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September 30, 2023

~ Fourth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Autumn
Sponsor: Regina McIntosh

~ First Place ~
Contest: Quatern - Old or New Poetry
Sponsor: Joseph May
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Autumn - a Citrine Leaf

A citrine leaf in lingered lilt
did savor breeze of sapphire whisk
as Autumn’s honey-secrets spilt.
A hopscotch star.. an ember brisk,

she sighed and fell— then took her chance!
a citrine leaf in lingered lilt
with wind-a-whirl in saffron dance
below the western cirrus gilt.

Before the winds began to wilt
and aspen whispers rose a wail,
a citrine leaf in lingered lilt
did fly where camp-fire-clouds grew pale—

where songs are spun from angel dreams,
their rapture wrapped her like a quilt,
no longer needing rhinestone streams,
a citrine leaf in lingered lilt.

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Paige Hind Date: 3/20/2024 7:18:00 PM Ah, to embrace the unknown of reality- with the 'lilt'- gorgeous- GORGEOUS. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/22/2024 4:55:00 PM Dear Paige, indeed, your poet's soul reads into the heart of my poem with clarity. Sometimes you need to take a leap of faith, sometimes you need to live the dream, sometimes you just need to let go, flow and fly with the winds of change. Your gifted poetic presence lights up my page.. thank you my friend.. your kindness is deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Paige Hind Date: 3/20/2024 7:18:00 PM Of course, this had to be a winner- :)

Paul Callus Date: 12/12/2023 1:41:00 AM How could I have missed this beautiful Quatern, dear Susan! Like a gem-studdied tiara it contains a richness that is not easy to describe. I doubt if ever a leaf received such a captivating tribute as this one! The technical elements have definitely not gone unnoticed (alliteration, imagery, figurative language, etc). ~ Congratulatios on placing 1st my friend. Warm regards & Hugs // paul Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 12/22/2023 8:17:00 AM Dear Paul, please forgive my late reply to your heartwarming comments. Fortunately, life has been overflowing the brim with all good things, but keeping me busy and away from the computer. I am thrilled by the richness of your treasured thoughts.. your critique brings smiles! The nature of leaves seem to be a poetic focus for me. I bask in the sunny pleasure of receiving your kind congrats and precious feedback.. I continue to learn.. your poetic friendship and mentorship is truly encouraging and appreciated. Warmest wishes to you and your for a happy Holiday season filled with peace and joy.. ~Susan

