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Man and Woman

She is                                          He's                             
                          a woman                                      a fine man
                       with a pretty                                  within his big
                        face and an                                 head, he has a
                         attitude of                                     simple plan. 
                            purity                                          To woo her
                             and                                                 and to
                            grace.                                               soothe
               She has strong shoulders,                         her as much as
            where you can rest your head                     he can.  He gives
           between two succulent boulders.               from his heart as he
          She has wit and charm. With such                has from the very
          grace       she is surely        armed.             start. It's all in his
          Your        heart she will         take.              nature to reach out 
            But     she'll be your best      mis-            his hand and take her.  
             take. Her hips sway as you feel                But somehow as you 
                  your heart carried away.                  have seen, there's much
                  In no time at all you will      standing in between. He knows
                   feel her heat from your      he must alter his approach, gets
                      head to your feet.                          her a golden broach. 
                      When you're amid                           His legs start to
                      fleshy        thighs,                            quiver as her
                       you'll          emit                                 thighs                        
                       sexy          sighs                                make him
                       but             you                                  shiver. 
                       will             see                                  Yes she
                       what           they                                 yearns
                       all do          see,                                  him so,
                       a girl           that                                  but he
                       is so            very                                  might
                      womanly.       A woman in                      never        
                       three letter     high stilletto.                   know.                   
                        t                   t                                 because
                        o                  o                          she has to go.
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Contest:  Something Concrete
Hosted by:  Maureen McGreavy
Written 12/21/17

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 2/21/2018 9:16:00 PM
what a brilliant write Rhoda, so funny and true, it has me laughing because i'm in the office reading it at work and the ladies behind me can see....lol.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 2/21/2018 10:15:00 PM
I'm not sure what got into me the day I wrote that! (little humor there) Glad you liked it. Thanks for the visit.
Date: 1/23/2018 4:57:00 AM
An absolutely amazing poem -- Incredible amount of work!! My goodness, Rhoda, how long did it take to correctly format all of this? I truly am gobsmacked! I agree with Darlene it certainly is very clever. Love it! My very warmest regards as always, Rhoda. :) john
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/23/2018 5:10:00 AM
Your two time comments just mean that you really appreciate the work. It took me about 2 hours. I didn't lay out a picture first, just went from a vision in my head. I didn't write the poems first either. I made the woman first then John Gondolf suggested I make her a man so I did. I may try another one soon
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John Fleming
Date: 1/23/2018 4:59:00 AM
I notice I have already commented on this beforehand; however -- it is still brilliant!! :) j
Date: 1/21/2018 3:01:00 PM
All I can say about your poemis this .... I think that this was clever to write your poem this way. I have never seen a poem written this way. Wow! Have a nice day my friend.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/21/2018 5:01:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene. You are sweet. The poetry form is called 'concrete'. You write your words in the shape of what you are writing about. It's a difficult form, that explains the number of views. Try your hand at it. While it's challenging, it's also fun. Thank you for dropping by.
Date: 1/10/2018 3:21:00 AM
Rhoda, Another poetic format I've never seen. You've put a lot of effort into this. I must say I'm struggling to keep up with all the different types on here, that said, I'm learning loads too . Regards Tom
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/10/2018 9:06:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. I'm just getting used to some of the forms myself. On a laptop, at the top right of the main menu is a tab called "forms". It's been very helpful to me.
Date: 1/8/2018 8:11:00 PM
I cannot say that I am at all familiar with this poetic format, Rhoda. But what I can say is you certainly have put in a tremendous amount of work - wow!! Very well thought out - impressed! My very warmest regards. :) john
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/9/2018 4:42:00 AM
Thank you so much, John, for your generous compliments. I'm thrilled you enjoyed my concrete poem. I'm always grateful when you stop by to read my writing as your poems are awe inspiring and your talent, amazing.
