An Innocent Childhood Memory

Playing on grandpa’s farm,
just I and my sisters, and I’m around five.
What alarm!

Too late we see
we've somehow stirred up a bee hive.
We flee!

We run
to stay alive.
Fun?

Playing on Grandpa’s farm,
we’ve somehow stirred up a bee hive.
Fun?


Aug. 26, 2020
for Mohan Chutani's Contest:Let's Minichu On An Innocent Childhood Memory 
Here is the pattern for Mohan's Experimental new form:
Total12 lines (4 stanzas of 3 lines each) Rhyme scheme: Aba, cBc, dbD, ABD. 4th stanza consists of repeat of 1st line of stanza1, 2nd line of stanza 2, and 3rd line of stanza 3. Syllable count : Stanza 1: 6,12,3, Stanza 2: 4,8,2, Stanza 3: 2,4,1, Stanza 4: 6,8,1

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Date: 9/4/2020 2:50:00 PM
I could just see you as a young'un running from those bees...congrats Andrea.
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Date: 9/4/2020 10:27:00 AM
dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/1/2020 2:08:00 AM
Congrats! Playing in granddad's territory is definitely fun! God bless you.
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Date: 8/31/2020 10:08:00 AM
Congratulate you on your win. Oh No, Bees. Love your poem. A wonderful write. Enjoy your win..............
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Date: 8/31/2020 9:56:00 AM
You sure know how to write the winners, Andrea. Congrats on top spot!
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Date: 8/31/2020 9:37:00 AM
Great writing! Congratulations, Andrea!
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Date: 8/31/2020 9:35:00 AM
Beehives and children! We had a swarm in our school once! Congrats on your top win!!
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Date: 8/31/2020 8:51:00 AM
Innocent memories at Grandpa's farm. Congrats Andrea for top win. Mohan
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Date: 8/29/2020 8:33:00 PM
Those were the days our lives were filled with innocents...
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Date: 8/29/2020 5:28:00 PM
Highly gnarly. Impressive.
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Date: 8/28/2020 11:51:00 PM
An innocent painful childhood memory. Ouch! I think we have all experienced this. The buzzing of a bee or wasp always alarms me now. Nicely done.
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Date: 8/26/2020 7:57:00 PM
Doesn't sound very fun to me! Hope nobody got stung. Best wishes to you, Andrea
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/27/2020 9:59:00 AM
this form I found very difficult to do, John. Did you try it? Anyway, I think I got stung once or twice and Mom put baking soda paste on our stings. My youngest sister could not run fast and she was stung in many places. I know she was terrified of bees after that!!
Date: 8/26/2020 7:50:00 PM
very vivid imagery Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/26/2020 5:49:00 PM
Readers definitely catch the drama. Hope it didn't spur a lifelong fear of bees! This form was excruciating for me, yours is a fine example, makes it look easy.
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