Sotto Poet Date: 12/5/2023 6:56:00 PM Dearest Susan, Your sensitivity, kindness, and poetic brilliance astound me. Your poem is exquisite, and your brilliance shines through in every line of this fall poem. Your imagery is stunning, and your diction is flawless. This is one of my personal favorites. Hearty Congratulations on your well-earned win. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 12/6/2023 6:13:00 PM Dear Lasaad, it is a thrill and an honor to receive such lovely praise from you, as you are a poetry friend and a gifted poet that I hold in high esteem. I am so glad to know that my humble poem is one of your personal favorites. Your inspiring thoughts are treasured my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring Date: 12/4/2023 7:04:00 AM My dear, inspirational poetic friend Susan- I knew this would be a winner! Many congratulations on your win! You are my poetic heroine! So happy to see your name at the top. Keep inspiring us all. Love and hugs xx Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 12/4/2023 5:39:00 PM Dear Christina, my sweet, poetically gifted friend, I receive your lovely words with gratitude and joy! I am humbled by your treasured thoughts and deeply touched by your kindness. Thank you for having faith in my poem and for your heartwarming congrats. Your golden pen shines wherever you spill your enchanting ink! You are a poetic luminary, my dear friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Janice Canerdy Date: 12/3/2023 6:37:00 PM Such lovely descriptions, Susan. CONGRATS on your win! Janice Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 12/3/2023 6:41:00 PM Dear Janice, it's so nice to see you. Thank you for your gracious words and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Joseph May Date: 12/3/2023 8:26:00 AM Beautifully penned Susan, Congrats on your win Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 12/3/2023 6:20:00 PM Dear Joseph, I'm thrilled that you thought well of my poem and honored by my poem's placement in your wonderful contest. Thank you! I'm honored to share the podium with the many gifted poets/poetesses listed in the standings. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Hilo Poet Date: 10/17/2023 8:24:00 PM Susan, once again, your generous words have long brimmed over my cup, and its effects are equivalent to a deluge. A Fave this be, my friend! Aloha, William Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/18/2023 5:21:00 PM Aloha William! I'm thrilled by your beautiful response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me and for the high honor of your fave. It's wonderful to see you back again! Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Regina Mcintosh Date: 10/16/2023 4:59:00 AM Amazing writing. Just love this. Congrats and thank you so much for entering the contest. Much love and blessings, Gina Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/17/2023 4:54:00 PM Dear Gina, thank you for the honor of my poem's placement in your esteemed contest. The contest prompt was wonderful. Your lovely comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated, as is your sponsorship. Warmest wishes and hugs my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Karen Jones Date: 10/15/2023 8:50:00 PM Back to say congrats on a win! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/17/2023 4:51:00 PM Dear Karen, your return visit is a delight! Thank you for your kind congrats. Your poetic presence is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Unseeking Seeker Date: 10/15/2023 8:39:00 PM Captivating poetry from an ethereal realm! A clear fav, Susan and warmest congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/17/2023 4:49:00 PM Dear US, your gracious visit is received with joy! Thank you, I am inspired by your lovely comments and honored by your fav. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jan Allison Date: 10/15/2023 5:30:00 PM your talent shines from every line susan, an absolutely delightful autumnal poem, many congrats on your win:-) :-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/17/2023 4:45:00 PM Dear Jan, I am both humbled and honored by your lovely response to my poem and for your kind congrats. Thank you my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Juliet Ligon Date: 10/10/2023 8:35:00 PM Your descriptions are gorgeous, and your poem flows seamlessly. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/13/2023 6:25:00 PM Dear Juliet, your gracious visit is a delight. Thank you for your beautiful comments. They are received with appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Joseph May Date: 10/10/2023 7:31:00 AM Wow, It was a joy to read your beautiful poem Susan, A Fave Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/13/2023 6:27:00 PM Dear Joseph, I appreciate your lovely response to my poem. Thank you for your heartwarming words and for the high honor of your fave. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Janice Canerdy Date: 10/10/2023 6:30:00 AM Susan, your quatern is excellent in every respect~~rhyme, meter, descriptions, and wording of the repeat line! Janice Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/13/2023 6:29:00 PM Dear Janice, I'm thrilled by your lovely response to my poem. Thank you for your beautiful and uplifting comments. Your visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Hiya Sharma Date: 10/8/2023 7:11:00 PM Oh my, dearest Susan, this poem has compelled me to save it in my FAVs! I am truly awestruck by the mellifluous cadence with which this flows whilst also serving as the source of story that narrates itself with so much depth and emotions.."a citrine leaf in lingered lily" Who stays resilient through every storm of life and then finally finding solace. Your use of colours has just made me go wow with such eloquent descriptions! "Autumn’s honey-secrets", "sapphire whisk", "saffron dance" Gorgeous Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/14/2023 8:52:00 AM Dearest Hiya, it is I, who is enchanted by the generous kindness that flows freely from your poetic heart. I am thrilled by your lovely response to my humble poem, and I am truly honored by the distinction of your fav. Thank you for finding beauty within my verse, I'm filled with gratitude for your gracious visit and for your shining light. The warm glow you cast is golden and cherished. Warmest wishes dear poetess and sweet friend.. ~Susan Hiya Sharma Date: 10/8/2023 7:13:00 PM "camp-fire-clouds grew pale—", "aspen whispers rose a wail", "songs are spun from angel dreams", "rhinestone streams" These lines are so graceful and enchanting, dear poetess.. I'm sure that it's a top take for the contest, keep shining and inspiring us, I always enjoy reading your beautiful poems :)

