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December.14.2023
Nursery Rhyme Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Eve Roper
~ Placed First~

 

Night was covered in pitch darkness. Looked fearful without a ray of brightness. Through wilderness, moved beasts monstrous. Nature looked so terrifying and cheerless. After a night’s sleep the sun woke up. As a mighty king he climbed up. The East, like a neon bulb got lighted up. Bright rays from the golden globe came up. Soon darkness from the earth moved out. Men from their homes merrily came out. Birds from their nests, into the sky, flew out. Sweet songs from their beaks flowed out. Clear and cool was the morning air. Men set out for work with plans clear. Buzzing with life, the day was back to cheer. Earth turned once again a lovely sphere!

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Date: 12/26/2023 6:31:00 AM
I knew Rhiw one would do well..Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 12/25/2023 6:19:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your top win, Valsa. Happy Holidays
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Date: 12/24/2023 10:18:00 PM
Valsa, congratulations on your win. Have a Merry Christmas.
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Date: 12/23/2023 12:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely write/pretty picture with a great ending. Have A Very Blessed Christmas..................
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Date: 12/23/2023 6:29:00 AM
Congratulations Dear Valsa, on your top win with this amazing nursery rhyme. The second and third stanzas are a great language lessons for children, and entertain their imagination too! Merry Christmas to you and your great family!
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Date: 12/16/2023 10:14:00 PM
Children will really like the repeating ending in the second and third verses, Valsa. A happy ending makes it a good nursery rhyme. Good luck in the contest, my dear friend. Hugs, Bill
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Date: 12/14/2023 3:24:00 PM
Your imagery is outstanding, dear Valsa. How eloquently you described the cycle of night to day, from darkness to light! Your rhyme scheme was well done and I applaud you for creating rhymes that work succinctly with your imagery. I must fave this one! Have a splendid evening! hugs, Sara
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Date: 12/14/2023 3:24:00 PM
Your imagery is outstanding, dear Valsa. How eloquently you described the cycle of night to day, from darkness to light! Your rhyme scheme was well done and I applaud you for creating rhymes that work succinctly with your imagery. I must fave this one! Have a splendid evening! hugs, Sara
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Date: 12/14/2023 11:07:00 AM
The beautiful imagery brings the story to life, and I'm especially taken with the lyrical finale. Your grasp of the language is amazing, and this contest submission is absolutely delightful. Your depiction of the shift from dark to dawn is flawless. We're all waiting for the golden light to appear in the eastern sky, signifying the start of a new day. Best of luck and wishes for the contest
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Date: 12/14/2023 10:10:00 AM
Beautiful glorious day in the presence of soaking up God's presence around us : )
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Date: 12/14/2023 9:24:00 AM
Nice description of a day, from dawn, dusk, to night. Well penned.
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Date: 12/14/2023 8:47:00 AM
You described the process from dusk to dawn very well here.. the imagery brings it into life and I particularly love how you finished it off.. A great way with words and lovely entry for the contest. Good luck dear.
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Date: 12/14/2023 6:30:00 AM
This is absolutely gorgeous dear valsa, i love your rhymes and flow of your imagery and theres a beautiful rhythm too in your lines, as i read these lines i heard a melody, and i couldnt help but feel a sense of calmness, emanating through your poem. I especially loved “ Birds from their nests, into the sky, flew out. Sweet songs from their beaks flowed out. “ so picturesque and vivid how you describe, golden bright rays flow throughout. Pleasure reading this. Best wishes for the contest
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Date: 12/14/2023 6:31:00 AM
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Date: 12/14/2023 5:32:00 AM
We all look forward to that spark of gold that rises in the east to welcome the start of day Good luck Valsa. Tom
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Date: 12/14/2023 4:45:00 AM
Creative lines penned. I notice you used several techniques with the rhymes which made it stand out. Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for visiting my page. Sara K
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