The Hollow of Farewell

Watching the empty streets
As a heavy rain wash the dirty town.
Deep darkness drape the drives
That lead to dead ends.

Drafts of wind dash hanging pots,
Ruin is the reign of the time.
She barely breathed a farewell.
No whisper weaving a soft adieu
Not even a hug or a parting kiss.

My heart echoes a hollow hum.
It beats like the harsh wind outside.
Life is so hollow, so non-descript.
And sleep has fled.  I’ll find no rest.

Sorrow does not sleep. Shadows fill my room.
No moonlight penetrates the heavy drizzling clouds.
Suddenly I leave my forlorn house
And wander right into the rain.  Wet and cold,
I feel cleansed and I return, the past washed away.
That night I slept deeply.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025


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Date: 7/27/2025 7:52:00 PM
So sad to lose the one you love. Keep writing Victor, it’s healing… Beryl
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Date: 7/27/2025 4:41:00 PM
Let the pain wash away, a new dawn will rise with all the sweetness lost to the rain Victor. This was a beautiful write my friend.
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Date: 7/24/2025 2:25:00 AM
Very emotional...dynamic poetry. "She barely breathed a farewell. No whisper weaving a soft adieu Not even a hug or a parting kiss." -- Wow. I can relate...tore my heart apart. You get a FAV from me. Blessings my friend.
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Date: 7/23/2025 3:28:00 PM
Powerful poetry, Victor. The past can truly, feel heavy and dirty, my friend. Let it wash away and enjoy the light of a new day! Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 7/23/2025 2:23:00 PM
This is so poignant, Victor. Gosh it's been a while. Have you been around lately?
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Date: 7/23/2025 7:38:00 AM
Dear Victor, Your poem reached me like that heavy rain you describe drenching, cleansing, and somehow quietly hopeful. O' the loneliness of empty streets and silent goodbyes, the raw ache of a heart echoing hollow hums. Yet beneath the shadows and the cold, there’s a remarkable tenderness in your final lines of surrendering to the rain, allowing it to wash away the past, and finally finding rest. Summer Blessings, Dear Victor, Daniel
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Date: 7/23/2025 12:14:00 AM
How is ya, my favorite Victor in the whole world? I almost cried, this is emotive in such a tender way and really shows off your poetry skills. The imagery delivers feel that jumps right into the reader's heart. There are so many impressive lines! Is this for a contest? All the best, all the days ... CayCay
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Date: 7/22/2025 10:43:00 AM
Very well written. I can feel the cleansing :)
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Date: 7/22/2025 10:06:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your "The Hollow of Farewell" write. Love your line, "Sorrow does not sleep." So very true... After a heavy rain everything has been washed cleaned. I have missed reading your amazing poems. It was great to see you here. "Please" stay..... Hope you are ok... Have a blessed day writing away...............
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Date: 7/22/2025 10:04:00 AM
This had a haunting tone to it - but it ended well, and I'm glad. Rain can be so soothing. Beautiful.
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Date: 7/22/2025 9:26:00 AM
The tone of the poem was heart wrenching till coming to the conclusion. The ending stanza is like light in darkness. The cleansing rain has washed all despair away and mind has become calm and peaceful with a night's deep sleep. Enjoyed your beautiful poem, dear Victor. Happy to see you back.
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Date: 7/22/2025 9:14:00 AM
Hi Victor--been a while since I was on PS...wanted to drop by and read one of your poems. Rain is cleansing physically and metaphorically. Enjoyed the read & have a pleasant day. Sara
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Date: 7/22/2025 6:39:00 AM
The cleansing effect of rain washes the despair, Very nicely penned
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Date: 7/22/2025 6:24:00 AM
Victor, the addition of your acronyms highlights the emotion of your lines! I love how the rain cleansed the past for you to start anew! A beautiful read! Happy Tuesday!
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Date: 7/22/2025 5:44:00 AM
Dear Victor, how hauntingly beautiful this poem is. Wow. A masterpiece. My new favourite poem. "Sorrow does not sleep" is a very powerful line. How are you doing? I missed your presence here on PS. Best, Anne
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Date: 7/22/2025 5:17:00 AM
Dearest Victor, this is hauntingly beautiful—filled with quiet grief and aching solitude, yet ending with such a powerful moment of release. The image of walking into the rain as a form of emotional cleansing is incredibly moving. You’ve captured how sorrow clings to us… and how sometimes, even nature seems to understand. A fave ...Hugs
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Date: 7/22/2025 3:38:00 AM
Victor, your poem is full of emotion and the sorrow of lost love. Rain can be cleansing and refreshing, a change of perspective, a new beginning.
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Date: 7/22/2025 2:46:00 AM
A cleansing rain. I guess it matched your mood of sadness and despair. I feel for you in this time of your life with your loss cutting so deeply. Sara K
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Date: 7/22/2025 2:42:00 AM
- I have missed your poems, my friend :) - Feeling a state of melancholy subdued in the soft summer night, Victor - hugs
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Date: 7/21/2025 10:12:00 AM
It's so nice to have you back, Victor! I've missed your wonderful poems, and I hope you are well. This moody poem captures the interest and imagination, and as usual, the ending does not disappoint. Blessings.
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Date: 7/21/2025 5:45:00 AM
So glad to see your accepting comments again! Are you doing okay? You’ve been in my thoughts. Enjoyed your poem, so dismal but then going straight away into the storm, feeling cleansed, sleeping well.
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Date: 7/21/2025 5:28:00 AM
Nothing like a good rain cleanse I always say. This melancholic piece has a redeeming end to it. Nice
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