Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

An Innocent Childhood Memory

Playing on grandpa’s farm,
just I and my sisters, and I’m around five.
What alarm!

Too late we see
we've somehow stirred up a bee hive.
We flee!

We run
to stay alive.
Fun?

Playing on Grandpa’s farm,
we’ve somehow stirred up a bee hive.
Fun?


Aug. 26, 2020
for Mohan Chutani's Contest:Let's Minichu On An Innocent Childhood Memory 
Here is the pattern for Mohan's Experimental new form:
Total12 lines (4 stanzas of 3 lines each) Rhyme scheme: Aba, cBc, dbD, ABD. 4th stanza consists of repeat of 1st line of stanza1, 2nd line of stanza 2, and 3rd line of stanza 3. Syllable count : Stanza 1: 6,12,3, Stanza 2: 4,8,2, Stanza 3: 2,4,1, Stanza 4: 6,8,1

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Jeanne Mcgee September 4, 2020 at 2:50 PM I could just see you as a young'un running from those bees...congrats Andrea.

Jan Allison September 4, 2020 at 10:27 AM dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Beata Agustin September 1, 2020 at 2:08 AM Congrats! Playing in granddad's territory is definitely fun! God bless you.

Paula Goldsmith August 31, 2020 at 10:08 AM Congratulate you on your win. Oh No, Bees. Love your poem. A wonderful write. Enjoy your win..............

John Watt August 31, 2020 at 9:56 AM You sure know how to write the winners, Andrea. Congrats on top spot!

Kim Rodrigues August 31, 2020 at 9:37 AM Great writing! Congratulations, Andrea!

Krish Radhakrishna August 31, 2020 at 9:35 AM Beehives and children! We had a swarm in our school once! Congrats on your top win!!

Mohan Chutani August 31, 2020 at 8:51 AM Innocent memories at Grandpa's farm. Congrats Andrea for top win. Mohan

Michael Tor August 29, 2020 at 8:33 PM Those were the days our lives were filled with innocents...

Robert Warlov August 29, 2020 at 5:28 PM Highly gnarly. Impressive.

Caren Krutsinger August 28, 2020 at 11:51 PM An innocent painful childhood memory. Ouch! I think we have all experienced this. The buzzing of a bee or wasp always alarms me now. Nicely done.

John Watt August 26, 2020 at 7:57 PM Doesn't sound very fun to me! Hope nobody got stung. Best wishes to you, Andrea Andrea Dietrich August 27, 2020 at 9:59 AM this form I found very difficult to do, John. Did you try it? Anyway, I think I got stung once or twice and Mom put baking soda paste on our stings. My youngest sister could not run fast and she was stung in many places. I know she was terrified of bees after that!!

Jan Allison August 26, 2020 at 7:50 PM very vivid imagery Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Sigrid Ermine August 26, 2020 at 5:49 PM Readers definitely catch the drama. Hope it didn't spur a lifelong fear of bees! This form was excruciating for me, yours is a fine example, makes it look easy.