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Edward Ibeh's 'Pick-A-Title, Vol 52 Contest...11 June 25

Intrusive Thoughts

Dark ramblings play in my head
trying to snuff what was declared;
knots of words litter hazy thoughts
on bite of evening as I plead for silence.
But a litany of defenses intrudes my space
as I blindly look up, framing a starlight
to assuage this deep tug of anguish,

where own feelings are not heard,
barbed thoughts grating, welling
each time you explode...unaware
of my need for some respect-

Yes, I may be a  woman used
to bold commands which  scar me
like a wounded, street animal
reproached without familial fairness--
yet only you must bear the consequence
when I free these hands, screaming
back until we both bleed.
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2025


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Date: 6/15/2025 11:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful write. Life is not always easy. Have a blessed day with your win...........
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Date: 6/15/2025 11:09:00 AM
Wow Nette a powerful write a worthy winner!
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Date: 6/15/2025 5:29:00 AM
Oh my, sis! Pierceing my heart. Another poem with highest calibre from you. Hearfelt Congratulations on your win! Hugs
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Date: 6/14/2025 6:52:00 PM
This poem of yours packs a wallop, Nette. Your first stanza is powerful! Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!
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Date: 6/14/2025 5:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your win for this powerful painful poem!
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Date: 6/11/2025 12:26:00 PM
Hello Nette, I agree with Paige Hind, it does hurt. Hugs. /Darlene/
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Date: 6/10/2025 5:49:00 PM
Ugh, this one hurts, Nette. Hate to see you like this. A very feeling poem. The end is powerful.
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