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Joseph's Double Swap Contest  ~  July 13, 2025

On Golden Shores

On golden shores waves were crashing
Beams of sunlight, I saw flashing
and stopped rowing. I stilled my oars.
Waves were crashing on golden shores

Gulls shrieked while the wind was blowing
I stilled my oars and stopped rowing.
Morning skies turned blue as dawn peeked
While the wind was blowing, gulls shrieked.

When daylight broke, I thought of you.
As dawn peeked, morning skies turned blue,
And I recalled when last we spoke.
I thought of you when daylight broke.

It'd been too long.  I was appalled
when last we spoke, and I recalled
my words seemed to be a swan song.
I was appalled. It'd been too long.

I felt remorse upon the sea.
A swan song, my words seemed to be.
Reality hit with full force.
Upon the sea, I felt remorse.
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Date: 8/9/2025 1:51:00 PM
Very lovely, Lin. Belated congrats here. This form was difficult!
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/9/2025 3:02:00 PM
Challenging but fun. Thanks, Andrea.
Date: 8/6/2025 7:55:00 AM
Congrats on your win Lin, Very nicely done
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/6/2025 9:11:00 AM
Thanks so very much for the recognition, Joseph.
Date: 7/13/2025 2:28:00 PM
Lin, your talent and ability to do things like this never cease to amaze. I particularly like how I was anticipating a happier ending given the setting. Nonetheless, it was a very enjoyable read. I could practically feel the water and scene. Smiles!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/14/2025 7:00:00 AM
Not all endings are happy ones, Duke. The realities of life never allow fairytale endings for everyone. Thank you for the compliment. ;-)
Date: 7/13/2025 10:18:00 AM
You rose well to the challenge Lin, just checked the requirements, I don't think I'd have the patience. Good in the contest. Tom
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/13/2025 10:37:00 AM
It's the challenge that prompted me to write this one, Tom. I've not placed well in the past in Joseph's contests, but I write about topics that interest me. I suppose that makes me a self-imposed something or other. ;-)
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