16, 2023 at 9:27 PM

This was probably of one of my favorite spider poems, since there's no actual spider but one inside the mind. I should have this ranked way higher, this is a very strong 10 out of 35. Great work and thanks for submitting!

Paul Willason

June 6, 2023 at 10:38 PM

You have weaved a magic poem John. The images are arresting, alive and original. Have read the poem many times and continues to excite. This IS poetry !

John Lawless

June 7, 2023 at 6:16 AM

ah, the ultimate goal of every poet.....to entice the reader to dive in again......and again.

Andrea Dietrich

June 6, 2023 at 1:04 PM

Love this line: Its attentive tail mesmerized

Andrea Dietrich

June 6, 2023 at 1:03 PM

wow, fantastic work that has to get a fave from me. I love how you used a metaphor. I have no clue what to do with that web of spiders and have never won in any of his contests, so I will probably just enjoy the poems I am reading. Jan wrote a really funny one. I think it was jan. So yours and hers are my favorites of the ones I have seen entered for this contest.

Jan Allison

July 18, 2023 at 9:05 AM

aww thanks Andrea glad you liked it xx

John Lawless

June 6, 2023 at 1:59 PM

yea,,, the muse had a time with this theme. thanks for stopping to read and comment Andrea

Sam Kauffman

June 6, 2023 at 12:01 PM

A unique moment in time captured in your words - like a bag full of spiders spinning webs! Blessings John for more quiet sunsets with squirrels and the breeze!

John Lawless

June 6, 2023 at 1:58 PM

I wasn't sure where the cadre of arachnids was leading me. Thanks for stopping to gaze on the web