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~ a Velvet Rose ~

She writes with such fragrance.... Her words, like flowers Flowing from her pen Eyes like the ocean Serenity, that never ends The softness of her touch Her heart melting from within Such gentleness of colors Like the still warming wind.... On journies she takes us Her vision our eyes The breath of her breathing Brings life deep inside A passage, her picture These sands of her shores I whisper her majestic I long for her more.... Smiling as I see her The breeze dancing through her hair Such glory, her figure Radiant I stare At her light, this lady Her wrappings of care.... Gentle is her essence With her pureness profound Her grace as she walks As she passes I bow To her wonders, her treasures Her life, I bow.... For never have my eyes Beheld such as she Never in this life Have I found such a dream Her eloquence, her meakness Her enchanting soul Painting this canvas, her portrait This splendor, for all to behold.... To love with such passion The worlds hand, that she holds Her fragrance, like flowers...."Her Beauty!" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~ A Velvet Rose ~

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Charlene Bird

Date: 6/26/2009 8:02:00 AM

So enchanting and magnificently beautiful Dearest John, The heartpounding flutters that a woman's love can bring. Lovely! Love, Charlene

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 6/24/2009 6:28:00 AM

beautiful the love you had for this lady,just beautiful------charma

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 1/15/2009 1:06:00 PM

Sounds like a very special woman. God Bless. Vince

Elaine George

Date: 1/14/2009 12:07:00 AM

Hi John, I am so happy to see this magnificant poem again. You know how much love it. We had a wonderful vacation in North Carolina and returned home yesterday to freezing tempatures and lots of snow. Love to you and yours, Lainie

Michael Torres

Date: 1/9/2009 9:59:00 AM

John this is so beautiful and loving. What a loving soul you have. This would make any women melt. You are so talented to write just about anything and do it so well. Well isnt good enough. You are one of my favorites and this one is also one of my favorites I will mark it down as such Poem and Poet. God bless you my brother. Michael Torres

Laurie Ginn

Date: 1/5/2009 6:29:00 PM

John you are right! My poetry may never be as talented as many on this site but the pleasure it gives me is too much to ignore. Thank you for your kind comment. A Velvet Rose, what a beautiful, beautiful write. I love the title as well. Laurie

Julie Cottingham

Date: 1/5/2009 2:25:00 PM

Pure and raw emotions, this poem is breath taking, I adore the flow, the way the words harmonize together, John this is a beautiful creation, she sounds a stunning inspiration, God Bless your creativity and insight, love you always, Julie x

Cortney Bartholomew

Date: 1/5/2009 1:13:00 PM

i love this poem john, it is so beautiful. i think this is one of the most sweetest poems ive ever read!! it made me want to cry. you have a beautiful heart. im getting a little more time out of my wacky schedule to come to the library to get on the computer soon i will put more on poetrysoup, ive written 10 more poems so far talk to u soon loveyou!!! cortney

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 1/5/2009 12:50:00 PM

Absolutely beautiful, John! Feels mellow, sincere, serene..a heart warming piece that will light up the hearts of those who read it. 'Her fragrance',"Her eloquence", surely subtle and as heady as "The Velvet Rose". Wonderfully written, John! Here, you show great fervor and tenderness for this person to whom you have written this dedication. Wishing you and yours the best John!! God bless.....Love to you, Mikki

Diane Christian

Date: 1/5/2009 11:33:00 AM

iya john, hope all is well, we are just great here in Uk i have not wrote anything for a while but i will get bak writing soon, I have had a break for a coupl of weeks tochill out while the kids are of school. anyway hope you having a good new year, its below freezing here so we all have red noses like rudolph hehehhe anyway god bless you much love we thinking of you from diane

Denis Joe

Date: 1/5/2009 8:57:00 AM

This is a great piece of writing. the use of simile is stretched fully in order to maintain an image. The image is classical in its portrayal of womanhood yet there is a contemporary feel to it. The line 'Painting this canvas, her portrait ' is great as it jolts the reader out of a dreamy state and is a clever device. May I suggest that you use a diffeent word than 'fragrance' in the last line, because it seems to contradict the use of the word in the opening line?

Derrick Burton

Date: 1/4/2009 4:14:00 PM

your wife or a woman poet? Holy Mary, loved this poetry, and you get better and better. enjoyed reading it. Dont laugh at my poem, BABYS.... have a good day.

Sara Lokken

Date: 1/4/2009 12:09:00 PM

This is so beautiful.:) Deeply beautiful....John, if you wanted me to see this, because it was about me, that is the sweetest thing anyone has done for me in awhile.:) I am actually at a loss for words, that someone would think so much of me--but I am honored and truly touched. I probably do not deserve such a high place in your thoughts, but you've made me want to reach higher.:) Love, Sara

Robin L. Gass

Date: 1/4/2009 10:41:00 AM

John, this is beautiful rose itself. Such a joy to read and a lovely dedication to someone very dear to you. Sorry I have gotten behind. I am visiting my sister and brother-in-law and traveled 7 hours yesterday to get here. Thank you for your always thoughtful comments. I hope you are well. I cannot leave you with a bible verse this time because I don't know where my sisters is and she is sleeping. I will give you 2 later when I read The White Knight! GBY Love, Robin

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 1/4/2009 10:19:00 AM

P.S-check out my bayou poem's explanation, yours did come very close. :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/4/2009 8:38:00 AM

At this moment, this glorious poem lands in my favorites, John....by far, the most beautiful thing you have ever written, and one of the most beautiful poems on my quest through all of poetry soup poems since I've been here. Said from the heart...whoever is the subject, I do believe, is heavenly sent. Wow!! No other words to describe ~ Love, Carrie

Michael Jordan

Date: 1/4/2009 5:58:00 AM

John - Wow this is just pure beauty - How are you doing my friend - Just a truly amazing poem John - the reader just flows through the poem like he is riding on the notes of a song - A truly excellent poem my friend - God Bless you John,YF4L- MJ

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 1/4/2009 4:04:00 AM

What a breathtakingly beautiful tale of someone who sounds like quite a lady! A very beautiful write, john, love, Kristin

Raul Moreno

Date: 1/3/2009 9:53:00 PM

Whoa, what a great poem you have penned here John. The imagery is stunning and the flow is nice. Thanks for your comment...Raul