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I said, "let's do this" John said "Okay , if you'd like to follow me" And took me downstairs to what seemed like a medical facility There were about five others in the room waiting for me to arrive I couldn't help but wonder if I'd get out of this experience alive. They started up a strange looking machine then helped me onto a bed Seconds later I was on the street where I'd been knocked on the head A crowd had now gathered around and helped me back up on my feet I heard someone say "It's that nice doctor who lives down the street. I thanked everyone and said "That I was now feeling okay" Two policemen had arrested the thief who'd tried to get away For some strange obscure reason, my mind was in split in two I was aware of my other life and what I'd come here to do. I knew where I lived and was curious to again meet my wife Also, my two lovely daughters in this strange Victorian life I arrived home and my daughters were pleased to see me And said they couldn’t wait for bed so I could tell them a story. My wife gave me a hug and carried on reading the newspaper And said " I see that man Salah is here, he's a troublemaker They say he's here to spread some nasty lies and hate" I knew I had to put some plans in place that would seal his fate. My daughters got ready for bed, and I kissed them goodnight Told them a bedtime story and then I tucked them in tight I too was tired and told my wife that I was going up to bed All I could think about was the thousands of innocents dead. The next day I was due for work at the hospital as it was a Friday Checked the admissions list for last night and the previous day Damn, I thought Salah's name wasn't on it, I just had to bide my time But what I was going to do was pale in comparison to his crime. I was just about to finish work when I heard some people arguing A man was being brought in on a stretcher and he was shouting He was of Middle Eastern appearance and had a long black beard He was quite small and yet this was the evil man that was feared. He was taken to a side room and his two bodyguards stood outside And I had to think of a valid excuse that would get me inside A doctor came to me and said the man just brought in has a break This was my chance to get near and one I knew that I had to take. I said "I'll stay on and treat him and see what treatment he needs" Little did he know that soon he'd pay for his futuristic evil deeds I went to the chemist and got painkillers, needles, and arsenic poison If anyone saw me the reason I’d give them it was to prevent infection. I arrived at his door and one of his mean looking bodyguards let me inside A nurse was with him, I told her I need to examine him and to wait outside I filled up the syringe with arsenic and injected him with a large lethal dose I’d just finished when the door opened, and I thought damn, that was close. I told the nurse I'd given him strong painkillers that would help ease his pain It seemed a very heinous thing to carry out but all of humanity would gain I left the scene quickly and walked home I was tired and so went to bed The next morning the police knocked on my door to tell me he was dead. They took me to down to the police station and said that I'd been seen With a bottle of arsenic poison by a nurse who was sat behind a screen I couldn't really explain to them why I’d done it they'd think I was mad But if they knew I'd saved thousands of lives then I’m sure they’d be glad. They told me I'd be charged with murder and would die at the end of a rope I had no regrets as to what I had done but I knew I’d given humanity hope It was now getting quite late, so I settled down on the bunk for the night Then I heard voices and then a bright light and someone say, "He’s alright". I was now back in the medical facility and John walked over to me I said “The deed It's now done; I think I've rewritten a page in history" I asked him how long I'd been gone for, and he said " Nearly a year The machine malfunctioned but we managed to get you back here”. Written 29th October 2024 THIS IS IN TWO PARTS. ( The link for part one is at the top of the page.)

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Date: 11/13/2024 10:52:00 AM
I enjoyed the trip through time, Tom!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/13/2024 12:41:00 PM
Thank you very much David, couldn't fit it all on the one page so had to do it in two parts, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 11/7/2024 2:00:00 PM
Time flys they say when you are having fun.' But it seemed like sound barrier level in this Tense one.'
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Date: 11/7/2024 2:49:00 PM
Thank you very much Joe, a bit of Terminator, Star Trek and my wild imagination went into this one. Glad you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 10/31/2024 11:58:00 PM
Tom love this till the end. The ending was great, I truly was happy in the end. Love the way your creative mind works. You had me wanting more as you took me through your highs and lows. You should write a book Tom and just do what you do best and that is create and lead and finish in your dramatic style. Great effort here Tom and thank you for sharing my friend...
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Date: 11/1/2024 12:36:00 AM
Thank you very much Michael, The original 1856 I wrote a few months ago had potential for another story so came up with this one. I'm happy that you enjoyed it, of course it might lead to another but I'll let the dust settle on this one first. Tom
Date: 10/31/2024 1:07:00 PM
Tom, this is quite an adventure. It was riveting and enjoyable all at once. A remarkable talent you have. We could use technology like this, but things just have to work out the way they will. Nice to dream. Plot stories like this seem to focus us on the essence of history and what led to what.
