- the Chimney Sweeper -

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02.07.2023
Anne-Lise Andresen

      In days gone by, people said the pipe cleaner
      or the black wandering man
      with shackles and dirty brushes

      When he arrived at the house
      in Grand Street number seventeen
      A small boy opened the door
      He stood wide-eyed
      and measuring the big black-clad scary man
      who smiled with unusually white teeth in a dirty face
      Chains and brushes forged from steel he wore
      "Hi, do you remember me from last year ?"
      "No, the boy said
      but the priest has told a lot about you
      on Sundays at the church"

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Nancy Kaufman

Date: 7/4/2023 3:48:00 PM

Probably a shocking sight for one so little. Congratulations on such a well-crafted write. Enjoyed

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/7/2023 5:13:00 AM

- Thank you, Nancy :) - hugs

Brian Sambourne

Date: 7/4/2023 10:16:00 AM

A terrific poem, Anne-Lise. Your ending is speculative with ambiguity galore. Is the chimney sweeper as ominous as he seems? Is the little boy in peril or is the meeting innocent? A grand posting. Congratulations! Brian

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/4/2023 10:39:00 AM

- A little boy has many fantasies, Brian ... the priest's words about the devil have scared him ... maybe he had disobeyed ... who knows :) ?:) ... thanks for reading and your comment :) - hugs

Valsa George

Date: 7/3/2023 10:14:00 PM

Great ending. Children are so innocent and their response is so natural and unmeditated !All the Best. Love and hugs, Anne

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/7/2023 5:13:00 AM

- Thank you, Valsa :) - hugs

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 7/3/2023 2:12:00 PM

lol that is cute

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/7/2023 5:13:00 AM

- Thank you, Vie Rose :) - hugs

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/2/2023 10:00:00 PM

Mary Poppins comes to mind, a movie I never tire to watch every year. Great twist at the end. I loved it, dear sweet Anne Lise.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/7/2023 5:14:00 AM

- Thank you, Victor :) - hugs

Speaks Volumes

Date: 7/2/2023 9:44:00 PM

The innocence of a child, standing having a chat with ..... well you know who.. Loved your wise humor Anne-Lise. I sent you a lil note in Soup Mail All the best for the contest.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 7/7/2023 5:14:00 AM

- Thank you, Wendy :) - hugs