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UNLOVED

The stinging is particularly painful today, Needles of sharp cold burning blood stab and sear my heart The jabbing jagged thousand tiny holes stay And begin again tomorrow to flay each part. Rejection is a drowning drunk Gasping with each mouthful of pride Another trophy now lies lifeless and sunk Another screaming day that died. For all the steaming dreaming part I played in the capture of my choice Flat failure is the guide of my loveless dart Choking silence is my only voice.

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Mark Massey

Date: 12/5/2023 5:13:00 PM

Nailed it! Dialing into Plath with a piece like this makes me question your sanity….just kidding. Plath was a nut and this was a challenging contest. Tom made the best choice to top this challenge - Congrats on your trophy win, Janine. Tom is a serious writer - extremely knowledgeable about poetry but always wants it to be fun. Congrats again!!!

Janine Lever
Date: 1/12/2024 3:09:00 PM

Thank you mark for your congrats and i am glad you liked my poem. I shall take Tom up on expanding when the 'mood' comes over me again, ha ha. I like to write on many things but most of the time i just turn on and tune in and magic happens. Thankyou to you and to Tom. xxjanine

Tom Woody
Date: 12/5/2023 5:24:00 PM

Thx Mark. This was the only poem where I actually heard "Plath's voice." Alot of allusions to and references to her, but not necessarily the voice. I really would like to see Janine expand on this one some more. See where it might lead.

Christina Bowring

Date: 12/5/2023 3:26:00 PM

Back to say many congratulations my friend with first Place! Well done! Knew this was great when I first read it. So pleased for you. Love and hugs xx :):)

Janine Lever
Date: 1/12/2024 3:12:00 PM

Thank you christina. I will admit to you I have never read a Plath Poem and only heard Poe's The Raven on a radio programme once. I just googled her and him and read about them and put myself in the 'mood'. I am so glad it turned out alright. love and peace my friend xxxx

Terry Miller

Date: 12/5/2023 7:09:00 AM

Stunning work; congratulations

Janine Lever
Date: 12/5/2023 3:10:00 PM

Thank you Terry for your comments and the encouragement contained within them. love and peace xx janine

Karen Jones

Date: 12/4/2023 10:21:00 PM

Wow. Great job Janine! Congratulations on first place in the contest.

Janine Lever
Date: 12/5/2023 3:09:00 PM

Thank you karen for your comments and encouragement. i appreciate it very much. love and peace xxjanine

Paige Hind

Date: 12/4/2023 1:56:00 PM

Intense poetry, very heavy stuff... congrats on your win!

Janine Lever
Date: 12/4/2023 2:48:00 PM

Hello Paige, Thank you for your comments and your congratulations. I am delighted to have won and so happy with all the encouragement i have been given. love and peace xx janine

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 12/4/2023 11:26:00 AM

You wrote in the style of Poe and Plath well Janine, congratulations on your top spot win in Tom’s contest… Belle

Janine Lever
Date: 12/4/2023 2:47:00 PM

Hello Beryl, i thank you so much for your comments and your congrats. I am delighted to have won and i am so very appreciative of your and other poets encouragement. love and peace xxjanine

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 12/4/2023 9:44:00 AM

So amazing... wonderfully done. Congrats on the top win. God bless you, Love, Gina

Janine Lever
Date: 12/4/2023 2:46:00 PM

Hello Regina and thank you for your comments and your encouragement and your blessings, i am delighted to have won and i am blessed for having the wonderful congrats from everyone and yourself. love and peace xx janine

I Am Anaya

Date: 12/4/2023 9:13:00 AM

In the cadence of The Raven is displayed magnificently! Plath in the style of Poe. Congratulations Janine on the trophy win! I Am Anaya

Janine Lever
Date: 12/4/2023 2:45:00 PM

Hello Anaya and thank you so much for your comments of encouragement. I am delighted to have won this competition. xxlove and peace janine

Tom Woody

Date: 12/4/2023 8:25:00 AM

hey, congrats on your first place win in this very difficult contest. you nailed the self-loathing and fixation on death that Plath exuded, as well as some of her nonsensical word choices, but with just the right touch of the macabre.

Janine Lever
Date: 12/4/2023 2:43:00 PM

Hello Tom, and thank you for your encouragement and comments. I am delighted to have won a first place. I put myself in the mind and heart of plath and poe and invited the emotions. I am so very appreciative. love and peace xxjanine

Tom Woody
Date: 12/4/2023 9:20:00 AM

Btw, my fave line is "Rejection is a drowning drunk, gasping with each mouthful of pride."

Christina Bowring

Date: 11/30/2023 11:17:00 AM

Good evening dear Janine. I read this several times. It is so well written and well crafted. So deep, profound, expressive. Great rhyming and poetic lines,’ And begin again tomorrow to flay each part’ ‘ ‘ choking silence is my only voice’. You did a great job constructing this so well done! Really impressed. Thank you for sharing. Keep warm - hope you didn’t get too much snow! Hugs and smiles my friend xx:):)

Janine Lever
Date: 12/1/2023 5:17:00 AM

Hello Christina, thank you for your encouraging comments of Unloved. I entered the Poe with the style of Plath competition, which was hard as i have discalculus and trying to construct is extremely difficult for me, most times never acheiving it fully, but in this case i thought of Poe and Plath and sat in silence and then it came. i sometimes have the feeling i have 'lived' the emotion of a poem i write, as with this one when each time i stopped i thought of each poet and their work and 'felt' the angst and then carried on. I am trying to keep warm, ha ha, lots of jumpers, leggings under trousers, fluffy inner socks and gloves and neck warmer snood under my hood. Feel like a bigfoot when i go out. Its only 3 degrees here and falling to -3 tonight. ice everywhere. You keep well too and warm and thank you again, if i dont get chance, merry christmas christina, your name has love in it. xx love and peace xx janine

Karen Jones

Date: 11/19/2023 1:54:00 PM

This is so sad. :0( Enjoyed the rhyme.

Karen Jones
Date: 12/4/2023 10:25:00 PM

Ooooh I didn't know it was for a contest. Giggles. Congratulations again.

Janine Lever
Date: 11/20/2023 8:36:00 AM

Hello my friend, thank you for the comments. Yes it is sad, it is for a poetry competition on here, 'Poe in the style of Plath' So i brought the dark of both poets into the emotion and alliteration of plath style. I dont like constructing poetry but i thought i would have a go, after the first line, it just came flooding in. nice to hear from youxx