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Date: 10/31/2024 2:26:00 PM
Thank you very much Duke, Something like that happened in Terminator, have you ever noticed how ideas from Sci Fi years after become reality. Imagine that, sending assassins back to take out the likes, of Hitler, Putin, Bin Ladin, Pol Pot, Amin etc etc and creating a world of peace. Tom
Date: 10/31/2024 8:53:00 AM
Glad you came back to the future or rather back to the present Tom. Great story telling. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 10/31/2024 9:20:00 AM
Thank you very much for Jennifer, yes, I'm back but for how long I don't know lol Tom
Date: 10/31/2024 4:32:00 AM
Dear Tom, i just finished reading both part one and part two, and although they are long , both parts were easy to read. Flows so well. And made me think you should perhaps publish a book. This story made me think of Dexter, have you seen it? If you havent you might enjoy, he was a serial killer, after those that were doing wrong too, he thought he was doin others a fave. And its one of my fave shows. So sad it ended, and i love reading and watching crime documentaries so this felt like a confession of a killer: twisted ways they do think they are doinh the right thing when killing. Also made me wonder did the killer do all that while in a coma? Not sure how i thought that. Brilliant storytelling. Pleasure reading your work: sending you light ~
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Date: 10/31/2024 6:04:00 AM
Thank you very much IE, I'm happy you enjoyed it. Yes, I saw that show years ago. He was one strange character for sure. Yes, his body stayed comotosed but somehow materialised in another era. I love Sci Fi and fantasy and have a bit of a wild imagination. To me human life is precious and even if they can find justification to take someone's life, it's still taking a life. Reminds me of the saying, two wrongs don't make a right. Hope your week is going well. Tom
Date: 10/31/2024 4:07:00 AM
Such great story telling Tom! I was very happy for the happy ending!
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Date: 10/31/2024 5:52:00 AM
Thank you again Mike, thought I'd leave the door open on this one, The CIA are bound to come round with a list of names. Tom
Date: 10/31/2024 3:13:00 AM
Phew you got out just in time! Gripping Tom, you sure do tell a good story. Rewriting history. Mission done and dusted ...Hugs
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Date: 10/31/2024 6:06:00 AM
Another one that needs terminating Maria, the list is growing.
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Maria Williams
Date: 10/31/2024 4:35:00 AM
Jack The Ripper ?
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/31/2024 3:19:00 AM
Thank you Maria, glad you enjoyed it, I wonder who’s next on the list lol. Tom
Date: 10/30/2024 2:40:00 PM
The time machine brought him back just in time, and his mission was accomplished A nice ending to a great story Tom
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Date: 10/30/2024 2:43:00 PM
Thank you very much Joseph, the longest one I've ever written. Who knows one day they might achieve it. Tom
Date: 10/30/2024 11:59:00 AM
Tom - it’s always a pleasure to read one of your poetic stories and this was no exception. I enjoyed both parts and could easily tell it was one long tale - it flowed very smoothly…
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Date: 10/30/2024 1:26:00 PM
Thank you very much Ilene, it was too big for one page, 31 stanzas so had to put it on two pages. I'm happy that you enjoyed the story. Tom
Date: 10/30/2024 10:10:00 AM
What a great story Tom with poetic license to take it anywhere you damn want, absolutely love the idea of going back in time and killing some evil bastard, a sci/fi spectacular, and if anyone is offended that’s their problem, I once wrote a poem on Hiroshima and stand by it to this day https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/onslaught_1485847, some things need doing in this life and that was one of them, A fave from me, cheers David
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/30/2024 11:33:00 AM
The concept of time travel always makes for great Cinema, TV, and poetry Tom, you did a terrific job here on both poems, I really hope it gets POTD tomorrow, cheers David
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Date: 10/30/2024 11:18:00 AM
Thank you very much David, I'm happy you enjoyed it, a bit of Star Trek, Terminator and my wild imagination went into this one, who knows one day it might be possible, wouldn't be surprised if research into it was going on, tnx for faving it, tried to put it on one page, it was having none of it agh well at least the title was short lol. Tom
Date: 10/30/2024 9:06:00 AM
ohhh. you're giving Stephen king a run for his money, tom...I'll find time to read your scenes again!
