Tragedy

Tragedy (Sijo) 

On impulse I reacted to frenzied screams, shrill calls for help;
Ran towards the blazing house where flames rose high, but all in vain… 
A sudden wave of nostalgia sustains my reminiscence. 

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Tragedy (Sijo) 

On impulse [3] I reacted [4] to frenzied screams, [4] shrill calls for help; [4] 
Ran towards [3] the blazing house [4] where flames rose high, [4] but all in vain… [4]
A sudden wave of nostalgia [8] sustains my reminiscence. [7]

firesijo

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Crystol Woods

Date: 8/1/2024 10:30:00 AM

Wow... I've just realized how many forms of poetry you've written! I'm so impressed! I'm still learning the forms and loving every minute. :) this is beautiful, the language like a dream! Xo

Paul Callus
Date: 8/9/2024 2:19:00 PM

Thank you for your lovely comments, Crystol. Soup is definitely a good place where to try out new forms. ~ Have a lovely weekend xox paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/5/2024 8:02:00 AM

What a sad write. One is left wondering how it started and who got left behind

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2024 2:32:00 PM

Exactly, Eileen. A short poetry form such as this one allows the reader freedom to surmise and glean what is hidden between the lines. Thank you for stopping by. Hugs // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 3/11/2024 2:39:00 PM

I missed this contest but it surely must have been a big winner. I see that like me, you don't visit Soup very often - really hope you're well, my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2024 8:36:00 AM

Thank you Jack. Unfortunately we can't win them all :) so I made do with an A/N. :) Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/4/2024 11:22:00 AM

Dear Paul, my long lost poet friend, your shining presence and poetry have been sorely missed. Your vivid sensory and emotional imagery is harrowing. Your last line is a poignant finale. Sometimes all we have left are our memories. I appreciate the desperation and sadness revealed in the beauty of your impactful brevity. I hope all is well with you and yours, my dear friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 2/7/2024 1:12:00 PM

Hello dear Susan. I'm afraid nowadays our paths do not cross as much as we'd like them to, but we both know that life is often bringing us new challenges which we just cannot ignore. ~ Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments which I truly appreciate. I hope you and your loved ones are keeping well. As for your writing, keep on spinning straw into gold :) Warm regards and hugs, my friend // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 1/19/2024 3:09:00 PM

I got chills down my spine at the vivid imagery whilst reading your poem. i really should try this form now Paul, thanks for sharing your expertise:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 1/20/2024 8:48:00 AM

Thank you, Jan. I'm trying to get back slowly into the groove. And yes, I would like Soup administration to take a more professio0nal attitude by providing proper guidlines for different poetry forms; unfortunately we tend to follow blindly unless we seek help elsewhere. ~ Hugs and regards to all at home // paul

Ink Empress

Date: 1/18/2024 3:01:00 AM

Dear Paul, its always good to read your profound work, gives me an idea on how to do these forms properly too. And i felt like through your well crafted words i saw this tragedy unfold. Sometimes those tragic moments remain imprinted within our mind and subconsciously too we react, and this depicts that so very well. I love the sudden twist too in the last line. Pleasure reading your work dear paul. Its a fave for me definitely. Sending you light always. Best wishes for the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 1/18/2024 3:19:00 AM

Hi Empress! It's a pleasure to read these encouraging comments which you deliver with such sincerity. Glad that my poem has served its purpose in more ways than one :) Thank you for a lovely visit (and the fav). Warm regards // paul

Lisa Ricci

Date: 1/14/2024 3:16:00 AM

Hello Paul. Good Morning. Yes your words describe tragedy with vivid imagery of the moment and scene through your chosen subject of fire. Thank you as always for sharing your skilled talent. Have a wonderful morning and day. Peace and Blessings always as well. (smile)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/18/2024 2:13:00 AM

Good morning Lisa! Your thoughts on my poem are a pleasure to read; as always you take the time to read and understand what the poet has in mind....thank you! Warm regards & Blessings // paul