Young Star

Above the red horizon
she peeps to smile at me,
with buds in her tossed hair
lighting her warm glances.

My fingers sketch young eyes,
distant- blue across the clouds
as we cuddle in spirit
dear baby, a star.




Rhoma Em
Shine With Your Naani 
for nette onclaud--- 19th of June,2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 4/28/2015 9:13:00 AM
Reading through your words gives a majestic result of creating expectations and at the same time meeting them. This is awesome considering the feat achieved in a few lines. Great write friend and please keep on letting your heart speak for us to learn and enjoy. A def 7
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Date: 7/4/2014 10:07:00 AM
Rhoma, Congratulations, in Nette's " SHINE WITH YOUR NAANI!!" Contest :) LINDA
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Date: 7/4/2014 7:28:00 AM
Heart wrenching!! many congrats on your win with this masterful Naani, Rhoma. bfn Lainie
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Date: 7/2/2014 7:54:00 AM
Congrats on your win,nicely done
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Date: 7/1/2014 4:09:00 PM
Congrats on a great win, Rhoma! Hugs.. Arlene
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Date: 7/1/2014 3:28:00 PM
i was stunned by the way this piece ended... now this is poetry, rhoma... thanks for gracing my contest and sweet congrats on your top win!.. huggs
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Date: 7/1/2014 3:21:00 PM
I just LOVE this one. What a unique and wonderful way to do the theme. BIG congrats.
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Date: 7/1/2014 1:09:00 PM
Hi Rhoma, big congratulations to you on this fabulous TOP win. Warmest regards.
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Date: 7/1/2014 12:26:00 PM
Beautiful top win RHOMA. Mohan
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Date: 7/1/2014 11:21:00 AM
Ohh! Lovely and touching. Congratulations Rhoma! // paul
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Date: 7/1/2014 11:07:00 AM
This does SHINE...congrats on your big win. BG
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Date: 7/1/2014 10:19:00 AM
Very pleasing picture you have created in the first stanza, Rhoma. Congrats on a fine win
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Date: 7/1/2014 9:57:00 AM
This is extremely beautiful my dear friend Rhoma. So love it and enjoyed. Many congratulations on your well-deserved top win! love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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