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Date: 10/30/2024 11:12:00 AM
Thank you very much Nette, glad you enjoyed it, hope you're keeping well.. Tom
Date: 10/30/2024 7:09:00 AM
Part II is just as fascinating and enthralling as Part I. No loose ends, great theme! Janice
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Date: 10/30/2024 8:01:00 AM
Thank you very much Janice tried to put it all on one page but message came up poem too big so made two out of it. Tom
Date: 10/29/2024 5:05:00 PM
Tom, Wow, a great second part with a great ending, you are the king of story tellers. I enjoyed your captivating tale.
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Date: 10/29/2024 9:43:00 PM
Thank you very much Tania. I left the door open for another further down the line. Tom
Date: 10/29/2024 4:29:00 PM
Ohhhhhhhhhhhh.... now I get the reference to JT. lol I see how it fits.
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2024 4:43:00 PM
hahaha
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/29/2024 4:34:00 PM
Lol,
Date: 10/29/2024 4:13:00 PM
Quite the tale Tom which i enjoyed reading! You are a wonderful story teller! Love you being in the photo looking the Part ha! Debx
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Date: 10/29/2024 4:14:00 PM
Thank you very much Deb, glad you enjoyed it, I like to travel, even time travel lol. Tom
Date: 10/29/2024 4:08:00 PM
What a gripping tale Tom and don't change a word, after all your story is fictional! hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/29/2024 4:12:00 PM
Thank you very much Jan, glad you enjoyed it. Tom PS, John Thomas lol.
Date: 10/29/2024 4:00:00 PM
Tom, your fictional story has a lot of merit and is written in your usual "tale well told" manner. As its author you have the right to use any name you choose in your story. You gave no indication that the man was of any nationality, so anyone who finds fault with anything in your write is not being an encouraging member of the site. Use the name, John Smith in your next story and see if that meets the requirements of one whose comments are misguided. Villains come in all sizes, shapes and names.
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/29/2024 4:19:00 PM
pray tell me, Jan.
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2024 4:14:00 PM
Lin, you don't need a history lesson to find out what a John Thomas is lol lol lol
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/29/2024 4:11:00 PM
It's not offensive to me either, Tom. What people are sensitive about is receiving comments that are not constructive. It's YOUR opinion as the poet that counts. Argumentative people are not seeking peace.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/29/2024 4:09:00 PM
Thank you very much Lin, If I thought someone would be offended I'd change it but it's not offensive in my eyes. The only people who might be offended are those who support twisted ideologies and evil. Terrorists are not just from the middle East they're from every nation on earth. Tom
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/29/2024 4:09:00 PM
I'm not up on British history, Jan. I'll google him.
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2024 4:08:00 PM
Better still Lin - use the name John Thomas lol - a very British joke! hugs jan xx
Date: 10/29/2024 3:19:00 PM
Well I read both parts Tom. As always a well written rhyme story with some sci-fi twists added in for good measure. If I were to critique (heaven forbid) I would suggest that in the current climate using a middle eastern man (presumably Arab) as your villain might greatly offend some, since the story demonizes him to a massive degree. Why not consider something more generic and possibly less offensive (to some with sensitivities). Just a thought
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/29/2024 9:42:00 PM
There's about 18 countries that come under the middle East umbrella, there's Turks, Egyptians, Iraqies, Iranians etc etc, It was a European that came up with that name for people from that part of the world. Enjoy your evening too.
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Tom Woody
Date: 10/29/2024 4:10:00 PM
You specifically state "middle eastern" and the name gives it away Tom. Personally, it doesn't offend me since I am politically neutral. I'm just saying some might find it offensive. Have a nice evening
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/29/2024 3:44:00 PM
If the A bombs hadn't been dropped on Japan, the war would have dragged on costing thousands of lives. That was just a name I made up I didn't make any reference to where he was from though.
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Tom Woody
Date: 10/29/2024 3:42:00 PM
Now if your antagonist were discovered to be an alien... that would be a really cool twist
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Tom Woody
Date: 10/29/2024 3:34:00 PM
Of course not, but evil is in the eye of the reader/observer/historian. For example, do you imagine Japanese children are being taught that the A bombs dropped on their grandparents were a necessary and justifiable means to end the war? Terrorism is despicable by anyone on any level, but again, due to the current ongoing drama using an Arab as the devil of your story just doesn't seem prudent.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/29/2024 3:24:00 PM
Thanks Tom, I’m not sure that people would be offended by someone who supports evil and terror. I could have used Bin Laden, not many would be offended if I had. Tom
Date: 10/29/2024 3:18:00 PM
Read this story/poem first time round and enjoyed reading it again in the revisit… Beryl
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 10/29/2024 3:21:00 PM
Thanks Beryl,I’m happy you enjoyed them. Tom

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