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Her Thoughts

Inconsistency leads to so many questions
Will I ever receive an honest confession?
Secret stalking seems to be one of your obsessions
Why am I treated like one of your possessions?
Affection you portray, I’ll met with my rejection
Is your belief based on love my secret election
Are thoughts in my mind guided in that direction
Feelings by design for closer inspection
When I mention my dreams you seem to snicker
And a polite introjection pulls a certain trigger
Untitled our story still remains
As I burn this ink into this page
Soaking past pages in the sea
Watching them sink while shyness flees
To one day destroy your demon and mine
Draw me closer as two hearts entwine
Under the sweet warmth of a new dawn sun
As our souls intertwine there is no reason to run
Our opalescent lives have just begun
Burning to our core there is now fire in our eyes
Let the cleansing rain fall from the skies
Like a Phoenix we will rise in recital
Sing a song I don’t want to title 
   

(My rewrite of a poem called Jinxed)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 11/4/2023 12:51:00 PM
Bro you got friendzoned All my condolences
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Date: 10/23/2023 4:56:00 PM
I loved the last line- so original! An enjoyable read!
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Date: 10/23/2023 1:16:00 PM
Wow so well described in this awesome poem. love phyl
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Date: 10/22/2023 8:04:00 PM
Some of your images are so awesome in this poem. I really loved those last two lines. How they tied up the whole poem.
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Date: 10/22/2023 7:56:00 PM
From the ashes of things broken, Then rising like the Phoenix to start anew, Very nicely penned
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Date: 10/21/2023 1:17:00 PM
A very well written poem full of depth and emotion. Profound thoughts throughout and great rhyming. Particularly love the lines, ‘As I burn this ink into this page’ ‘ Soaking past pages in the sea’ and the poignant last two lines. A great write. Really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you :):)
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Date: 10/20/2023 11:08:00 PM
Incredible how a person can never give up when not wanted. Fortunately, I never had that situation, Blessings.
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Date: 10/20/2023 11:35:00 AM
Hi TS, run away from anyone trying to steal your dreams, The world is filled with people who snicker. No, I’m not kidding, I had to fight hard to get what I want and you know what I got what I wanted. I ran from partners who try to walk on my dreams and glad I did. Great lovers make you rise like a Phoenix.negative extra baggage with you?, drop them. You are a plus in my life. Pangie
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Date: 10/19/2023 8:47:00 PM
This is a very heartfelt and evocative poem, reflecting so much angst, vulnerability and ache. All these questionings that you've described here are very painstaking and brings to the surface, a sense of introspection for all the inconsistencies prevailing in the connection.. Yet, there's still hope in the end that all the demons will be cleansed away and there will be a new dawn.. A wonderful write, truly.. Very deep..
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