Date: 1/6/2018 12:44:00 AM
So very well done Rhoda, I enjoy the concrete form. Yours is excellent with witty words to make it even more fun.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/13/2018 9:32:00 PM
My phone is not smart enough when I turn it sideways but I'm thankful you left that comment for others that have brilliant phones. Lol. I was happy to see this poem made it to the top 100. Honored. Thank you very much, James, for helping to get it there and for your encouraging comments
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James Inman
Date: 1/13/2018 3:53:00 AM
I'm sure you've already discovered this but turn the phone sideways and it should look OK, although, I would be careful viewing this one in public, lol. As PS tweaks there sight quite often the layout of shape poems becomes distorted and has to be adjusted. Don't be surprised if this happens.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/6/2018 11:45:00 AM
Thank you, James. I was a bit dismayed to see how the form comes across on my cell phone, much better when viewed on my laptop, lol. I appreciate your comment and am humbled that you take the time to visit. Thank you again, Dear.
Date: 1/4/2018 10:01:00 AM
WOW!! Rhoda this is amazing not only is it incredibly well constructed and brilliant in it's design it is so much fun to read. I was howling though when I saw the contour of the man nice touch. LMAO, nicely done Rhoda nicely done.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/4/2018 10:46:00 AM
Lol. Thanks, Edward. It was a challenge but a fun one. Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your friendship, kindness, and support.
Date: 12/27/2017 10:00:00 PM
Hi Rhoda, I was commandeered here by Cay Cay and Connie. Remarkable work and form. I guess they said so after reading my lateat which has similar theme but not as clever as some of your innuendo. My first vist to you and its a humdinger. Hugs Jannie
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/30/2017 1:38:00 AM
Thank you Jannie and a thank you to Cay Cay and Connie as well for promoting my oddball stuff. Lol. I'm sorry so late in responding but my job requires travel so I've been missing from the soup for a few days. I promise to get around and read and engage more after the holidays.
Date: 12/27/2017 5:22:00 PM
Wow Rhonda, this is simply brilliant! This would have taken me hours on end . Very impressive writing and shape! Outstanding work of art! : )
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/30/2017 1:36:00 AM
Thank you, Connie. I am humbled. It was a fun project. I'll try another and maybe this time the poetry will be much better. I kind of just wrote it as the shape in my mind dictated without any forethought. I can do better...and I will.
Date: 12/25/2017 11:54:00 AM
Very creative I'm impressed
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Date: 12/25/2017 12:27:00 PM
Thank you, Nathan!
Date: 12/24/2017 8:17:00 AM
This is just AWESOME Rhoda! A great poem by itself but you went and stepped it up a notch. The design is so creative and compliments your words perfectly. Again- this is AWESOME!
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/25/2017 11:01:00 AM
Thank you so much, James, for your generous words of support. Merry Christmas.
Date: 12/23/2017 7:47:00 PM
A wonderful blend of the verbal and the visual. A nice pairing of she & he. Great craft. Enjoyable, Rhoda:-)
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Date: 12/25/2017 11:02:00 AM
Thank you, Ram RV. Much appreciated. Merry Christmas.
Date: 12/23/2017 1:11:00 PM
brilliant how they are joined in word here ... amazement stays in the heart of a poet ... we are just awed ...
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Date: 12/25/2017 11:04:00 AM
Thank you so much, GG. I'll check your writing account very soon. I'm behind because of the holidays. Merry Christmas to you and yours.
Date: 12/23/2017 9:45:00 AM
Oh, no - I just 'honed' into the man's complete, cough ... shape
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/25/2017 11:05:00 AM
Lol. You're funny! Hugs.
