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A Bag of Spiders

A BAG of SPIDERS I sit alone on the bench Conversing with each passing breeze A lone squirrel stops to listen Its attentive tail mesmerized There is a web of sunshine about my head As if it were a bag full of spiders Rustling in the darkness Of a web-less mind Drifting away in sunset’s shadows ©6/6/2023

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Bill Baker

Date: 7/26/2023 7:59:00 PM

Excellent imagery in this well-written poem, John. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, my friend. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/19/2023 11:48:00 PM

"Conversing with each passing breeze" - Wow only a true poet can do it. Congratulations!

Jan Allison

Date: 7/18/2023 9:05:00 AM

what a wonderful take on the theme John, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Terry Miller

Date: 7/17/2023 2:56:00 AM

Wonderful poetry, congratulations, I keep reading this one.

Matt Caliri

Date: 7/16/2023 9:27:00 PM

This was probably of one of my favorite spider poems, since there's no actual spider but one inside the mind. I should have this ranked way higher, this is a very strong 10 out of 35. Great work and thanks for submitting!

Paul Willason

Date: 6/6/2023 10:38:00 PM

You have weaved a magic poem John. The images are arresting, alive and original. Have read the poem many times and continues to excite. This IS poetry !

John Lawless
Date: 6/7/2023 6:16:00 AM

ah, the ultimate goal of every poet.....to entice the reader to dive in again......and again.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2023 1:04:00 PM

Love this line: Its attentive tail mesmerized

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2023 1:03:00 PM

wow, fantastic work that has to get a fave from me. I love how you used a metaphor. I have no clue what to do with that web of spiders and have never won in any of his contests, so I will probably just enjoy the poems I am reading. Jan wrote a really funny one. I think it was jan. So yours and hers are my favorites of the ones I have seen entered for this contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/18/2023 9:05:00 AM

aww thanks Andrea glad you liked it xx

John Lawless
Date: 6/6/2023 1:59:00 PM

yea,,, the muse had a time with this theme. thanks for stopping to read and comment Andrea

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/6/2023 12:01:00 PM

A unique moment in time captured in your words - like a bag full of spiders spinning webs! Blessings John for more quiet sunsets with squirrels and the breeze!

John Lawless
Date: 6/6/2023 1:58:00 PM

I wasn't sure where the cadre of arachnids was leading me. Thanks for stopping to gaze on the web

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/6/2023 5:20:00 AM

Quite the metaphor!

John Lawless
Date: 6/6/2023 1:56:00 PM

Thanks Kim, this theme just tickled the muse