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 10/8/2023 11:27:00 AM - "where songs are spun from angel dreams, their rapture wrapped her like a quilt" ... how beautifully described :) - A wonderful poem, Susan :) - Winner wishes for you :) - hugs Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/14/2023 8:55:00 AM Dear Anne-Lise, thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts and "winner wishes" with me. Both your poetic talent and your warm generosity are deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Ink Empress Date: 10/7/2023 7:45:00 AM This is stunning!always a poem with gems in them adds so much beauty. Citrine a powerful gem, also love the rhymes and descriptive diction uve used here talented poetess. You have an exquisite way of expressing and weaving words. “Honey secrets spilt” love that and also “ songs are spun from angel dreams” you’ve left me in awe and speechless with how youve paired words together, and created imagery, rhinestone streams! I can see the citrine leaf dancing as campfire clouds grew pale! Impeccable! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/14/2023 9:01:00 AM Dear Empress, your precious thoughts are as golden as your exquisite poetry! Thank you for sharing your time with my poem and for finding beauty in my verse. I am inspired and uplifted by your shining presence and truly cherish your rich comments. I'm so very pleased to know you enjoyed my poem, dear poetess and sweet friend. Your gracious visit is received with joy and gratitude. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley Date: 10/7/2023 7:11:00 AM My dear friend, I came back on early and posted an old poem I wrote back in 1974. One to be a three-part series when I return here. Decided to see if you presented new poetry and I found this truly illustrious new gem!!! One that could be by written by Byron or Keats, But was your superbly crafted poetry instead!! A new fav for me! God bless you.. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/9/2023 9:29:00 AM My wonderful friend, I am thrilled by your response to this piece! Your mention of two of my favorite poets in relation to my poem both humbles and honors me. Thank you, dear Robert, your beautiful comments are truly uplifting as is the distinction of your fav. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Charles Messina Date: 10/7/2023 5:38:00 AM How beautiful is this! I'll tell you how...beautiful enough for a top win in any contest :) BOL, Susan. Although, you don't need luck. Love this! Warmest wishes, dear friend. ~Charlie Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/9/2023 9:25:00 AM Dear Charlie, your visit is a delight! I'm so happy to know you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your beautiful response this piece. Your heartwarming words both inspire and encourage me. Warmest wishes, my poetic friend.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring Date: 10/6/2023 11:26:00 PM Dear Susan, every delightful poem I read of yours takes my breath away and this is no exception. I am truly in awe of your poetic talent. I find you so inspiring and it makes me search deep within my own poetic heart to express more and improve, improve! This is absolutely divine - line after line of exquisitely penned imagery. You really are a master of all forms. It flows seamlessly. ‘ A hopscotch star … an ember brisk’ Glorious! Loved the last stanza. So enjoyed it. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/9/2023 8:41:00 AM Dear Christina, I am filled with gratitude for your gracious visit! Your poetic spirit flows so generously with light and kindness. The golden glow of your shining words adds luster to my humble poem that is not achievable on its own. Thank you, dear poetess, your inspiring thoughts are treasured and held in my deepest appreciation as is your exquisite poetry. That we find inspiration in each others poetry is indeed a gift, a shared stream that waters the bloom of poetic artistry. Let's both continue to "search deep", "express more and improve, improve!" - so beautifully said, my poetic friend. Warmest wishes with admiration and appreciation for you.. ~Susan Christina Bowring Date: 10/6/2023 11:27:00 PM An autumnal gift. My admiration, appreciation, to you dear poetic friend. Blessings for a wonderful weekend. Hugs and smiles xx :):)

Bill Baker Date: 10/6/2023 8:45:00 PM A fine poem in this form, Suze. Very good imagery and rhyming, my friend. Good luck in the contest! Bill Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/7/2023 8:53:00 AM Dear Bill, my poet friend, your lovely comments are heartwarming! Thank you for sharing your esteemed thoughts and wishes for good luck with me. They are, as always, held in my truest appreciation. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Tom Woody Date: 10/6/2023 7:14:00 AM "Where songs are spun from angel dreams". My fave line. You're so good at every form and such an overall awesome poetess Susan Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/7/2023 8:49:00 AM Dear Tom, I am deeply touched by your lovely comments. Your esteemed thoughts are a thrill to receive as I consider you to be a truly unique and gifted poet. So glad to know that the "angel dreams" line resonated with you, my friend. Thank you for your uplifting visit and for the kindness you so freely share. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Dale Gregory Cozart Date: 10/4/2023 10:09:00 AM Amazingly graceful, Susan. What gorgeous words and meter. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/7/2023 8:43:00 AM Dear Dale, thank you! Your comments mean so much to me since they come from a poet whose gorgeous words and rhythmic meter I so admire. I've learned so much by reading your inspiring poetry, my friend, and your appreciation of my poetry is very uplifting. It's wonderful to see you gracing the poetic pages of PS once again. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Fading Star Silence Date: 10/1/2023 4:49:00 PM Wow..the words you weave is such a soothing and a beautiful solace to read..it brings me such serenity..falling deep into the imagery you create so breathtakingly..I am truly in awe of your poetic soul, my friend..feeling your words as I read..it truly leaves an imprint in my heart, dear beautiful Susan! Spread your beautiful light on and on..it def touches this soul! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/3/2023 8:49:00 AM Dear Fading Star, I am ever inspired and thrilled by your beautiful comments that have the power to lift my spirits to beyond the cumulus! Thank you for your heartfelt words, they are received with my truest appreciation. Your soulful gift with words generously extends beyond your PS pages to shine with utmost beauty upon mine. In gratitude, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One Date: 10/1/2023 12:34:00 PM You have mastered this form, just like you master so many other forms and poems.. a hopscotch star.. and ember brisk.. a lovely sentence and you really know how t o add that further impact with how you format and use punctuations... love that last stanza where songs are spun from angel dreams... so lovely .. excellent poem for the contest, good luck. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/3/2023 8:42:00 AM Dear Silent One, your uplifting presence and rich comments continue to inspire me to reach ever higher in my poetic journey to grow and find new ways of expressing myself. Your shining presence is a beacon, for not only myself, but for so many here who treasure both your deep, insightful feedback and your extraordinary poetry. Thank you my friend, your words and kindness are received with gratitude. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

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