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August-16- 2025

Marathon Mile.8. Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Mark Toney


 

Mind, like a deciduous forest
has lost all its foliage,
all leaves torn away
by the autumnal blasts.

The brain where great schemes were concocted
is now an abyss where spiders sway
It is bare – dismally barren
of all memories – sweet and sour.

Like a kite afloat in the boundless sky
moving nowhere, but as the wind directs,
cut out from the past, turned from the present
with the future yet to surge from the abyss
or like serpents intertwining,    
hissing in turmoil within the brain,
unable to sense the gusty blast,
or hear the whispering air,
dead to sounds that disturb,
deaf to songs that soothe,
like a phantom he moves weird,
drifting far away to a space and time impenetrable,  
with nothing to make the mind agog
or depress it to let out a sigh.

Loitering on roads without hurrying feet,
with no bliss coming on the way
to run or hasten to embrace
or fear to be missed sore.

Passing through dark labyrinthine tunnels,
forever barred with no exit,
churned in oblivion, oblivious of all,
he remains a spectral facsimile
of his onetime self, plummeting into a black hole.

The pulse of a heart beat
is all that keeps him alive,  
all else is dead…… !  

He lives with dreary nights ahead,
that shall not know another morrow!

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Date: 8/20/2025 1:15:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, soulful poet, you capture the despair of dementia with poetic finesse. I was especially struck by "like serpents intertwining,/hissing in turmoil within the brain,/unable to sense the gusty blast,/or hear the whispering air, dead to sounds that disturb,/deaf to songs that soothe" -oh the sadness and devastation of it all. Indeed, "the pulse of a heart beat/is all that keeps him alive,/all else is dead" -what a terrible plight to endure or witness. Congratulations for your success in Mark's contest. Your brilliant pen paints a heartbreaking portrait of dementia. Your vivid emotional imagery brings me there. Warmest wishes, my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/20/2025 4:56:00 AM
Back to say congrats on your placement Valsa
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Date: 8/19/2025 9:57:00 PM
Dementia is a horrible thing. Congrats on a marvelous win
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Date: 8/19/2025 7:56:00 PM
Valsa, this is a heartrending metaphorical description of the devastating effects of dementia. Congratulations on your third-place finish on Mile 8 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 9 has already started.
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Date: 8/19/2025 9:12:00 PM
What a pleasant surprise awaited me this morning. Thank you so much dear Mark for this great honor. I feel honored.
Date: 8/19/2025 7:29:00 PM
Congrats Valsa - your wording draws the reader into this world and makes it real and livable...
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Date: 8/18/2025 5:16:00 AM
Dementia is caused by so many different illnesses and effects so many people from all walks of life. Research is being done, new meds come out but still it is such a devasting illness. My mother, my husband's mother, and also my husband's father all suffered from it to a certain degree. My mother had organic brain disease and my husband's mother had Alzheimer's Disease. Thanks for sharing this from a perspective of one who has seen what it does to a person. Sara K
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Date: 8/16/2025 6:00:00 PM
your poem struck home with me, Valsa. Your imagery describes dementia in a deeply personal way...the feelings stirred are the ones I felt while my mother suffered from dementia. It truly made her a 'phantom in the breeze.' Exquisite poem. hugs, Sara
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Date: 8/16/2025 1:04:00 PM
Dear Valsa, I really think that the dementia imagery you conjured, from “spiders swaying” in the abyss to the “phantom drifting far away,” is devastatingly precise and beautiful. And yet, in your words, there’s a fierce compassion, a witness to what remains when all else fades. I had several family members who either had Dementia or Alzheimer's. Excellent descriptions! Blessings, My Dear Valsa, Daniel
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Date: 8/16/2025 12:33:00 PM
WOW!!! Your "Dementia" is a powerful write. I have friends with this and it is so sad. "Good Luck" Have a lovely day/weekend writing away...............
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Date: 8/16/2025 7:46:00 AM
Your words weave a vivid tale of lineage, stirring the heart with their lyrical grace, dear Valsa! When the mind takes its vacation, it leaves an emotional burden for those who hang around nearby. The physical being finds strength in the spirit's quiet resolve. Let's go seek the quiet, where thoughts may dwell, pure and unbroken,
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Date: 8/16/2025 7:02:00 AM
frightening images to evoke dementia, interesting poem close to depression, enjoyed my reading
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Date: 8/16/2025 5:11:00 AM
When the brain goes it's so difficult for those close. Watching them become another person altogether. You've poetically described the descent well Valsa. Hope this is only fictional
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Date: 8/16/2025 4:54:00 AM
I know...sad possibility we all face, as we age. With ourselves and loved ones. My mother went that way, a dear neighbor has begun to suffer -- fight to hold on to your mind. The physical can be supported by spiritual determination. Let us pray, let our minds remain whole, holy and perfect, in the protection of Christ. Amen. Blessings my friend. Quite a stirring poem!
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