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The witch'in
in a winter
storm,
between
us,
we arn't happy
as the car dies,
due
to the winter
that seeps us.
Domestic abuse,
of waving
sickness
of verbal obtuse
and flagging,
the car's
now empty.
I carry
no flags,
and I'm
no handyman.
I saddle up
and cuddle you,
human warmth
so we can't
be frost
in the morning.

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Tom Woody

Date: 8/16/2025 5:47:00 AM

A good cuddle is a remedy for many of life's annoyances. like Sara below, me and mine avoid strife. 32 years this coming December

Ryan Geoffrey Hayward
Date: 8/16/2025 5:52:00 AM

Thanks Tom. This was based on a film about a young man giving a young woman a ride home for the winter holidays and they both get stuck in a freezing storm. She finds out that he's secretly in love with her and rejects him but eventually they both kinda have to huddle up for warmth. Anyway, the end of the film has that he actually died in a car accident and she was the lone survivor, like a twilight zone film. She ends up in tears of the fact he saved her life when they both in the spiritual plane.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 8/15/2025 5:08:00 PM

liked the flow as well as the happy ending. I don't like fighting with my hubby....those times when verbal attacks fly.