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The Wall

I never saw your writing against the silent wall I never heard those footsteps walking to the door Like a sunset shadow you faded in my dusk Left upon my doorknob just a venetian mask A mask with many faces and unforgotten past A thousand million secrets and questions never asked No please,don't go reminding me of a time before Of those wistful moments that now I don't recall The stonehenged shrine of my heart is over six feet tall Cracks do let the light in but the wall resists to fall No please,don't go reminding me of a time before Of those wistful moments that now I don't recall Was there ever a vision with the beauty of your eyes Was there ever a fire with the passion of our nights Was there ever a sweet warmth where velvets bled a rose Was there ever a seashore where my fingers brushed your toes Was there ever a tree trunk where stars have carved our dream Was there ever a stream walk where our starved lips weren't sealed No please,don't go reminding me of a time before Of those wistful moments that now I don't recall The stonehenged shrine of my heart is over six feet tall I never saw your writing against the silent wall
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 10/31/2016 11:14:00 AM
I'm with Carrie, Chairmaine. This should be set to music. Great write and the repetition of the "No please don't go....." echoes in the loneliness. A 7
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Date: 10/29/2016 1:18:00 PM
As beautiful and sad as unrequited love could possibly be. This should be set to some soulful music ! A wonderful poem, Charmaine!
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Date: 10/29/2016 10:53:00 AM
Love the gentle flow with which you express your emotions! Congrats Charmaine!
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Date: 10/29/2016 8:56:00 AM
Congrats well-done great write
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Date: 3/17/2015 8:23:00 AM
Just now found this gem. Adding this one to my fav list. I rarely ever do that with any other than rhyme/sonnets/ballads but this is fantastic writing!! A7 and this poem is outstanding!!
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Date: 3/7/2015 2:48:00 PM
Amazing poem! I totally enjoyed this work of art!
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Date: 1/28/2015 7:40:00 AM
truly beautifully painted piece charmaine excellent pen dear pal
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Date: 1/28/2015 4:26:00 AM
"against the silent wall", powerful, beautiful and deep...a great write Charmaine
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Date: 1/27/2015 8:11:00 PM
concrete cold and captivating
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Date: 1/24/2015 2:41:00 AM
gorgeous pen Charmaine love it hugs 7 + fav
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Date: 1/23/2015 4:53:00 PM
wow,Charma. This is outstanding work. Gotta FAVE it.
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Date: 1/23/2015 9:48:00 AM
Hi Charmaine, look up my poem "A Dozen Roses Multiplied". Based on your comment on Paul's poem I suspect you will appreciate it. In fact you may consider sharing it with your husband.
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Date: 1/22/2015 9:16:00 AM
I really liked the comment you posted on Eileen's poem. You are a beautiful person. I think five compliments a day is a great approach to life.
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Date: 1/22/2015 9:03:00 AM
Perhaps you would consider switching "A million thousand secrets" to "A thousand million secrets"
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Date: 1/21/2015 11:00:00 AM
Enjoyed reading this piece CC. Well done, again...TAH
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Date: 1/21/2015 12:24:00 AM
I feel so inspired now ! I have not written anything for so long...my dear poetess , you have done wonders here! 100/100
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Date: 1/22/2015 9:18:00 AM
I miss your writing, I know you have lots of poetry yet to be expressed!
Date: 1/20/2015 3:12:00 PM
A beautiful poem, that flows like the nile river. It unfolds gracefully and I thoroughly enjoyed being immersed within it.
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Date: 1/20/2015 6:35:00 AM
Another excellent lyric Char, is a new song using these lyrics next!
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Date: 1/20/2015 1:02:00 AM
Wow loved the poem Charmaine... 'where my fingers brushed youf toes'... you have captured minute details #7... hugs, nad!
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Date: 1/19/2015 7:52:00 PM
You are so talented, what a lovely piece. It deserves higher than a 7!
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Date: 1/19/2015 6:31:00 PM
As I read, I stepped down...slowly on each stanza, to finnally find myself..."against the silent wall". *smiles* I missed you my dear friend ! Noah is getting to show those young preeeeeeeeteeeeen looks, and how handsom he is ! Hows yer lil' darl'n ? Blessing to you and yours
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Date: 1/19/2015 3:06:00 PM
"I never saw your writing against the silent wall"....Super ending of the heartfelt piece of poetry. Best wishes to you.
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Date: 1/19/2015 9:42:00 AM
stirring my emotions as you languidly express deep memories of love's passing, charms...the repetition of lines highlight the poignant tints of your images.. radiant!.. huggs
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Date: 1/18/2015 5:20:00 PM
It is so wonderful how you create a complete world in each of your poems. A world where there are two dimensions, the one you are describing, and the many things it is compared to. You know, the silent wall means so much more than the wall, etc.
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Date: 1/18/2015 3:23:00 PM
I loved this poem, Charmaine!
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