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Breathing on Ashes Slope Premiere Contest Winner

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Written: July 19, 2025, for contest Sponsored by: Rob Carmack Quote "The eye goes blind when it only wants to see why" by Rumi ****************** I stood while Genesis breathed, a slope of cinders, forged from death. Youth splashed sludge on my skull kismet resonated ahead. I ventured beyond the silk of youth— It's homaloidal gilded ignorance that twinkled, such coins bestowed upon sages who sleep serenely. Years drifted by, and you—silent, unyielding—revealed to me a truth that seared my sight. Every heart, enshrouded in perfumed decay, bloomed hauntingly into the grotesque. What once appeared noble waned into a crass pantomime. My soul recoiled. Disgust surged as steam from my spine a silent scream echoing in the sanctuary. My spirit began to perceive— not with eyes, but through scars. The past stood trial, In the dunes of memory: red sand, marked with conviction I had carved it. unaware. Now the only way back resounds such a distant sonata: God calling, igniting a raw fire upon the canvas of my marrow. It will never be free. Redemption, such as art, always costs everything. Each season claimed something: a name, a promise, a breath. I rose once more. each time leaning deeper on the wood and nails of the betrayal. The books of Heaven are laden with mystery. I grasp betwixt lines— three measures of leaven, hidden in the folds of endurance. And belief— neither feeling, nor certainty— begins to underpin the slow unraveling of sorrow. I am not finished. The struggle It's never around victory— but through clinging fiercely to the Word when the world let's pass.

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Date: 7/27/2025 8:04:00 PM
This poem really hits deep — I love how it captures the struggle and doubt, but also that stubborn grip on faith. It feels honest and heavy but somehow hopeful too. Definitely a powerful ride!
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Date: 7/27/2025 3:36:00 AM
Exquisite Soul write, so delicate yet sure. “Igniting a fire on the raw canvas of my marrow” illustrates the depth of your connection to your own Divinity, Sotto. A fav for me.
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Date: 7/25/2025 2:40:00 PM
Dear Lasaad, your poem is a cascade of rich imagery and unique metaphors expressed in beautiful word choices and phrases that captivate and exhilarate my mind, heart and soul. What a poetic gem!! Congratulations for your golden trophy win in Rob's contest. Your mighty pen outshines the summer sun. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/25/2025 10:58:00 AM
Dearest Lasaad, this is a marvel of images and beautifully written phrases - "The books of Heaven are laden with mystery" is just one of so many that are striking in their wisdom and penetrating depth. I am deeply moved by the journey of "the Word" between Heaven and earth. Congratulations on your trophy win. I think this is one of your best poems. Definitely a fav for me. Sending you warm summer blessings, dear friend.
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Date: 7/25/2025 7:15:00 AM
Congratulation on your win. A beautiful flow of words and emotions.
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Date: 7/25/2025 5:46:00 AM
Sotto congrats on a thought provoking poem that is your usual brillance winning top honors!
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Date: 7/25/2025 5:26:00 AM
We can never know with complete certainty the wheat from the tares, but with this exceptional piece, you at least know the wheat. Thank You and congratulations.
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Date: 7/25/2025 5:36:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind comments. They make me feel modest. I'm quite moved that this poem spoke to you as "wheat" in a field where things are sometimes hard to understand. Your analysis reminds me that the best poetry helps us sort through the dark to find the bright grain. Thank you for your recognition. It means a lot to me.
Date: 7/19/2025 4:41:00 PM
each verse is powerful in and of itself. Your poem mesmerized me with its message and form. These words truly spoke to me: The books of Heaven are laden with mystery. I grasp betwixt lines— three measures of leaven, hidden in the folds of endurance. Best wishes with the contest. I'm sure it'll place well.
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Date: 7/19/2025 3:14:00 PM
Powerful poetry- the end speaks so much, Sotto. A privilege to read, truly
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