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She Dances

She dances she glances 
Beyond her shoulder 
She peers 
Looking back 
Her beautiful smile 
She poses in the mirror  

He weighs his chances
Returns her glances
Then whiffs
Of cheap scent
Reveal a fake smile
In shattered reflection

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Eileen Manassian Date: 6/12/2024 11:24:00 PM Ahhhhh... easy to be fooled. Not easy to recover. Great write. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/25/2024 2:26:00 AM Yes, Eileen, once we form a positive image of somebody, it comes as a shock to find that we've been duped. I don't class myself as a stupid person, but I admit that it's happened to me.... Thank you for stopping by, my friend. Hugs // paul

Yolanda Nicholsen Date: 9/12/2023 3:21:00 AM adorable write enjoyed Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/14/2023 12:25:00 AM Thank you, Yolanda. A pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Bill Baker Date: 9/11/2023 5:19:00 PM Nive collaboration from you two, Paul. It sounds very real, no pulled punches in this one. Thanks for visiting and commenting on my poetry, my friend. Bill Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/14/2023 12:14:00 AM Thank you, Bill. My life is full to the brim (overflowing, I would say), but I make it a point to come and visit friends at Soup the first opportunity I get! ~ Regards // paul

Charmaine Chircop Date: 9/6/2023 12:37:00 PM What it is ,is not necessarily what it seems,so we shouldn't be fooled by appearance s or sweet talkers..Fantastic post Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/14/2023 12:04:00 AM Thank you for stopping by with lovely insightful comments, Charm. Glad you enjoyed this collaboration with Rick Parise who wrote the 1st stanza as a prompt to his contest. ~ Warm regards // paul

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/9/2023 7:49:00 AM Whoa!! All is not good in this world of fake and shattered. I enjoyed reading it though. I think that is the way life is sometimes some people are real and kind even if they can't afford fake perfume. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 7/10/2023 5:26:00 AM Your points all make sense, Sara. I believe that it's the intention that counts most in the things we do. ~ Thank you for your pleasant visit, my friend. Regards // paul

Lisa Ricci Date: 7/4/2023 3:13:00 AM Good Morning Paul. Hello. The entry has a sad voice and tone not to mention a marvelous title which makes this entry wonderful poetry. Thank you both for sharing your poetic talents. Have a wonderful morning and day. Blessings always. (smile) Congratulations to both authors Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 7/4/2023 11:10:00 AM May I thank you in the name of Rick and myself, Lisa. Your lovely feedback is truly appreciated. ~ Regards & Blessings // paul

Gary Radice Date: 7/3/2023 12:27:00 PM Congratulations to both Rick and yourself for a piece that had me reflecting on its meaning. Mirrors can distort and help reflect one's thoughts too. Just my take. Cheers - Gary Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 7/4/2023 11:01:00 AM Thank you, Gary; your comments are a good interpretation of what the poet had in mind, based on mirrors and reflection. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues Date: 6/28/2023 1:22:00 PM Take time for circumspection, not meanness nor unwise pickiness. Don’t be caught in the web of her mirror. Catch the cheap scent and fake smile before you are trapped. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/28/2023 2:24:00 PM Prudence and attention are both necessary if we want to avoid surprises in life. Thank you for stopping by with sound comments, Kim. ~ Regards // paul

Robert Lindley Date: 6/26/2023 7:17:00 AM An excellent addition to the very fine opening stanza of Rick Parise, my good friend. God bless.. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 12:30:00 PM Thank you, Robert. So pleased to have you stopping by, my friend. Regards & blessings // paul

Sneha Rv Date: 6/26/2023 5:57:00 AM a most unique complement and entry to the seemingly simple first verse. it's like there is a mirror right through the middle! all the Best in the contest dear mentor . I hope you are all well... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 12:22:00 PM Dear Sneha!! What a pleasure to have you visiting my humble abode! You have been an avid writer and learner since such a young age! So pleased that your pen has not gone rusty during these past years :) ~ Best regards // paul

Sotto Poet Date: 6/25/2023 4:31:00 PM Paul, your poem was truly delightful! I must commend you on your remarkable talent. Congratulations on your achievement. This is my inaugural comment on your exceptional poetry, and I am eager to continue following your future work. Warmest regards. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 12:19:00 PM Thank you for your genuine comments, Sotto. I have noticed your comments on the posts of others, and they are insightful and always make sense. Glad you stopped by. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/25/2023 2:43:00 PM wow, yours is deep and very very good Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 12:15:00 PM Thank you, Andrea...all the best to you // paul

Paula Goldsmith Date: 6/25/2023 10:37:00 AM A creative write. Good Luck. I also did this one. Have a great day/week............ Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 12:09:00 PM Thank you, Paula. Hope your week is going by smoothly :) Regards // paul

Victor Buhagiar Date: 6/25/2023 8:32:00 AM Paul, you have enough experience to discern that it is the character that counts. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 12:05:00 PM Exactly, Victor; if we're not careful, we could easily be taken in by outer appearance. Best regards // paul

Vijay Pandit Date: 6/25/2023 4:37:00 AM Your part of the poem complements perfectly the essence of the first stanza. I like the clever turn in the ending lines. Best to you, Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 11:59:00 AM Thank you for the feedback, Vijay. Much appreciated. Regards // paul

Jan Allison Date: 6/25/2023 1:59:00 AM Beautiful in its sadness Paul - a reflection on life sometimes I guess:-( hugs jan xx Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 6/27/2023 11:49:00 AM Thank you, Jan. What shows up in the mirror is not always what we make it out to be! Rick's simple words are meant for us to think outside the box. Hugs // paul

Paul Callus Date: 6/25/2023 1:32:00 AM This poem has been written in collaboration with Rick Parise who wrote the 1st stanza. Login to Reply