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An Innocent Childhood Memory

Playing on grandpa’s farm, just I and my sisters, and I’m around five. What alarm! Too late we see we've somehow stirred up a bee hive. We flee! We run to stay alive. Fun? Playing on Grandpa’s farm, we’ve somehow stirred up a bee hive. Fun? Aug. 26, 2020 for Mohan Chutani's Contest:Let's Minichu On An Innocent Childhood Memory Here is the pattern for Mohan's Experimental new form: Total12 lines (4 stanzas of 3 lines each) Rhyme scheme: Aba, cBc, dbD, ABD. 4th stanza consists of repeat of 1st line of stanza1, 2nd line of stanza 2, and 3rd line of stanza 3. Syllable count : Stanza 1: 6,12,3, Stanza 2: 4,8,2, Stanza 3: 2,4,1, Stanza 4: 6,8,1

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Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/4/2020 2:50:00 PM

I could just see you as a young'un running from those bees...congrats Andrea.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/4/2020 10:27:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Beata Agustin

Date: 9/1/2020 2:08:00 AM

Congrats! Playing in granddad's territory is definitely fun! God bless you.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/31/2020 10:08:00 AM

Congratulate you on your win. Oh No, Bees. Love your poem. A wonderful write. Enjoy your win..............

John Watt

Date: 8/31/2020 9:56:00 AM

You sure know how to write the winners, Andrea. Congrats on top spot!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/31/2020 9:37:00 AM

Great writing! Congratulations, Andrea!

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 8/31/2020 9:35:00 AM

Beehives and children! We had a swarm in our school once! Congrats on your top win!!

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/31/2020 8:51:00 AM

Innocent memories at Grandpa's farm. Congrats Andrea for top win. Mohan

Michael Tor

Date: 8/29/2020 8:33:00 PM

Those were the days our lives were filled with innocents...

Robert Warlov

Date: 8/29/2020 5:28:00 PM

Highly gnarly. Impressive.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/28/2020 11:51:00 PM

An innocent painful childhood memory. Ouch! I think we have all experienced this. The buzzing of a bee or wasp always alarms me now. Nicely done.

John Watt

Date: 8/26/2020 7:57:00 PM

Doesn't sound very fun to me! Hope nobody got stung. Best wishes to you, Andrea

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/27/2020 9:59:00 AM

this form I found very difficult to do, John. Did you try it? Anyway, I think I got stung once or twice and Mom put baking soda paste on our stings. My youngest sister could not run fast and she was stung in many places. I know she was terrified of bees after that!!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/26/2020 7:50:00 PM

very vivid imagery Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 8/26/2020 5:49:00 PM

Readers definitely catch the drama. Hope it didn't spur a lifelong fear of bees! This form was excruciating for me, yours is a fine example, makes it look easy.