Date: 12/23/2017 9:43:00 AM
I am blown away. TALENT. Could you be any more creative? This is awesome, beyond any words I have, Rhoda. A wow from me. I've never done this form and should I try, it would pale beside this. I hope some day there is concrete form contest so you can blow everybody away!, in a good way. Wow again ... CayCay
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/25/2017 11:06:00 AM
Awwww. CayCay! Your comments always make me smile. Thank you, Dear and merry Christmas
Date: 12/23/2017 8:42:00 AM
This is hilarious! And sooooo very cute! You have oudone yourself! I will look into more of your poems later! Busy day...work etc... hugs and kisses KIM
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/25/2017 11:07:00 AM
Thank you, Kim. I'm humbled. Merry Christmas, Dear. Hugs and kisses in return
Date: 12/22/2017 10:43:00 PM
Definitely a FAV for me. How in the world did you do that? Honestly I'm a little jealous of the man's peninsula south of the equator even if it is flat on the end!......Great poem and great display!!......pat
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 11:17:00 PM
Well, Patrick, lemme give you a quick lesson...the poem would be a better read if I had written it ahead of time, but it's easier if you just picture, in your head, the shape you want to accomplish and just ad lib the poem so that you can use the length of words you need, where you need them. Does that make sense? Don't be jealous of the mans physique. His butt is pointy Lol. Thanks for your support. I sincerely appreciate it.
Date: 12/22/2017 8:53:00 PM
haha, the side view of the man was brilliant. and the stiletto heels. So cool. I loved how you put this together, Rhoda. It was very fun to see and read.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 10:26:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. It was fun to make, but I can be done now. Lol. Besides, his butt looks a little big and pointed. :)
Date: 12/22/2017 2:04:00 PM
This is excellent in many ways, Rhoda! I love your wit, shapes and creativity!! Adam got his woman, but in your case it's the other way round:) ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 12/22/2017 8:03:00 PM
Thanks, Paul. Without the side view, I had no way of distinguishing male from female. A little foresight and maybe I could have given her a dress, but, meh....what fun would that be? Yes. Eve got her man. Lol. Thanks, Paul, for your constant kindness. You are a gem.
Date: 12/22/2017 12:09:00 PM
OMG, Rhoda, you are too funny! I am so happy she now has her man and I think he's happy to see her too...
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 12:38:00 PM
I'm sorry. Couldn't resist and I think you're right. Lol
Date: 12/22/2017 7:38:00 AM
that's it ... this done it ... why would you do this ... why did yo do that ... what's going on here ... did you take word art classes ... hey ... we are typing to you ... answer us ... what's going on here ... oh my eyes ... oh my mind ... oh my eyes have seen my mind blown ... ahh ... take me through this artesian gallery ... ahh ... was that calgon ... calgon for the mind ... what has you dropped under my eyelids ... even now when I blink ... visions of this woman ... shall remain in my dream
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 10:16:00 AM
Lol. No word art classes...Thank you for your praise, Molly.
Date: 12/22/2017 7:24:00 AM
A brilliant depiction..both the design and the content are awesome.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 10:18:00 AM
Thank you, Vijay. Only wish, in retrospect, that I had written the poem first as I had to ad lib based on the shape in my mind. Ah, well, lesson learned. I'll get a second go at it as John Gondolf wants a man to accompany her...how to make a man look like a man? Going to have to do a side profile, lol. Thanks for your continued support.
Date: 12/22/2017 4:21:00 AM
Incredible Rhoda! You words are so powerful and congratulations on doing a shape poem.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 10:20:00 AM
Thank you very much, Dear Kudzai. Much appreciated. Thank you for stopping by and for your kind words of encouragement
Date: 12/22/2017 3:57:00 AM
Wow, Rhoda, you depict the female of the species so amazingly well in both words and form. Very nice! I think you need to give your Woman a man. John
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 10:21:00 AM
Thank you, John. Okokokok. Your wish is my command but I'm going to have to do a side profile to make him look like a man. Be prepared! Lol. Thank you for your kind comments.
Date: 12/22/2017 12:55:00 AM
I can say this is amazing! this is so good I would love to see more, this is a fav, I loved this poem and the fact you made is artistic in form is even better!!!! In fact on of the best concrete I have ever read!!!!!!! Merry Christmas!!!!
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 12/22/2017 10:24:00 AM
I never wanted to try to do this again, but I have gained knowledge in doing so. John Gondolf has made a special request, thus I feel the urge, lol. Thank you very much, Arthur, for your support and encouragement. Merry Christmas to you and yours as well. Hugs.
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